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Intermingle

I wiped away a single tear That had fallen from my eye (You told me simply we were friends) You left me after only a year (But you conceal your aching heart) I often sit and ask myself why Looking back on our time together I remember those halcyon days (My love for you it never ends) I thought we’d be together forever (You told me simply we were friends) Now memories are a fading haze Your hair so dark with eyes of brown (Dreaming of you my heart ascends) So full energy with a sense of fun (Forbidden love keeps us apart) Always happy you were never down We’d go out together and have a run (You told me simply we were friends) You’d always reward me with a soppy kiss (But you conceal your aching heart) I’ll never forget the day you got knocked over Never a day passes when you I don’t miss How I loved my darling dog Rover 03~05~15 Do You Love me – Triolet ~09~26~14 How I miss you Rhyme - 09~22~14 Contest - Intermingled – Craig Cornish

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/18/2015 6:44:00 PM

Jan, Congratulations on your fine win. LINDA

Jan Allison
Date: 4/18/2015 6:50:00 PM

Thanks so much Linda:-) Hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 4/17/2015 12:57:00 PM

Congratulations on your always wonderful read a 7. Blessings dear friend Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 4/17/2015 1:29:00 PM

Thanks Eve - I wish I'd noticed about names - i am so used to not putting my name on - a hard lesson to learn - am pleased to get a HM it was a very tough challenge Craig set us:-) hugs Jan xx

David Mohn

Date: 4/16/2015 7:49:00 PM

This is wonderful Jan...they weave so meaningfully together...congrats

Jan Allison
Date: 4/16/2015 7:55:00 PM

Thanks David - I wish I'd read the rule about names :-( I found it a really challenging contest - this was my 6th attempt:-) Hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/16/2015 5:10:00 PM

Hi Jan, congrats on your HM win for this very nicely intermingled poem. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 4/16/2015 5:17:00 PM

It was quite a challenge Craig set us and I was really pleased to get an HM :-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 3/7/2015 3:23:00 PM

Well, Jan, you managed to solve a tricky challenge! I have just about given up on this one; can't find two matching poems to my liking. gl in the contest. hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 3/7/2015 3:30:00 PM

I found it a real challenge Paul this was my 6th attempt:-) Hugs Jan xx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 3/7/2015 2:26:00 PM

A great intermingle and that ending was unexpected to say the least! I had so much trouble with mine. Judging a contest like this is going to be challenging for Craig. It's hard judging one poem...hugs, Rhonda

Jan Allison
Date: 3/7/2015 2:29:00 PM

I found it such a challenge Rhonda this was my 6th attempt:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/6/2015 6:15:00 PM

cute as can be, Jan. I love the ones easy to read like this one. The long ones are just to much for me in this form.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2015 6:29:00 PM

I found it quite a challenge Andrea - this was my 6th attempt last night:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Bl Devnath

Date: 3/6/2015 1:53:00 PM

Beautiful intermingle, done well. Good luck in the contest. i feel 7+ here. Loved always,bl

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2015 2:42:00 PM

Many thanks BL:- ) Hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/6/2015 1:04:00 PM

I like the surprise ending..Reads like a winner to me..These were not so easy to write.. Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2015 1:07:00 PM

Thanks Sara - it really is a challenge - this was my 6th attempt before it flowed OK:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/6/2015 9:22:00 AM

Wow, Jan...Love your poem! Such a wonderful mingle for sure, but the twist ending was the best! Best wishes for the contest. 7+Fav, Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2015 9:29:00 AM

The ending is actually my least favourite bit of the poem lol but i had to keep it in - it does add a twist to my poem which I do like to include when i can:-) Hugs jan xx

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 3/6/2015 9:18:00 AM

Well blended like pen and paper:-) wish you the best in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2015 9:21:00 AM

Thanks Njeri it is quite a challenge Craig set us - this was my 6th attempt at joining 2 poems together:-) Hugs Jan

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/6/2015 8:51:00 AM

Well joined! Good luck in the contest Jan,.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2015 9:04:00 AM

Thanks Richard - it is quite a challenge - this took 6 attempts to do:-) Hugs Jan xx

William Gray

Date: 3/6/2015 4:06:00 AM

Hi Jan, hope you are well my friend!. Lost one of my dogs that way, several years ago, it was heart breaking. My current pet Scoop is struggling with age now, he often licks my face clean, with soppy kisses, dreading when he goes. - Loved this piece *7*. Big Hugs Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2015 4:09:00 AM

Thanks William - I have never owned a dog but the original poem was based on a friend's pet who passed away. The challenge Craig set us was hard - trying to find 2 poems to link together is quite a task - this was my 6th attempt! Hugs jan xx

Shane Cooper

Date: 3/6/2015 3:56:00 AM

The combination of the two rhymes Jan is fantstic, the flow is seamless. I am sorry about your dog. I know how sad it is to loose a treasured small member of the family. a 7 for this great write. And as always into fav's

Shane Cooper
Date: 3/6/2015 4:04:00 AM

:-)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2015 4:01:00 AM

It was a fiction write Shane I have never had a dog lol - It took about 6 attempts to find poems that flowed well together - it is quite a challenge:-) Hugs jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 3/6/2015 12:10:00 AM

Oh, I just love this intermingle poem, Jan! Very well written! I love that your affection is for your dog, too ( I really love my dogs!) a 7 and good luck in the contest:)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2015 3:44:00 AM

Thanks Laura - the dog poem was totally fiction I have never owned one:-) Hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 3/5/2015 11:37:00 PM

Love the intermingle Jan...really flows together well....and you signature twist remains intact.. A7 and fav....hugs Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 3/5/2015 11:41:00 PM

I tried so many combinations of poems Tim - it really is quite a challenge - this one flowed the best:-) Hugs Jan xx