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Jewel in the Crown



The cable car proceeds, its old motif
on slender wire eyed by waiting queue -
So much it seems depends on thin belief -
We flew upon anonymous review.                    

Its window panes were dotted with the prints
that algid fingers left on hardened glass -
a fleeting mark of those who cared to call,
Then wiped away for tourists yet to pass.
                 
The sight - ineffable to say the least.
So beautiful that if you were to fall,
You'd only wish you had more time to feast
on vision, catch the magic of it all.

On blue-green ice like paper they were grown -
A hundred shards of crystalline along
the clear blue water, glamour of its own
reflecting cattle herd it lay among.


And at the centre of this paradise,
No sight but this could make me look away.
She stood on mountain's edge with dazzled eyes
that showed no sign of labour everyday.

It's what you need that takes you far from home,
And till you find it, midst existence roam


There she belonged on top of the world - my mother,
Standing apart, a star in the skies like no other.



Written Mother's Day

- Motif pronouced mo-teef

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 2/9/2018 4:37:00 PM
A superb write Sneha with exquisite rhythm and rhyme to express your beautiful content. Your last two lines are so touching - a wonderful tribute to your Mom. Congratulations on your lovely win. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
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Date: 2/8/2018 11:14:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Sneha! Great choice for the contest. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 2/5/2018 9:30:00 PM
I love how you wrapped up this delightful poem. Congrats on this winning poem, Sneha.
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Date: 2/5/2018 4:27:00 PM
Great choice for the contest Sneha, Congratulations on your placement in the contest, I am happy you entered and the poem will be showcased..
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Date: 8/10/2017 12:17:00 AM
Nice verse, Sneha. Sorry for my belated congratulations. Your meter is fascinating. I love the punchline. I've picked up a new word: algid. Ram
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Date: 8/9/2017 1:57:00 AM
Back again with belated congratulations, Sneha.....well done!! // paul
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Date: 8/2/2017 6:21:00 AM
Lovely! Congrats on a fine win, Sneha!
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Date: 8/1/2017 1:16:00 PM
Absolutely Lovely Sneha, Congratulations...
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Date: 8/1/2017 12:19:00 PM
Lovely imagery, which captures the scene so vividly. Congratulations on your high-placed win. Regards, John.
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Date: 8/1/2017 10:01:00 AM
You managed to capture the awesome beauty of this magical place with your enchanting words. It has such breathtaking beauty that you have conveyed so well. I see why this is a top winner Sneha. Congratulations!
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Date: 5/23/2017 6:00:00 AM
beautiful descriptive poem, well written - i particularly like the last two lines :) thank you for your comment on my work
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Date: 5/18/2017 9:29:00 PM
Superbly done my friend Sneha...all the best...^WW^
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Date: 5/18/2017 2:49:00 PM
what an elegant piece, sneva... i know the feeling; been to that place last year too... you are a poetic gem..huggs
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Date: 5/17/2017 12:51:00 PM
- This is beautiful, Sneha :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/17/2017 8:41:00 AM
That is incredible writing Sneha, I am awed! You are a talented writer :)
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Date: 5/17/2017 8:18:00 AM
Dynamite poetry, Sneha! I wish I could write like this! Thoroughly enjoyed it!
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Date: 5/15/2017 6:14:00 PM
wow, there was a blank verse contest and I think it is still going on. If this did not rhyme, it would be a great entry for it. Your meter is very well done, Sneha. I think you could adjust this and still be able to enter it into the mountaintop lake contest. It's so pretty.
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Date: 5/15/2017 3:20:00 PM
So beautifully written in this difficult meter, Sneha. You've painted a magnificent view and a lovely tribute to your dear mom. So nice to see you are back! 7, Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 5/15/2017 3:11:00 PM
Excellent, Sneha! You are a talented young lady, and I must also congratulate you on the capable use of Iambic Pentameter. #7+ Regards // paul
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Date: 5/15/2017 2:44:00 PM
How incredibly beautiful this is Sneha. I am sure your mother would beam with pride as she reads this lovely tribute. Blessings, Connie ; )
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