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It Came and Passed

It came and passed, and not a word was spoken as trills sang sweet from the tongue of the sparrow. Indifference now, our love was but a token, my heart’s pierced through with Cupid’s broken arrow. With morning break I felt the deepest sorrow and setting sun heard silence, yet unbroken, then tolling bells left no time more to borrow. It came and passed, and not a word was spoken. The cool breeze blew, no cloud in azure heaven, no voice raised loud atop the rolling barrow, like yeastless bread our words could never leaven, as trills sang sweet from the tongue of the sparrow. So deep our passion grew in early sun rise, till lost in evening sleep and never woken. Like snowflakes that melt upon our hands are lies, indifference now, our love was but a token. Forever has now come with painful remorse With night our light is dim, and vision narrow, as in the dark we fumble to change our course, my heart’s pierced through with Cupid’s broken arrow. Long each minute passed in sorrowed memory, no tears to shed for moments lost forever. Flamed to ash in naught but burnt black cindery as, like the day, we’re but a lost endeavor, …it came and passed. 10/27/2017

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Date: 6/16/2020 2:16:00 AM
This is amazing.
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James Inman
Date: 6/16/2020 9:53:00 AM
Andreanna Escamilla, what a strong, poetic name, Spanish I presume. Thank you for your lovely visit. I've read several of your poems (will comment later) and find them quite impressive. It seems you have been at the soup for a couple of years now. I'm happy you left a comment for me so I could find you. I would love to see you post more. It is always a pleasure to find someone with as much potential and talent as you.
Date: 4/21/2020 9:38:00 AM
Back for more congrats, James.
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James Inman
Date: 4/21/2020 11:46:00 AM
Thank you for taking so much time for this contest. I have to wonder whether you are regretting it now. : )
Date: 11/18/2017 5:18:00 PM
Flows magically. Congrats, James.
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James Inman
Date: 11/18/2017 6:49:00 PM
Thank you for the visit and kind comment Line.
Date: 11/14/2017 2:06:00 PM
pretty cool write James. From flames to ash
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James Inman
Date: 11/14/2017 2:54:00 PM
Thanks Edward.
Date: 11/14/2017 1:19:00 PM
I agree with Maria, James...you do have a real flair for writing -- as so masterfully demonstrated here!! Superb poetry! My best regards. :) john
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James Inman
Date: 11/14/2017 2:04:00 PM
So kind of you John. Thank you.
Date: 11/13/2017 4:20:00 PM
I really like this one, James. It's so full of emotion and loss. I feel your pain.
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James Inman
Date: 11/13/2017 6:13:00 PM
Thank you Carole.
Date: 11/6/2017 1:30:00 AM
This is absolutely gorgeous, James, and I love the form and rhythm ... superbly written with exquisite phrasing and eloquence! Congrats - I would have placed it higher! (And I, too, love wordplay and unusual phrasing and metre, when used correctly as you have done here). :-)
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James Inman
Date: 11/6/2017 6:34:00 PM
Thanks for the kind comment Gregory.
Date: 11/1/2017 10:55:00 PM
A beautifully written poem James. I am not familiar with the format, such a lot to learn in the world of poetry it seems, you seem to have mastered it so well. You have a real flair for writing ....Maria
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James Inman
Date: 11/2/2017 5:55:00 AM
What a kind thing to say Maria. I love to play with words. This particular poem is hendecasyllabic (11 syllable lines) and was a challenge trying to make it flow smoothly. When reading, several of the lines change meter but all of the rhyming lines have the same meter.
Date: 10/30/2017 3:33:00 PM
Oh, I have not ever tried this form but I see aspects of different forms I love inside it. VERY nice. I was thinking in one part that it was describing the new year, but I can see more of melancholy of love lost in it than anything else.
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James Inman
Date: 10/30/2017 8:00:00 PM
Hi Andrea, yes, another love lost poem. I seem to be in a rut. Lol.
Date: 10/28/2017 3:38:00 PM
Hey James... (: Well done here...this is beautiful. "like yeastless bread our words could never leaven" What a line! Love that, among many other lines in this poem. "it came and passed.." Such sorrow in those words.. I feel it! This I can relate to on a personal level. Amazing work! Always, Laura
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James Inman
Date: 10/29/2017 12:29:00 AM
Thank you for all of your visits Laura. This is actually a very personal poem for me about a recent, defining moment in my life.
Date: 10/27/2017 10:16:00 PM
This is a spectacular write James I love the repetition gives it a feel like a villanelle or a pantoum, but a little more refined, exquisite word choices, congrats on placing in this premium contest, I think I have to fave this one!
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James Inman
Date: 10/27/2017 11:56:00 PM
John, you leave such kind comments. Thank you.
Date: 10/27/2017 4:59:00 PM
This is beyond impressive! I will have to study this form which I have not seen. Congrats on your win!
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James Inman
Date: 10/27/2017 11:53:00 PM
Thank you Dale. This is my first attempt at the Rondeau Redouble form. It is basically a serious of quatrains with a couple of twists. I rather like it and may do more. Give it a try.
Date: 10/27/2017 4:50:00 PM
A beautifully written poem, James, and your sad words tugged at my heart. Congratulations on your placement on this short list of winners. Sandra
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James Inman
Date: 10/27/2017 11:49:00 PM
Thank you for your visit and sweet comment Sandra.
Date: 10/27/2017 11:57:00 AM
A well written poem of heartbreak--lovely lines, words chosen so apt--well done, James!
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James Inman
Date: 10/27/2017 12:59:00 PM
Thanks for the kind comment Vijay.

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