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Inder the Unfluence

Starkle, starkle, little twink, "Who the hell are you?" I think. I'm not under what you'd call The alcofluence of incohol. I'm just a little slort of sheep, I'm not drunk like thinkle peep. It's true: I don't know quite who is me yet, (The drunker I stand here the longer I get!) So give me one more fink to drill my cup, 'Cause I got all day sober to Sunday up. *Inspired by "Spoonerisms"

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Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 3/21/2014 2:16:00 PM

I truly enjoyed this, Chan, and I think you have such a knack for spoonerisms and word play! Very witty in my opinion -- I should try to set aside more time to read more poems here... hopefully one day!

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 3/22/2014 9:54:00 AM

Thanks, so much, hon :)

Teresa Godwin

Date: 3/20/2014 8:25:00 PM

Unbelievably Funny! ~Teresa

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 3/21/2014 8:37:00 AM

Thank you, Teresa! I appreciate you stopping by :)

Keith O.J. Hunt

Date: 3/18/2014 3:09:00 PM

Silly, yet creative, like it muse!

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 3/18/2014 4:11:00 PM

Thanks, Keith. It's by far one of my weakest pieces, but it breaks up the monotony of heaviness most of my poems seem to carry lol. Thanks for dropping by and for the compliments :)

Jake Ponce

Date: 3/15/2014 12:31:00 PM

This is one mess of a poem and a really creative one at that. Nice to read your work again and to see you're up and about!

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 3/18/2014 4:13:00 PM

JAKE! GREAT to see you, bud! Hope all is well; I thought maybe you had left the Soup for good. So nice to hear from you; also hope to see you around more, my friend. Take care, and thanks for popping in! :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 3/13/2014 4:56:00 PM

This is just wonderful, BP! You are so creative! I very much enjoyed this humorous poem. Thoroughly entertaining! :)

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 3/14/2014 12:47:00 PM

Thanks, hon. I was feeling silly ;)

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 3/12/2014 7:16:00 PM

Please tell me that this is a fun write my friend. If its not, I honestly thought it was really below average of what I would usually expect from a talent such as yourself and definitely you know how much I admire your work my friend. This is just my honest review. However, it made me smile. : ). I will be reviewing some more of your poems because it has been quite awhile since I've checked in on you. So do expect more honest reviews from me. I hope you have been keeping well, warm greetings sent to you from Trinidad.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 3/13/2014 11:55:00 AM

Definitely just a fun piece, M. It's not up to par but it was written in a vein of silliness. I very much appreciate your honesty; I would expect no less from you. Your Ky friend, ~Chan :)

Rick Richardson

Date: 3/12/2014 12:24:00 PM

Justin Bordner

Date: 3/9/2014 8:55:00 PM

Smart & relatable JTAP. J.A.B.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 3/10/2014 10:12:00 AM

Many thanks, Justin :)

Paul Callus

Date: 3/9/2014 5:34:00 PM

Sparkingly humourous! Enjoyed this :) // paul

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 3/10/2014 10:13:00 AM

I appreciate the compliment, Paul :)

Robert Johnson

Date: 3/9/2014 1:52:00 PM

The thing about a poem like this is you've got to be awfully sober to write it. For that matter, read it. Peace. :) Injoyed. And thank you for the placement in your contest. Was a fun one.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 3/10/2014 10:14:00 AM

No problem, Robert; you earned your place. Glad you enjoyed :)

Tim Smith

Date: 3/6/2014 5:59:00 PM

This is good..I used to always wake up and look at the text I used to send after a night of imbibing...Cheers Tim

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 3/7/2014 7:25:00 AM

Thanks for the read and response, Tim :)

Skat A

Date: 3/6/2014 11:45:00 AM

Chan, woe! Wondering how it will all end. I can feel the doozy you find yourself in. Sometimes, you need to seek within yourself. well said..... Hugs* SKAT

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 3/6/2014 11:58:00 AM

Thanks, Skat. It's really just supposed to be humorous play on words; nothing serious. I love a good "spoonerism" and get a kick out of malapropisms. I must have been drunk when I wrote it though because I just found it this morning; forgot all about it lol ;)