Intangible

There was change, an odd pulse, a new cadence and tone, in the place I grew up where my mother had been... Where white fences stretched out to cradle our home but where zones, unfamiliar, were on now on the cusp On a make-shift bed, I was lying awake Windows cracked open, a wind coming in, .... Intangible nights, in the familiar old room, alone with my thoughts, while sorting out things... There was a strange, jaundice glow, from the porch light, left on, and my pillow felt cold, where the moon used to go The sound of a moth, batting wings against glass, was begging for warmth, while seeking to ask, a place that made sense And a place to fit in My father was sleeping, with his newlywed bride in the same maple bed, where my mother had died And a new child was dreaming in the soft yellow room where I spent all those nights, ... just me and the moon I was happy for him, and for the child that he gained. I was there at his side, when the changes became.. a part of his life, ...... a part of mine too but was lost in the amber, like a moth batting wings Eventually, I would grow with a fresh point of view, but the child that I was, still waits for the moon I'm older and wiser, maybe stronger than then but, the moth will look in, escaping the moon ramming the screen seeking the flame... batting its wings, while resisting the change, ...again, and again
11/3/14
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Nance Avatar
October 2, 2015 at 2:41 PM
I remember writing for this contest and it was not an easy thing to do, the moth is such a strong image of yours I can see it trapped beating against the glass...and the moon, eyes rise to witness it. Strong imagery Carrie :)
Rios Avatar
October 2, 2015 at 12:58 PM
I give that a 5
Fisher Avatar
September 28, 2015 at 12:15 PM
Carrie - a fabulous piece as always. Strong in narrative and pulling on the heart. Many congrats on winning the comp with it and it's well deserved feature this week. Janette
Chakrabarty Avatar
November 24, 2014 at 10:00 AM
It's stunning. one of a kind. no less than a masterpiece. Carrie so powerful poet you are.and so mature. Congrats. adding it to my favlist.Love XXXX rajat
Haight Avatar
November 19, 2014 at 8:24 PM
Carrie, your poem is absolutely stunning and so very sad...broke my heart too. Congratulations on your 1st place win for this amazing write. Fav+7 Hugs, Sandra
Meier-Hans Avatar
November 19, 2014 at 2:49 PM
A very touching emotional poem Carrie. I am hurting for that little girl. Congratulations on your first place win with this brilliant masterpiece.
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 10:06 PM
A well-deserved first place win, Carrie! I think I already put this in my faves but if I didn't, I'm going to. I was touched by the childhood memories. Hugs, Rhonda
Mandani Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 1:11 PM
Very nice. No wonder being at the top!
Allison Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 11:56 AM
absolutely stunning - many congrats on your win:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Guzzi Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 9:42 AM
Just adored this Carrie. (fav & 7) Congrad's Light & Love
Marcum Wong Avatar
November 17, 2014 at 10:26 PM
Congratulations on your first place win with this very moving entry Carrie!
Yvonne Avatar
November 17, 2014 at 8:29 PM
This one sent chills up my spine. You built to the end like a murder mystery. Still it was a poem with a melodious singing voice. I am always amazed by your talent. Congratulations on your well deserved first place win.
Lawless Avatar
November 17, 2014 at 7:58 PM
Way to go Carrie. Excellently written with a lovely cadence. Congrats on your well deserved top placement.
Mohn Avatar
November 17, 2014 at 7:36 PM
Wow Carrie...nothing intangible about the greatness of this beauty...congrats on your well deserved #1
Cruz Avatar
November 8, 2014 at 3:55 AM
I really enjoyed this . you are a very good poet.
Ink-U-Script Avatar
November 4, 2014 at 1:55 PM
So glad I stopped by...this is the poem of the day!!! Love it!! 7
Richards Avatar
November 5, 2014 at 4:27 PM
Your comment was so very kind ! I thank you very much !
A. Sharma Avatar
November 4, 2014 at 8:24 AM
Carrie this is unique n brilliant! Surely a winner my friend!
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