Premiere Contest WinnerInner Lost Child

We wander all, in feral dreams
of jagged thoughts and cryptic yearns;
a labyrinth of mirrored turns.

Along a ridge of moon stitched seams,
lie melancholic tapestries,  
unfolded in an abstract frieze. 

Subconscious angst weaves heart loomed themes
from pain sewn deep, through puerile eyes,
till daybreak’s alabaster guise.   
 
As savage beasts from darkened streams,
complicit servants of the id, 
form insights purged at slumber’s bid.

Claw toward light as urging deems; 
these taloned gasps of hidden truth,
burst from the depths of shuttered youth.   

We wander all, in feral dreams
along a ridge of moon stitched seams.
Subconscious angst weaves heart loomed themes,
as savage beasts from darkened streams,
claw toward light as urging deems.


                  19 Nov 2019
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Manassian Avatar
December 10, 2017 at 10:38 PM
Congrats on getting the trophy. This is intricate and deep...much as Freud described our subconscious to be. I find your talent amazing. Great write and thanks for your visit.
Marcum Wong Avatar
December 9, 2017 at 4:19 PM
What an exceptional and impressive creation this is David! Congratulations on a deserved First placement! A Fave! : )
Haight Avatar
December 9, 2017 at 4:15 PM
Congratulations on your Trophy win for this outstanding poem written in the Constanza form, David! Sandra
Gibson Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 3:33 PM
I loved this from start to finish, David; beautiful and deserved win.
Stebbings Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 1:34 PM
Congratulations on your top place, David, with this piece. Beautifully rendered description of troubled sleep. // Barry.
Hamilton Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 10:04 PM
This write is magnificent in so many ways, very worthy of a top win!
Roper Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 9:23 PM
Nicely done, David, congratulations on your win!
Gauthier Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 6:41 PM
Awesome. Congrats on your well deserved win, David.
Cornish Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 3:43 PM
This is exceptional poetry in any form!! A pure write that pulled me in!
Barden Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 3:26 PM
Superb write, David, with excellent word usage, solid structure and metre, and sublime imagery ... just love this piece! Congrats on your well-deserved win, my friend! :-)
Callus Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 3:10 PM
This is an excellent example of a Constanza, David, and the content is very expressive. Congrats on your high-flying win. Regards // paul
Gentile Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 3:05 PM
Congrats on your win !!
Marcum Wong Avatar
November 21, 2017 at 1:30 AM
Wow! The imagery in this awesome Constanza just jumps off the page David. It reminds me of the night terrors I have. The insightful words you have chosen elevate this poem to outstanding heights! This one is going into my Faves my friend! : )
Mohn Avatar
November 21, 2017 at 1:17 PM
thanks so much Connie...your comment made my day :)
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