Inhaling the Sea

An inhalation consumes the wet weight of fog,
anxiety bathes in its dampness,    dissolving, destitute,
inhaling the salt of rampant sea  as it roars,   angrily
consuming the more human pace of breath to disgorge
the wetness of heartbreak upon the cheek of maiden lost.

Weight the plight of deed most foully done to sea
of fog, a gift of blurring bloodied memories, oh open
an edge of froth, of film, of see, step in the lea, fall down,
inhale the ocean’s deep, caress the life bay found,
consume and be consumed, die and be reborn, again
the wet weight of the womb composed of fog.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 6/11/2014 3:53:00 PM
:) wow.. :) i love the feel and sight of what I have just read.. :) the visuals are splendid.. :) each word is so significant to make it more relatively stunning.. :), thank you Debbie.. :)
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Date: 2/11/2014 7:07:00 PM
Light and love. :)~ Love ~ SKAT
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Date: 1/19/2014 3:08:00 PM
This is awesome work!! No wonder it is in the winners’ list..Sara
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Date: 1/12/2014 4:50:00 PM
I like the concept of rebirth in the second stanza and how you broyght back the fog in the last line...great piece...congrats on your win
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Date: 1/12/2014 4:21:00 PM
Very nice poem Debbie...can really picture the images of your words..congratulations.. I think it's an awesome winner..
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Date: 1/12/2014 10:36:00 AM
This has an old English feel to it, I like it very much. Congratulations.
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Date: 1/12/2014 12:49:00 AM
Beautiful write on the theme and congrats on the win, debbie
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Date: 1/11/2014 9:29:00 PM
Very impressive vocabulary in this one, Debs! Maybe I should have put this even higher. I was just really into the super short ones! Congratulations. Very well done.
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Date: 1/5/2014 11:47:00 PM
Great poem. Very dark and edgy. Very visual and deep.
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Date: 12/31/2013 7:06:00 PM
Very well done Debbie, very artful. well done. Pete.
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Date: 12/28/2013 11:53:00 PM
This is an amazing piece Deb. I wish you a wonderful New Year!
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Date: 12/28/2013 2:50:00 PM
This is very deep on many levels of thought and textured by wisdoms degrees enjoyed this mind provoking work. cheri
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Date: 12/28/2013 11:16:00 AM
Debbie a very visual journey, I could feel the waves….David
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Date: 12/27/2013 12:07:00 PM
beautiful sea of love, Debbie.. sending you all the warmth this season brings... merry holydays with huggs
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Date: 12/27/2013 9:28:00 AM
Visually stunning! Perfect from title to end. I hope you had a great Christmas Debbie.
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Date: 12/25/2013 10:16:00 AM
Great poetry Debi!Happy Holy days to you too !
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Date: 12/25/2013 8:33:00 AM
Each line carries a bundle of meanings.Nice. My house construction works are in progress. So I am very busy. Hope you are well. Wishes
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Date: 12/24/2013 2:07:00 PM
excellently penned piece to you and your family have a beautiful love filled christmas and a joyful new year
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Date: 12/24/2013 9:59:00 AM
Great poem Debbie.Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.Let this season bring more happiness,fun and joy and Let the New year be a year of peace and new ambitions.My wishes for you and others in the family. (: )Jenish.
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Date: 12/24/2013 8:37:00 AM
Very deep...lovely, as you are, my friend! Merry XMAS to you and yours! Love, jimmy
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Date: 12/24/2013 7:55:00 AM
Great piece .with a great last line...which brings the reader back to the first line...Merry Christmas!!
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Date: 12/24/2013 5:32:00 AM
Interesting work penned for the contest?..Not sure exactly what the topic of the work unless it is about life and death..Or maybe a spiritual rebirth..Thanks for dropping by..I am still having arrhythmia..I called the dr's office yesterday but they don't have all the test results back..I wish you a very Merry Christmas and a bless New Year..I hope that the upcoming year will be the best one up to this point in your life and may each one that follows only be better..Sara
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Date: 12/24/2013 12:05:00 AM
A very mysterious write that gives the reader much to ponder on. Very interesting and powerful work, Debbie!...Thank you very much for the kind comments!
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Date: 12/23/2013 4:10:00 PM
Die to be reborn..a powerful message in this thought provoking post.Dear Deborah i want to thankyou for your friendship and enlightment through verse...You are a lovely lady.May you have a peaceful Christmas ,dear.
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Date: 12/23/2013 9:36:00 AM
Wonderful write, love the language and flow.very well done. best wishes. Pete.
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