It Is Not Your Time

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Poetic Form: Quatrain
Inspired: 2024 June 17
Image: N/A

Saturday, wouldst be Sadder Day
nineteen seventy-five
purple skies dusk twilight display
friend and I, still alive

Sleepyheads, car seats unbuckled
Russian roulette enroute
shut eyes refused a wakeup call
rabbit foot wore a boot

Squirming confirming not our time
go get out while you can
opportunity just-in-time
two tired souls and more than

Clueless me, whys and wherefores
reveal relevancy
this, that, and all those therefores
transcends generously

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Valsa George

Date: 6/21/2024 10:59:00 PM

Hi Williams....I assume you and your friend survived a nerve wrecking accident that left you in total confusion and still you are not able to clearly envision how and where it all happened. However you are thankful that you had a narrow escape. We too are happy that we can still read your poetry.

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/22/2024 4:00:00 AM

Mahalo, Valsa, in my poem 'I Survived 75' we fell asleep at a beach park, woke then left near midnight before the 7.7 earthquake and tsunami--several miles of coastal shelf fell into the sea--that beach park disappeared underwater--thank you my friend, Aloha, William

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/18/2024 1:19:00 AM

Seems you had a mad trigger happy person shooting at random. Happened lately on father's day.

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/18/2024 7:15:00 AM

Aloha Victor, this is a condensed version of the quake/tsunami piece 'I Survived 75' regarding the set of circumstances that unfolded in a span of a few hours--my friend and I should have died that day, Sahha William