I have posted 2 versions as a few are helping me, always interested in feedback!
Iran In the gardens of Hafiz where verse eternally embraces the romantics heart thus poetry succumbs to our desires behind the tallest forbidden walls a canopy of flowers each spring bloom metaphor dancing near the city gates under the evening stars so pleasing was this experience Iran fearful of such happiness where vineyards grow Iran In the gardens of Hafiz where verse eternally embraces the romantics heart thus poetry entices our desires behind the tallest of forbidden walls a canopy laden of flowers each spring bloom metaphor dancing near the city gates under the evening stars so pleasing was this experience Iran fearful of such happiness where vineyards grow
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