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Indelible Blue

An indelible blue looking out to you seducing the pain to wash away with stolen keyboard strokes a few extra x's and o's where decimals move with inapprehension carrying fantasy dreams offshore where sandcastles are built with riches never to be crowned holding secret keys to happiness breathless my tomorrows begin under guise of the salty moon worries behind,necks entwined newly discovered swans swoon

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Paul Callus

Date: 2/23/2017 1:08:00 PM

Some dreams are not meant to be realized...their destiny is nipped on conception. // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 2/22/2017 5:20:00 PM

Just plain good writing. Emotive and descriptive. Love it Tim!

Tim Smith
Date: 2/22/2017 5:23:00 PM

Thank you my friend

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/22/2017 1:15:00 PM

you sway with undulated lines, tim.. always a delight to read you, your sensibilities and graces..huggs

Tim Smith
Date: 2/22/2017 5:23:00 PM

Thanks nette

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 2/22/2017 10:54:00 AM

Sandcastles are beautiful ..even if they get blown away so fast..Love the Salty moon and those swooing swans..I so love swans..They remind me of calm beauty and purity..A fave.

Tim Smith
Date: 2/22/2017 11:13:00 AM

Thanks Charma...You bring me many smiles today : ))

Peter Dome

Date: 2/22/2017 8:58:00 AM

Wonderful and so artful poetic. what all great poems try to be, but few succeed, well done. Hope you are ok, Best wishes. Peter.

Tim Smith
Date: 2/22/2017 11:12:00 AM

Thanks Pete, eventually I'll be okay.

Darren White

Date: 2/21/2017 9:59:00 PM

This is beautiful, Tim. To be carried away and let your fantasy roam free, it makes us sad too.

Tim Smith
Date: 2/22/2017 11:12:00 AM

Thanks my friend : ))

Darren White
Date: 2/22/2017 12:28:00 AM

that last line is a real gem :)

Lynn Marie

Date: 2/21/2017 8:58:00 PM

Terrific writing Tim. To live through pretty words in the ethera, an anesthetic to loneliness knowing it's not real yet wishful all the same. The sadness feels palpable, so beautiful are your descriptive words. This is one of the best pieces I have read on this theme and I like how you end it with a wee bit of hope :-) Excellent writing, sending sunshine your way :-) blessings, lynn

Tim Smith
Date: 2/22/2017 11:11:00 AM

Thank you very much Lynn... Blessings

Sara Ella

Date: 2/21/2017 7:28:00 PM

Tim I hope your knee gets better every day and that your dreams come true. ?? I love the beautiful pictures your words create ?? Sandcastles and swans ??

Tim Smith
Date: 2/22/2017 11:10:00 AM

If I could figure out how to pay for those dreams : ))

Sara Ella
Date: 2/21/2017 10:17:00 PM

???? I don't know what you mean Darren ???? :D <3

Darren White
Date: 2/21/2017 10:12:00 PM

????? Sara is very good at question marks ?????

Sara Ella
Date: 2/21/2017 7:31:00 PM

Hearts!!! ??=wonderful, lovely hearts <3