Iron Balloons Concrete Skies - Part 1

Iron Balloons Concrete Skies  
               (PART 1)

Florescent plants fill up the planet in green light
The gigantic world found us before we found it 
Colliding, taking our ship by tonnage to the surface vast and wide
Strong gravity powered by shear mass that dragged us down
Ten billion light years from our home, simply to explore
Out there to investigate the void 

Memory succumbed by encumbrances of weight
Crushed thoughts by pressure grave embraced 
The crew senses loads intense, alien in nature
Landscapes fade into black open space 
Cast against a backdrop dotted, twinkling white 
So far away the tiny lights go out of sight still fixed in place

No sun or moon to fill in the surrounding emptiness
Space explorers hover in the artificial rocket light
Release submersible submarines in dark 
To reach the surface of the alien sea
Night springs eternal heavy on the shore
 
Trees of liquid mass punctuate the distances
Tall on horizons belly swaying pink with fluids
Yellow translucent branches dip into the atmosphere
Touched sticky, viscous, stretched to their limits  
                                              
Limbs distorted long in elasticity bounce back to shape
Laws of nature break from too much weight
As strong and thick as this planet seems to be created 
Light does not escape from black hole pressure 
Planets pull apart one segment at a time to their own fate 

Infinity looks on a foreign veranda strange
Wide visions on the vista compromised
As far as the eye can see 
Fathomed, reflected on, in the absence of dusk and dawns
On enormous lands looking gigantic on the cosmic storms 
On stars born that stay alive as best they can
Cast against a black backdrop far away
Dotted, twinkling white 
So far away the tiny lights go on into forever faded

Soft buttered views below the solid alien ocean emerge
Clouded sights of sinking submarines appear
Permitted to be discovered by visitors but not touched 


                           (Part 2 of this poem follows on next post)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 3/19/2016 6:15:00 PM
Incredible vivid imagery and I like the alliteration Earl :-) look forward to part two:-) hugs Jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 3/19/2016 6:30:00 PM
The fact they are posted one after the other entices the reader to continue with the story:-) hugs Jan xxx
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Earl Schumacker
Date: 3/19/2016 6:28:00 PM
Hi Jan, Thank you so much. I took your advice. I posted this in 2 parts. I posted another poem in the past called The Lotus Eaters in 2 parts. It was a strange experience because some people read one or the other segment of that epic poem. I hope this has better results. It flows easier in one reading on one page. Have a wonderful evening and week end. Earl
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