Jew #3

I know somewhere before I die I must see you again
And take your hands in mine, and let you touch my lips
With joy. Sometimes in wild torrents, sometimes in drips
Memory comes here naked in the broken light of pain
Sometimes I say serai, serai; sometimes I blame me
I lost it all on a pole of innocence, upon a bloodless tree
But always still a fawn illusive in this forest stalks me
The stain of love upon my heart gives me high visibility
I cannot outrun, I cannot hide
The fawn is a brash, young bride
And up and down the hot hill side
Its horn is pointed at my pride.
Go dream, go away, go O coming time of coming sorrow
O lonely time when forever must leave before the other
One of us, hopeless in a gray and so lonely old tomorrow
To go, to go is to forget forever, yet I would not rather
Until somewhere before I die I am made glad to see again
The fawn suddenly still, trembling in the hot tropic rain
And the stag long wounded is delivered from its gray pain
And the tide and the sands of the beach flow over us again.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 9/12/2010 11:47:00 PM
Aha, now I know who you remind me of, a modern David, writer of psalms. That is why I can't figure out what you are saying. I can't understand the Old Testament either. But it sure is beautiful. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 9/8/2010 1:17:00 PM
Perhaps you would like Hunger Knows Caution and Dawn Flower of Cahokia?
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Date: 9/8/2010 1:16:00 PM
Deborah, I am glad you saw that, I shift the anthropomorphic center ... for I am man, and love is something nobler than I that possesses me to love ...hence the stag is not me, but perhaps the Christ ... or whatever source we choose.
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Date: 9/8/2010 1:10:00 PM
"Its horn is pointed at my pride." confuses me? I see the metaphor as the lover/you being the stag...the stag would have the horns? Who is the "its"/ I absolutely love the verse very shakespearian just as I like them, yet this troubled me? Your praise for my Morning Glory was so high it made an old woman blush! Yet Andrea told me my meter is off in places for blank verse, if you can help me correct the meter I'm open to suggestions?
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Date: 9/6/2010 11:00:00 AM
Wonderful writing David. love, Joyce
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Date: 9/3/2010 1:14:00 PM
You have great talent my friend....I am continuing to enjoy your series. Aloha, Connie
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Date: 9/1/2010 12:13:00 PM
enjoyed! you are eloquent my friend!
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Date: 9/1/2010 10:43:00 AM
This series rocks..wow! BG
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