Insomnia


Deprived of sleep
the mind revolves
in a slowly turning gyre
of thoughts, 
capturing the past
and future
in its spiral
to feed its want
and taunt the will.
Dawn becomes 
a cruel mirage dancing
on a distant horizon.

An exhausted self
is sieved through the gauze 
of a semi conscious dream
as it masquerades as sleep,
sending bits to float off
across the room
until a sudden noise
or a sharp pain 
brings the mind back 
into the wide awake 
prison of itself…..again.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Greenhough Avatar
May 13, 2024 at 12:50 PM
This gives a fairly accurate picture of insomnia.the rhythmic meter combined with the verse of sleeplessness creates a masterpiece.
Willason Avatar
May 15, 2024 at 2:29 AM
So good to hear from you Hilda...thankyou for providing such positive feedback. Always nice to hear when a poem works a little magic...a treat for an old bloke. Valued.
Rodgers Avatar
May 13, 2024 at 7:30 AM
Hello Paul, You have perfectly captured the relentless nature of sleeplessness. The lines about the mind revolving in a 'slowly turning gyre' and the dawn being a 'cruel mirage' truly connected with me. I loved how the poem ends on a powerful note, with the speaker trapped in the 'wide awake prison' of themselves. Such a powerful piece. - Blessings, Daniel
Willason Avatar
May 15, 2024 at 2:24 AM
Pleased that I cobbled together words that found your sympathetic eye...conveyed something of the frustrations of sleeplessness. Appreciate your thoughtful comments my friend.
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