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For the Contest of Charlotte Pudifoot: Open Poetry10 Sept 3, 2024
------------- There is a certain quiet in watching you sleep That’s not unlike the flow Of observing a river's movement, As it slowly bends its way down Past morass and ferns on the coast To somewhere new and heretofore unknown-- The current, steady rhytmn of your breath Circles through an unconscious world, Bringing you respite from any troubled ridge And hoisting you higher to a route of dreams Where I like to feel you, Clear as a rippling water Gushing ever gently into me-- And how your eyes quiver , still Your heave bidding me closer Like the river beckoning the thirsty to drink : Would that I could drink your calmness So you really did glide through me Quench me -- And bestowing on me your innate joy.

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Date: 9/7/2024 10:01:00 PM
Hi Nette, I can feel the calm in the sleeping person. It spills over and submerges the surroundings. "Like the river beckoning the thirsty to drink : Would that I could drink your calmness"... Lovely lines. Congratulations dear friend on your top win.
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Date: 9/5/2024 4:58:00 PM
Dear Nette, it’s a pleasure to return with my congratulations for your win in Charlotte’s contest with this exquisite gem. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 9/5/2024 9:30:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful  write. Have a blessed day...........
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Date: 9/5/2024 7:52:00 AM
Expression of love in such a unique yet relatable way! You've captured that overwhelming peaceful love that steals over us when we watch a loved one dreaming. Stunning! Xo
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Date: 9/5/2024 6:34:00 AM
So beautiful, dear Nette. Well done on the great win. Congrats.
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Date: 9/5/2024 5:03:00 AM
A lovely metaphor, Nette! Congratulations on your 3rd place win!
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Date: 9/5/2024 3:49:00 AM
no surprise to find you high on my winners' list, nette, accomplished writing from you, as always..i like the understated sensuality of the piece, the dreaminess of the language, the analogy..beautiful writing, congrats on your win in my contest :)
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Date: 9/3/2024 4:53:00 PM
Dear Nette, sensual beauty spills from your golden pen. Beautiful! Warmest wishes inspiring poetess.. ~Susan
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Date: 9/3/2024 5:57:00 AM
Dear Nette, What a great romantic love poem that is so full of love, appreciation, and devotion. I loved reading it this morning. - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 9/2/2024 8:03:00 PM
Very romantic...loved the part about being close with no conscious thought...
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Date: 9/2/2024 5:35:00 PM
Romantic sensual poetic, a pure joy to read, Dear Poet
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Date: 9/2/2024 12:00:00 PM
Wow, provocative piece, Nette! Great metaphors for relishing love. :o))
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