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It Happened On a Rainy Night-Collaboration

Foggy mists engulfed the bright When raindrops fell throughout the night The lampposts glowed at midnights dark When sweethearts kissed at Lover's Park Only starting or just begun Synchronous melding joined as one Rhythmic breathing no thought for pause Merged together, effect and cause

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Christopher Flaherty

Date: 9/7/2023 1:31:00 PM

Effect and cause From Main to Main David Sir Respectful thoroughly sincere and deserved applause Fave Star

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/7/2023 4:06:00 PM

If something seems too good to be true then it usually is, but in some cases we can just go with our instincts

Christopher Flaherty
Date: 9/7/2023 3:17:00 PM

Irrefutable proof then You should trust follow your gut and instict As it serves you well

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/7/2023 3:07:00 PM

Thanks Christopher, I just went with my innate instinct on this one, effect and cause are most definitely indistinguishable in these moments, I’m honestly delighted with your Fave, cheers David

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/5/2023 1:13:00 AM

A slice of momentary love that was written in such a beautiful flow of words. Best for a win.

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/5/2023 5:56:00 AM

Good to hear from you Victor, I hope you’re on the mend, thank you, yes perhaps a mere cross section of a budding relationship, with both parties intensely in love, cheers David

Sally Eslinger

Date: 9/2/2023 5:08:00 PM

Wow! You stopped time! And light! The storm of attraction snuffed out a climaxing kiss into mist. Wow! An epic in 8 lines! Love the story, the flow, the rhymes, the imagery. Complete & masterful! Hugs, sally

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/3/2023 3:40:00 AM

Heya Sally, I think time can stop, relatively speaking anyway, when we encounter these magic moments in life, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 9/2/2023 2:49:00 PM

Hmm, it rained here last night which is very unusual. Its Labor Day weekend, I'll get back to you after I figure this out! message will self-destruct, soon;) smiles, outside-kissing the sky, it moves in mysterious ways!

I Am Anaya
Date: 9/4/2023 5:35:00 AM

Yep, the song came on just as I was looking up at the sky. Clusters of cumulus, after blistering days of summer, a rainstorm.

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/2/2023 3:34:00 PM

Mysterious ways of U2?

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/2/2023 3:13:00 PM

You have figured it out Anaya, it’s two sweethearts self-destructing, only into each other’s arms under that lamppost, cheers David

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/2/2023 1:46:00 PM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful write. Have a great day/weekend writing away.................

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/2/2023 2:29:00 PM

Heya Paula, collaborations are pretty tricky to assess, I’m just happy I managed a reasonable stanza for the contest, thanks so much, cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/2/2023 11:58:00 AM

David, Your writing is absolutely captivating. This poem is a true delight to read and savor. The vivid imagery you paint with your words surpasses mere beauty, transporting the reader to another world and fitting the given stanza very well, BOL with the contest.

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/2/2023 12:19:00 PM

Hello Lasaad, thank you for the vote of confidence, one can never be sure in a collaboration which direction to take, and just hope we leave enough scope for an additional stanza to bounce off, I appreciate the visit, cheers David