Jewel In the Crown

The cable car proceeds, its old motif
on slender wire eyed by waiting queue -
So much it seems depends on thin belief -
We flew upon anonymous review.                    

Its window panes were dotted with the prints
that algid fingers left on hardened glass -
a fleeting mark of those who cared to call,
Then wiped away for tourists yet to pass.
                 
The sight - ineffable to say the least.
So beautiful that if you were to fall,
You'd only wish you had more time to feast
on vision, catch the magic of it all.

On blue-green ice like paper they were grown -
A hundred shards of crystalline along
the clear blue water, glamour of its own
reflecting cattle herd it lay among.


And at the centre of this paradise,
No sight but this could make me look away.
She stood on mountain's edge with dazzled eyes
that showed no sign of labour everyday.

It's what you need that takes you far from home,
And till you find it, midst existence roam


There she belonged on top of the world - my mother
Standing apart, a star in the skies like no other.


Written Mother's Day

- Motif pronouced mo-teef
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Gauthier Avatar
February 6, 2021 at 7:39 PM
So glad to find this lovely poem published in the 2020 PS Anthology, Sneha ~
Ashley Avatar
February 9, 2018 at 4:37 PM
A superb write Sneha with exquisite rhythm and rhyme to express your beautiful content. Your last two lines are so touching - a wonderful tribute to your Mom. Congratulations on your lovely win. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Roper Avatar
February 8, 2018 at 11:14 PM
Congratulations on your win, Sneha! Great choice for the contest. Hugs Eve ~`*
Gauthier Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 9:30 PM
I love how you wrapped up this delightful poem. Congrats on this winning poem, Sneha.
One Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 4:27 PM
Great choice for the contest Sneha, Congratulations on your placement in the contest, I am happy you entered and the poem will be showcased..
R. V. Avatar
August 10, 2017 at 12:17 AM
Nice verse, Sneha. Sorry for my belated congratulations. Your meter is fascinating. I love the punchline. I've picked up a new word: algid. Ram
Callus Avatar
August 9, 2017 at 1:57 AM
Back again with belated congratulations, Sneha.....well done!! // paul
Singh Avatar
August 2, 2017 at 6:21 AM
Lovely! Congrats on a fine win, Sneha!
Smith Avatar
August 1, 2017 at 1:16 PM
Absolutely Lovely Sneha, Congratulations...
Michaels Avatar
August 1, 2017 at 12:19 PM
Lovely imagery, which captures the scene so vividly. Congratulations on your high-placed win. Regards, John.
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 1, 2017 at 10:01 AM
You managed to capture the awesome beauty of this magical place with your enchanting words. It has such breathtaking beauty that you have conveyed so well. I see why this is a top winner Sneha. Congratulations!
Puddifoot Avatar
May 23, 2017 at 6:00 AM
beautiful descriptive poem, well written - i particularly like the last two lines :) thank you for your comment on my work
Warrior Avatar
May 18, 2017 at 9:29 PM
Superbly done my friend Sneha...all the best...^WW^
Onclaud Avatar
May 18, 2017 at 2:49 PM
what an elegant piece, sneva... i know the feeling; been to that place last year too... you are a poetic gem..huggs
Andresen Avatar
May 17, 2017 at 12:51 PM
- This is beautiful, Sneha :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
White Avatar
May 17, 2017 at 8:41 AM
That is incredible writing Sneha, I am awed! You are a talented writer :)
Wolf Avatar
May 17, 2017 at 8:18 AM
Dynamite poetry, Sneha! I wish I could write like this! Thoroughly enjoyed it!
Dietrich Avatar
May 15, 2017 at 6:14 PM
wow, there was a blank verse contest and I think it is still going on. If this did not rhyme, it would be a great entry for it. Your meter is very well done, Sneha. I think you could adjust this and still be able to enter it into the mountaintop lake contest. It's so pretty.
Haight Avatar
May 15, 2017 at 3:20 PM
So beautifully written in this difficult meter, Sneha. You've painted a magnificent view and a lovely tribute to your dear mom. So nice to see you are back! 7, Hugs, Sandra
Callus Avatar
May 15, 2017 at 3:11 PM
Excellent, Sneha! You are a talented young lady, and I must also congratulate you on the capable use of Iambic Pentameter. #7+ Regards // paul
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 15, 2017 at 2:44 PM
How incredibly beautiful this is Sneha. I am sure your mother would beam with pride as she reads this lovely tribute. Blessings, Connie ; )
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