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I'Ve Found Life On Mars

I picked up a lovely sweet treat Unwrapped it, was ready to eat Much to my chagrin A grub was within I chucked it and stamped with my feet 10th May 2016

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Jean Murray

Date: 5/19/2016 3:57:00 PM

One never knows what to expect...

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:09:00 PM

Oh so true jean:-) hugs jan xx

John Mudge

Date: 5/18/2016 12:59:00 PM

Wry. Witty. Nicely written. Loved-it

Jan Allison
Date: 5/18/2016 6:00:00 PM

Thanks John:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/16/2016 9:12:00 AM

Hi Jan, This is hilarious. I think I'll pass. Well done - Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 5/18/2016 6:00:00 PM

Thanks Alexis - I never eat them anyway but this would put me off totally lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/13/2016 3:49:00 PM

Sooooo you're saying you've found life in a Mars CANDY bar? ... if that's the case, I see what you did there ;) Silly you ... How's life been treating you, Jan?

Jan Allison
Date: 5/18/2016 5:59:00 PM

Pure fiction write especially as I never eat Mars lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/12/2016 7:18:00 PM

haha. you entered a limerick too. Mine was actually on the planet, an oldie. It did not fare well. hahaha

Jan Allison
Date: 5/13/2016 3:38:00 PM

mine bombed too lol but I thought it would lol:-) hugs Jan x

Paul Callus

Date: 5/12/2016 7:10:00 AM

Good thing I am not a chocolate lover (except the dark variety); I have a feeling these grubs only go after sweet chocs:) Once I was given a small bar and I put it aside, forgot all about it, and when I found it weeks later it did have maggots:(( Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 5/13/2016 3:38:00 PM

Ugh - lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Duke Beaufort

Date: 5/11/2016 4:34:00 PM

There is a cheese in Italy that has live maggots in it. It is a delicacy, but they don't let you have it here. If you don't chew it completely, they survive and start eating you! Now that I've let you know about that, can I say how clever you are!! Be careful what you eat!!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/11/2016 5:37:00 PM

Eww Duke I really ill now lol - will never eat Italian cheese without checking now lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 5/11/2016 3:13:00 PM

But a milky way can't be beat!...Nice one Jan...best wishes

Jan Allison
Date: 5/11/2016 5:35:00 PM

LOL Jospeh I LOVED milky way when i was a kid but I think they changed the formula and they don't taste the way they used to:-) hugs Jan xx

Sneha Rv

Date: 5/11/2016 7:51:00 AM

OHO!!! This is hilarious; the title is amazing!! I think it would do awesomely in the contest! :) :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/11/2016 8:26:00 AM

I'm not sure if the sponsor will like it Sneha aa he may be after a serious poem but I went on my muse lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 5/11/2016 7:33:00 AM

Hahaha " ...life on Mars" very inventive and hilarious dear, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/11/2016 7:49:00 AM

Thanks Demetrios I do like to try and think out of the box some times lol:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/11/2016 7:17:00 AM

-"A grub" .... sounds disgusting .... (but I do not know what it is) .......... - Good luck in the contest - Best wishes for a lovely day, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/11/2016 7:32:00 AM

Could imagine it .... YEUKKK !!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/11/2016 7:25:00 AM

grub is a maggot/wiggly creature lol - just imagine biting into it yeuk:-( lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 5/10/2016 9:52:00 PM

Jan this is great, I love where you took the theme

Jan Allison
Date: 5/11/2016 2:36:00 AM

Thanks Constance I wasn't going to enter it in the contest but heck another N/A to add to my growing list - well over 100 - what's another one lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Edlynn Nau

Date: 5/10/2016 9:00:00 PM

A Mars Bar with the prize inside! Oh dear! This was a good time. Thanks for the giggle!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/11/2016 2:37:00 AM

Thanks so much Edlynn:-) hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 5/10/2016 7:26:00 PM

G'day Jan ... they say finding half a grub in your food I worse than finding a grub - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 5/11/2016 2:37:00 AM

Yes I agree lol:-) Even worse if you are a vegetarian too lol hugs jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 5/10/2016 7:25:00 PM

Mars bars, Wow, that takes me back. Fun stuff Jan...

Jan Allison
Date: 5/11/2016 2:35:00 AM

I've not eaten one for years Charlie I found them too sickly lol :-) hugs Jan xx

Jill Spagnola

Date: 5/10/2016 5:55:00 PM

LOL, they are filled with nutrients! :), jill

Jan Allison
Date: 5/10/2016 5:57:00 PM

Must be awful if you are a vegetarian lol:-) hugs jan xx

DM Babbit

Date: 5/10/2016 5:42:00 PM

I;m right there with you. So sad.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/10/2016 5:47:00 PM

Nothing worse than finding a grub in food ... apart from finding half a grub i guess:-( hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/10/2016 5:23:00 PM

You always manage to make me laugh with your wit Jan. Very cute! Thanks Connie ; )

Jan Allison
Date: 5/10/2016 5:41:00 PM

I wasn't going to put it in the contest but having seen Silent One's comment i thought I've got nothing to lose lol:-) hugs jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 5/10/2016 4:43:00 PM

Good one...so they have Mars Bars in the UK? whattayaknow

Jan Allison
Date: 5/10/2016 4:50:00 PM

Yes we have them here but I don't eat them lol - I actually thought the company was a UK one but just googled and found out its a US one lol whattayuknow lol :-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 5/10/2016 4:02:00 PM

ha! i hope this isn't real - that would freak me out! very funny, jan...

Jan Allison
Date: 5/10/2016 4:03:00 PM

No its not real Ilene in fact I never eat Mars I don't enjoy them - i was inspired by the contest title but it's not for the contest lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Walter T. Ashe

Date: 5/10/2016 3:53:00 PM

:-) :-) :-) Right when the heart was set for this "sweet treat!" The smile this produces is sweeter than that treat! :-)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/10/2016 3:56:00 PM

The irony is Walter - I never actually eat Mars I don't enjoy them lol:-) hugs jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 5/10/2016 3:52:00 PM

Yum! lol. we found a grub in our garden and abby says, can I eat it?... um ... no... lol.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/10/2016 3:55:00 PM

Ugh Cas Kids !!! lol - I guess there is nothing worse than finding a grub in a food product... apart from finding half a grub when you have bitten into it lol:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 5/10/2016 3:39:00 PM

lol...awesome one Jan....but now I might not be able to eat any chocolate...my waistline thanks you.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/10/2016 3:41:00 PM

LOL pure fiction I'm glad to say Tim - - would put me of chocolate for life :-( hugs Jan xx