Tim Smith Poet Free verse

Indelible Blue

An indelible blue looking out to you
seducing the pain to wash away
with stolen keyboard strokes
a few extra x's and o's where
decimals move with inapprehension
carrying fantasy dreams offshore
where sandcastles are built with
riches never to be crowned
holding secret keys to happiness
breathless my tomorrows begin
under guise of the salty moon
worries behind,necks entwined
newly discovered swans swoon

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Paul Callus February 23, 2017 at 1:08 PM Some dreams are not meant to be realized...their destiny is nipped on conception. // paul

Maurice Yvonne February 22, 2017 at 5:20 PM Just plain good writing. Emotive and descriptive. Love it Tim! Tim Smith February 22, 2017 at 5:23 PM Thank you my friend

Nette Onclaud February 22, 2017 at 1:15 PM you sway with undulated lines, tim.. always a delight to read you, your sensibilities and graces..huggs Tim Smith February 22, 2017 at 5:23 PM Thanks nette

Charmaine Chircop February 22, 2017 at 10:54 AM Sandcastles are beautiful ..even if they get blown away so fast..Love the Salty moon and those swooing swans..I so love swans..They remind me of calm beauty and purity..A fave. Tim Smith February 22, 2017 at 11:13 AM Thanks Charma...You bring me many smiles today : ))

Peter Dome February 22, 2017 at 8:58 AM Wonderful and so artful poetic. what all great poems try to be, but few succeed, well done. Hope you are ok, Best wishes. Peter. Tim Smith February 22, 2017 at 11:12 AM Thanks Pete, eventually I'll be okay.

Darren White February 21, 2017 at 9:59 PM This is beautiful, Tim. To be carried away and let your fantasy roam free, it makes us sad too. Tim Smith February 22, 2017 at 11:12 AM Thanks my friend : )) Darren White February 22, 2017 at 12:28 AM that last line is a real gem :)

Lynn Marie February 21, 2017 at 8:58 PM Terrific writing Tim. To live through pretty words in the ethera, an anesthetic to loneliness knowing it's not real yet wishful all the same. The sadness feels palpable, so beautiful are your descriptive words. This is one of the best pieces I have read on this theme and I like how you end it with a wee bit of hope :-) Excellent writing, sending sunshine your way :-) blessings, lynn Tim Smith February 22, 2017 at 11:11 AM Thank you very much Lynn... Blessings

Sara Ella February 21, 2017 at 7:28 PM Tim I hope your knee gets better every day and that your dreams come true. ?? I love the beautiful pictures your words create ?? Sandcastles and swans ?? Tim Smith February 22, 2017 at 11:10 AM If I could figure out how to pay for those dreams : )) Sara Ella February 21, 2017 at 10:17 PM ???? I don't know what you mean Darren ???? :D <3 Darren White February 21, 2017 at 10:12 PM ????? Sara is very good at question marks ????? Sara Ella February 21, 2017 at 7:31 PM Hearts!!! ??=wonderful, lovely hearts <3

Daniel Turner February 21, 2017 at 5:30 PM Trying to live tomorrow, today? You are so damned cryptic:) Tim Smith February 22, 2017 at 11:10 AM Glad you know me and my ways

Heidi Sands February 21, 2017 at 4:06 PM I like the ending Tim. I hope things will turn out full of happiness for you. :) Tim Smith February 22, 2017 at 11:09 AM Thanks so much Heidi

Jan Allison February 21, 2017 at 3:45 PM love the romantic imagery of the beach and sea and also sense that feeling of longing Tim:-) hugs Jan xx Tim Smith February 22, 2017 at 11:08 AM Thanks Jan

Chris Green February 21, 2017 at 2:45 PM There seems to be a touch of sadness or loneliness in this one Tim, though it is quite beautifully written and feels nice to read. Tim Smith February 21, 2017 at 2:50 PM Thanks Chris, always look for a silver lining.