Intangible

There was change, an odd pulse, a new cadence and tone, in the place I grew up where my mother had been... Where white fences stretched out to cradle our home but where zones, unfamiliar, were on now on the cusp On a make-shift bed, I was lying awake Windows cracked open, a wind coming in, .... Intangible nights, in the familiar old room, alone with my thoughts, while sorting out things... There was a strange, jaundice glow, from the porch light, left on, and my pillow felt cold, where the moon used to go The sound of a moth, batting wings against glass, was begging for warmth, while seeking to ask, a place that made sense And a place to fit in My father was sleeping, with his newlywed bride in the same maple bed, where my mother had died And a new child was dreaming in the soft yellow room where I spent all those nights, ... just me and the moon I was happy for him, and for the child that he gained. I was there at his side, when the changes became.. a part of his life, ...... a part of mine too but was lost in the amber, like a moth batting wings Eventually, I would grow with a fresh point of view, but the child that I was, still waits for the moon I'm older and wiser, maybe stronger than then but, the moth will look in, escaping the moon ramming the screen seeking the flame... batting its wings, while resisting the change, ...again, and again
11/3/14

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Date: 10/2/2015 2:41:00 PM
I remember writing for this contest and it was not an easy thing to do, the moth is such a strong image of yours I can see it trapped beating against the glass...and the moon, eyes rise to witness it. Strong imagery Carrie :)
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Date: 10/2/2015 12:58:00 PM
I give that a 5
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Date: 9/28/2015 12:15:00 PM
Carrie - a fabulous piece as always. Strong in narrative and pulling on the heart. Many congrats on winning the comp with it and it's well deserved feature this week. Janette
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Date: 11/24/2014 10:00:00 AM
It's stunning. one of a kind. no less than a masterpiece. Carrie so powerful poet you are.and so mature. Congrats. adding it to my favlist.Love XXXX rajat
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Date: 11/19/2014 8:24:00 PM
Carrie, your poem is absolutely stunning and so very sad...broke my heart too. Congratulations on your 1st place win for this amazing write. Fav+7 Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 11/19/2014 2:49:00 PM
A very touching emotional poem Carrie. I am hurting for that little girl. Congratulations on your first place win with this brilliant masterpiece.
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Date: 11/18/2014 10:06:00 PM
A well-deserved first place win, Carrie! I think I already put this in my faves but if I didn't, I'm going to. I was touched by the childhood memories. Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 11/18/2014 1:11:00 PM
Very nice. No wonder being at the top!
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Date: 11/18/2014 11:56:00 AM
absolutely stunning - many congrats on your win:-) Hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 11/18/2014 9:42:00 AM
Just adored this Carrie. (fav & 7) Congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 11/17/2014 10:26:00 PM
Congratulations on your first place win with this very moving entry Carrie!
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Date: 11/17/2014 8:29:00 PM
This one sent chills up my spine. You built to the end like a murder mystery. Still it was a poem with a melodious singing voice. I am always amazed by your talent. Congratulations on your well deserved first place win.
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Date: 11/17/2014 7:58:00 PM
Way to go Carrie. Excellently written with a lovely cadence. Congrats on your well deserved top placement.
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Date: 11/17/2014 7:36:00 PM
Wow Carrie...nothing intangible about the greatness of this beauty...congrats on your well deserved #1
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Date: 11/8/2014 3:55:00 AM
I really enjoyed this . you are a very good poet.
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Date: 11/4/2014 1:55:00 PM
So glad I stopped by...this is the poem of the day!!! Love it!! 7
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Carrie Richards
Date: 11/5/2014 4:27:00 PM
Your comment was so very kind ! I thank you very much !
Date: 11/4/2014 8:24:00 AM
Carrie this is unique n brilliant! Surely a winner my friend!
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