Richard Lamoureux Poet Terzanelle

Jar of Stars

I went outside to gather some stars
All plucked one at a time from the sky
Then placed them carefully in my jar

You my friend may be wondering why
These little stars such beautiful things
All plucked one at a time from the sky

To my lover this gift I will bring
So I can sprinkle dust in her hair
These little stars such beautiful things

With this gift I show how much I care
I ask her if she can close her eyes
So I can sprinkle dust in her hair

Her hair is glowing I'm mesmorized
We savor the kiss she strokes my face
I ask her if she can close her eyes

There is such love as we both embrace
We savor the kiss she strokes my face
I went outside to gather some stars
Then placed them carefully in my jar

Bring'n in the Stars poetry contest.

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Casarah Nance June 14, 2014 at 1:19 PM Man, you are good! What a beautiful poem, great lines, perfectly repeating and fitting together with no hesitation. Every poem I read of yours I enjoy completely! Richard Lamoureux June 14, 2014 at 1:33 PM You make my day with your comments Casarah. I am smiling!

Robin Davis December 28, 2013 at 11:11 PM Richard What a lovely and charming tale of romance and devotion. I could feel the care and tenderness come out of you with each line. Great job Thanks for the congrats on my Wishes poem. Hugs Richard Lamoureux December 29, 2013 at 8:37 AM My pleasure Robin.

Eileen Manassian September 9, 2013 at 4:23 AM I can't help but smile at my comments on your Terzanelles, Richard... :) Check my comment below...What more can I add? Beautiful... Richard Lamoureux September 9, 2013 at 7:32 AM :0)

Sara Kendrick May 9, 2013 at 10:38 AM Great winning work..Congrats..Sara

Poet Destroyer A May 7, 2013 at 10:04 PM Richard, Congratulations with your awesome win in Lisa's " Bringin' in the Stars contest." always~ LINDA

Abdulhafeez Oyewole May 7, 2013 at 10:11 AM A beautiful take. Congrats on your win~A.O

Donna Jones May 5, 2013 at 10:26 PM Congratulations Richard ..

Joyce Johnson May 5, 2013 at 9:22 PM A lovely write. congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Suzanne Delaney May 2, 2013 at 12:12 AM Very romantic and beautifully written. a winner in my eyes. SuZ Richard Lamoureux May 2, 2013 at 7:22 AM Thanks SuZ

Donna Jones April 29, 2013 at 7:43 AM Just magical Richard.... Richard Lamoureux April 29, 2013 at 7:53 AM Thanks Donna

Timothy Hicks April 29, 2013 at 12:30 AM I love seeing everyone's take on this contest. Stars make a poets mind go wild and I'm fascinated at seeing where it takes them. Your really a fan of these terzanelle's aren't you? I like how the repetition is so subtle you don't really even notice unless you literally scan for it. I wonder if by "stars in a jar" you are referring to fireflies... they sorta resemble stars ;) Richard Lamoureux April 29, 2013 at 6:20 AM I can see how you could think that but no I meant stars.

Eileen Manassian April 28, 2013 at 7:41 PM This is romantic and dreamy, incorporating celestial light and love into one! Beautiful. This form is your strong point. You always do exceptionally well in it. Richard Lamoureux April 28, 2013 at 8:46 PM Thanks Eileen. I hope you are having a nice Sunday.

Karen Anglesey April 28, 2013 at 5:36 PM Whimsical with lovely reality. I takes great talent to make something so wonderful using the subject of stars. Richard Lamoureux April 28, 2013 at 8:48 PM When stars align you never know what will happen. Thanks for your visits today.

Delysia Hendricks April 28, 2013 at 2:17 PM Ooh, dem stars, dem stars. Your belle surely would never lose her starry-eyed look when seeing you after such treatment. Your personality shines through in this tender write. My very best of luck to you in the contest. Well done, my friend. :) Richard Lamoureux April 28, 2013 at 8:50 PM Thanks, can always use some luck. Thanks for your kind words.