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Only few vague notions remain. Resource lowering has emerged. Poverty and shame endure strain. Money and action have diverged. They shackled him with sharp pebbles. False idols' rage will not be tamed. Justice can be served, he chisels. Though with a spirit that's untamed. I cede safety pins for deep breadth. Bleed on the rough stones as I move. Preparedness is worse than death. Sheer struggle in vain; I chose prove. The jagged bores of shrub and gorse. Slumbering softly down their track. Unyielding uphill this steep source. The birds chirp and echo ducks quack. No skin, bear on shreds of mercy. Our cells used to make a new death. Keep your bliss, won't bite agony. Go for different god and breadth. I'll scale this hard peak until dusk. Enjoy summer's beauty and clean air. The wind will take the dusk luck. Free of jagged rocks and despair.
Written: September 11, 2021 ''J'' Contest, New or Old Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Date: 9/15/2021 6:51:00 AM
Lasaad, congratulations on your win in my "I" contest with this wonderful poem, well done and I love the image chosen too ~ peace and tranquility _Constance
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Date: 9/15/2021 8:07:00 AM
Thank you so much for your lovely comment and thanks once more for reading and placing my poem it means a lot to me. Blessings and kindest regards
Date: 9/13/2021 1:25:00 AM
Congratulations Lasaad...Well deserved win...Delice
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Date: 9/12/2021 11:35:00 PM
Deeeep! Loved it! Congrats on your win, Lasaad
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Date: 9/12/2021 7:34:00 AM
An ocean of thoughts that one would need a sharp mind to navigate, my friend, Lasaad! Superbly done!
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Date: 9/12/2021 6:01:00 AM
A jagged journey through your thoughts, Lasaad. All the best!
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Date: 9/12/2021 2:14:00 AM
You rose well to the challenge Lasaad, a deep and thought provoking verse. Best of luck in the contest. Tom
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Date: 9/11/2021 10:31:00 PM
First class verse, Lasaad. I'm sure it will rate high.
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Date: 9/11/2021 10:02:00 PM
Love this, Lasaad, truly a classic poem. good luck in contest.
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