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Jan.4.2024
Scence Fiction Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Chetta Achara

One evening, gazing into the endless expanse, Lured by its mystery, I sat engrossed in thoughts. The world around me seemed to fade and all I knew I was buoyed up. I was traveling through inter galactic space on a space odyssey, With my friend, well equipped with space suits and sturdy helmets. I slipped out of reality and how swift our lightning Sputnik, Out running the speed of sound and light shot into space with a violent jerk. At a distance were luminous spheres, suspended like glowing lanterns. Comets and meteors in hyperspace seemed more like diffused designs. Down, I saw Mother Earth, a luminous ball, not bigger than a sapphire dot. Earth, with all its mammoth structures shrunk in seconds before my eyes. Knew I was millions of leagues up in the sky and feeling dizzy, I looked away. The star-spangled sky seemed more like blue chiffon stitched with silver sequins. Oh! How quickly we landed on Mars, so different from what I had learnt. Neither a barren belt of sterile terrain, nor a rugged stretch of craters burnt, But a heavenly place, cool and serene full of scintillating and ravishing sights. We, from a faraway land were warmly received by a team of alien sprites. Our body weight was suddenly lifted, and we bounced up and down in ether, Losing in the magic and bliss of that Zion, wondering if it was chimera or truth, Reality pulled me down headlong and I woke up suddenly from a pleasant dream!

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Date: 2/8/2024 3:29:00 PM
Engaging and a thrilling adventure traveling with you and your friend through space to Mars. Your imagery was spectacular, and your dream intriguing. Another FAV for my list, Valsa. Good luck in the contest. Hugs, Bill
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Date: 2/7/2024 9:47:00 AM
How intriguing you have made this wonderful dream sequence Valsa. It is a delightful read. Your descriptions create a space voyage so life like, it felt like you were truly with the first astronaut to venture into space Yuri Gagarin in his Sputnik. So impressed with this marvelous story, It deserves 100 faves. Well done my sweet friend. Luv from Wen
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Date: 2/5/2024 11:11:00 AM
Pity this was a dream. I love such fiction. You described a planet in your imagination and you did well. Hugs
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Date: 2/5/2024 10:44:00 AM
Dear Valsa, your poem is truly stunning. The way you weave science fiction elements into your storytelling is captivating. It delves into the depths of human curiosity and the limitless potential that the universe holds. The vibrant imagery and thought-provoking language employed in your work beckon readers to embark on a profound voyage of self-discovery and introspection. It encourages us to reflect upon the enigmas of our existence and the extraordinary power that imagination possesses.
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Date: 2/4/2024 9:35:00 PM
Oh, my dearest poetess,what a magnificent sci-fi poem this is!! I'm in awe of your artistic capabilities and the brilliant skills of storytelling that your heart possesses..Woww,this was such an intriguing idea of landing upon Mars,viewing at our dear Earth, welcomed by alien spirits there and then, waking up the reality!This just keeps the reader's attention captivated throughout..I especially love how you've written "a heavenly place, cool and serene full of scintillating and ravishing sights"
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 2/4/2024 9:37:00 PM
Absolutely spellbinding and riveting, I felt like taken to a mystical dimension! You've absolutely nailed it dear. Best wishes for the contest, sending light and love to you always :)
Date: 2/4/2024 4:18:00 PM
wonderful story telling skills via poetry! I actually felt like I was with you journeying through, experiencing it through your vivid imagery. I wasn't expecting the ending because I was so caught up in the journey. I especially liked this line: I saw Mother Earth, a luminous ball, not bigger than a sapphire dot. Well done, Valsa, and best wishes with the contest, hugs, Sara
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Date: 2/4/2024 11:41:00 AM
Awesome science fiction storytelling.. It offers a captivating exploration of human curiosity and the boundless possibilities of the universe. Through its vivid imagery and evocative language, it invites readers to embark on a journey of discovery and contemplation, prompting reflection on the mysteries of existence and the power of imagination..
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Date: 2/4/2024 9:41:00 AM
Nice dreaming cosmonaut. We have to go beyond Mars to find a hospitable planet. Well penned.
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Date: 2/4/2024 9:21:00 AM
Love your story telling: ). This is a captivating, thought provoking read to not believe all what man has taught us : )
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Date: 2/4/2024 6:58:00 AM
Whoa you really did so well on this theme dear sweet valsa! I absolutely love the way youv written this scifi poem in such a creative manner. And i love the flow too and how descriptive it is. Took me to another realm. I especially loved “ a luminous ball, not bigger than a sapphire dot.“ you have a way with storytelling and really when i read these lines too it felt like you are writing from experience. What a pleasant dream! One that is so ethereal! And this right here is impeccable! BOL
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Date: 2/4/2024 5:59:00 AM
I love scifi poetry and this one set in Dreamland didn't disappoint Valsa. Who knew Mars could be so accommodating?
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