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I know somewhere before I die I must see you again And take your hands in mine, and let you touch my lips With joy. Sometimes in wild torrents, sometimes in drips Memory comes here naked in the broken light of pain Sometimes I say serai, serai; sometimes I blame me I lost it all on a pole of innocence, upon a bloodless tree But always still a fawn illusive in this forest stalks me The stain of love upon my heart gives me high visibility I cannot outrun, I cannot hide The fawn is a brash, young bride And up and down the hot hill side Its horn is pointed at my pride. Go dream, go away, go O coming time of coming sorrow O lonely time when forever must leave before the other One of us, hopeless in a gray and so lonely old tomorrow To go, to go is to forget forever, yet I would not rather Until somewhere before I die I am made glad to see again The fawn suddenly still, trembling in the hot tropic rain And the stag long wounded is delivered from its gray pain And the tide and the sands of the beach flow over us again.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 9/12/2010 11:47:00 PM
Aha, now I know who you remind me of, a modern David, writer of psalms. That is why I can't figure out what you are saying. I can't understand the Old Testament either. But it sure is beautiful. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 9/8/2010 1:17:00 PM
Perhaps you would like Hunger Knows Caution and Dawn Flower of Cahokia?
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Date: 9/8/2010 1:16:00 PM
Deborah, I am glad you saw that, I shift the anthropomorphic center ... for I am man, and love is something nobler than I that possesses me to love ...hence the stag is not me, but perhaps the Christ ... or whatever source we choose.
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Date: 9/8/2010 1:10:00 PM
"Its horn is pointed at my pride." confuses me? I see the metaphor as the lover/you being the stag...the stag would have the horns? Who is the "its"/ I absolutely love the verse very shakespearian just as I like them, yet this troubled me? Your praise for my Morning Glory was so high it made an old woman blush! Yet Andrea told me my meter is off in places for blank verse, if you can help me correct the meter I'm open to suggestions?
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Date: 9/6/2010 11:00:00 AM
Wonderful writing David. love, Joyce
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Date: 9/3/2010 1:14:00 PM
You have great talent my friend....I am continuing to enjoy your series. Aloha, Connie
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Date: 9/1/2010 12:13:00 PM
enjoyed! you are eloquent my friend!
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Date: 9/1/2010 10:43:00 AM
This series rocks..wow! BG
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