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Inspiration Minichu - A Wisdom's Pray

I'm a feathered ocean,
stained with inspiring hearts of lost souls, weaving light,
life's potion

A wisdom's pray,
let rivulets sing in mauve might,
arced sway

And stars,
carve sagas, bright,
scars

I'm a feathered ocean, 
let rivulets sing in mauve might, 
scars.

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Unseeking Seeker Date: 12/22/2023 7:02:00 PM Beautiful use of metaphors, you excel at this! Warmest congratulations on your well deserved trophy win, Hiya! Login to Reply

Speaks Volumes Date: 12/22/2023 11:00:00 AM Sweet Hiya, you weaved inspiration into a beautiful Minichu. Wonderfully done. Login to Reply

Ink Empress Date: 12/22/2023 8:31:00 AM Congratulations on your trophy win!!! Ah! How exciting! And well deserved as always! Your fourth one and definitely not the last! Minichus are not the easiest but you’ve nailed it. I think this form is not my cup of poetry lol. I seem to not get it right ever. Im so happy for you! Keep shining Login to Reply

Sotto Poet Date: 12/22/2023 7:39:00 AM Back with hearty Congratulations on your well-deserved trophy win, dear Hiya. Login to Reply

Hilo Poet Date: 12/9/2023 8:07:00 AM Nice, accented in rich tones, Hiya. Much enjoyed, my friend. Aloha, William Login to Reply

Paige Hind Date: 12/8/2023 3:12:00 PM Whoah, this is a lot better than mine; I adored the images in this. "And stars, carve sagas, bright, scars" amazing! Login to Reply

Kim Rodrigues Date: 12/6/2023 7:13:00 PM I’m a feathered ocean…intriguing imagery! Login to Reply

Clive Culverhouse Date: 12/5/2023 3:04:00 PM great lines and really well put together words, feathered ocean, weaving light, great write Hiya Login to Reply

Sotto Poet Date: 12/5/2023 8:10:00 AM This is a highly effective Minichu composition, replete with visuals and analogies, Dear Hiya. Your use of intriguing metaphors is consistent with your style; this one, too, is allegorical and employs lovely imagery. You rhyme so well and the final lines glide effortlessly. Best wishes for the contest Login to Reply

Tom Cunningham Date: 12/5/2023 6:31:00 AM Well composed minichu with great use of metaphors and imagery. Best of luck in the contest Hiya. Tom Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 12/5/2023 5:13:00 AM Reads like a good contender for the contest. Way to go. Thanks for sharing this entry with us. Sara K Login to Reply

Silent One Date: 12/5/2023 2:35:00 AM I'm a feathered ocean.. nice line dear Hiya... you always use interesting metaphors and this one as always is metaphorical and has nice imagery like rivulets sing in mauve might... it rhymes well and the last stanza flows very well.. good luck in the contest dear.. Login to Reply

Ink Empress Date: 12/5/2023 2:27:00 AM Ah so good to see you try minichu angelic star’ and as always in your unique and creative way youve described how you find inspiration from faith and all thats around, life and scars all that which gives you inspiration is so beautifully written. I love your choice of rhymes and also how you’ve written “ stained with inspiring hearts of lost souls, weaving light, life's potion“ that depicts so much in such an eloquent manner. “ And stars, carve sagas, bright,scars” how catchy is that! I love it Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 12/5/2023 2:28:00 AM BOL for the contest im sure youll nail it! This is unique and so deeply moving. Fave for me too