Laura Breidenthal Poet Free verse

It Can'T Be Real

A truth in rage of insult furrows my mind
For it is only an offense given to me by myself
In the mouths of others far innocent than I
I feel the tears trickle down my cheeks
For I have surfaced into an ugly mistake
I am always inadequate in this brain
I try to shine like the advice of grace given
But confidence rarely rears its head my way
There’s a sort of shade blocking its way
A shade that darkens everyday

That very shade led me to believe my feelings are wrong
That I will never belong so long as they are not controlled
I must be careful—for the lines of love and lust run cold
I hate myself truly this night
And no one but myself will give me the right
The very right to degrade my every being
Because you are not seeing what I am seeing

There is no point
My lines run cold
Can I be so bold as to say
I still love with a pang of indistinguishable doubt 
All feelings enter in
As my truth blurs and checks out

Your words pierce me so deep
I cannot describe the pain I feel
God it hurts so bad
It can’t be real

Much like the love I have come to embrace
The very love that links to your face
Tears don’t give it justice

It can’t be real
Much like the love I will never face

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Stephen Kilmer September 17, 2013 at 6:54 PM Can you stand the face of love is the question? I know it is hard because it is hard for me. Suffering from depression you never know what is real. This poem speaks to me on many levels, but most importantly it tells me you are lonely. We came in alone we got out alone. The world is a lonely place. I found someone to help through, perhaps you have too. Always ~Kilmer

Justin Bordner September 17, 2013 at 1:48 PM Beautiful tragedy, a beautiful education Laura - evrything about this composition is graduated Laura, the message and experience is sophisticated the word choice is delicate yet powerful, the length is precise - a very solid work here - everyone can find, and create, great value from this Art - J.A.B. %

Claude Stanley Damoney September 15, 2013 at 5:14 AM powerful. very well written.

Lucilla Carrillo September 13, 2013 at 4:40 PM This is sad and painful and a very good write, but remember - nothing lasts forever. hanks for sharing...... Lucilla

Richard Lamoureux September 13, 2013 at 6:38 AM This one makes me ache, I feel the intensity of emotion and there are so many parts I can relate to. This is an amazing and sad piece.

Ken Carroll September 12, 2013 at 6:07 PM Hi Laura, An emotional write..Love exists and it will find you.. Ken

Liam Mcdaid September 11, 2013 at 4:39 AM heartfelt wipe away the tears beautiful piece

Vicky Tsiluma September 11, 2013 at 12:32 AM Whoa Laura - I love the depth of feelings expressed here - The struggle to rise above, the doubt and hurt - I like the way the poem brings out the 'main text' and alludes to a 'subtext' - very well done.

Red Fiery September 10, 2013 at 8:43 PM i wish you get what you have desired all these years..my dear poetess it seems you were hurt in the past...i hope u find peace and love. I can relate myself with your words. about this poem.....this is going to be my fav now.... cheer up !

Poet Tacito September 10, 2013 at 10:29 AM There are way too many things I can say to this. The only thing I can say, right now, know your worth. Insist on being treated like the lady you are and do not settle for less. This was a massive emotional roller coaster. May the sun rise higher today... Laura Breidenthal September 10, 2013 at 7:59 PM I will try my friend..thank you.. ~Laura