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Indelible Blue

An indelible blue looking out to you
seducing the pain to wash away
with stolen keyboard strokes
a few extra x's and o's where
decimals move with inapprehension
carrying fantasy dreams offshore
where sandcastles are built with
riches never to be crowned
holding secret keys to happiness
breathless my tomorrows begin
under guise of the salty moon
worries behind,necks entwined
newly discovered swans swoon

Copyright © Tim Smith | Year Posted 2017

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Paul Callus Date: 2/23/2017 1:08:00 PM Some dreams are not meant to be realized...their destiny is nipped on conception. // paul Login to Reply

Maurice Yvonne Date: 2/22/2017 5:20:00 PM Just plain good writing. Emotive and descriptive. Love it Tim! Login to Reply Tim Smith Date: 2/22/2017 5:23:00 PM Thank you my friend

Nette Onclaud Date: 2/22/2017 1:15:00 PM you sway with undulated lines, tim.. always a delight to read you, your sensibilities and graces..huggs Login to Reply Tim Smith Date: 2/22/2017 5:23:00 PM Thanks nette

Charmaine Chircop Date: 2/22/2017 10:54:00 AM Sandcastles are beautiful ..even if they get blown away so fast..Love the Salty moon and those swooing swans..I so love swans..They remind me of calm beauty and purity..A fave. Login to Reply Tim Smith Date: 2/22/2017 11:13:00 AM Thanks Charma...You bring me many smiles today : ))

Peter Dome Date: 2/22/2017 8:58:00 AM Wonderful and so artful poetic. what all great poems try to be, but few succeed, well done. Hope you are ok, Best wishes. Peter. Login to Reply Tim Smith Date: 2/22/2017 11:12:00 AM Thanks Pete, eventually I'll be okay.

Darren White Date: 2/21/2017 9:59:00 PM This is beautiful, Tim. To be carried away and let your fantasy roam free, it makes us sad too. Login to Reply Tim Smith Date: 2/22/2017 11:12:00 AM Thanks my friend : )) Darren White Date: 2/22/2017 12:28:00 AM that last line is a real gem :)

Lynn Marie Date: 2/21/2017 8:58:00 PM Terrific writing Tim. To live through pretty words in the ethera, an anesthetic to loneliness knowing it's not real yet wishful all the same. The sadness feels palpable, so beautiful are your descriptive words. This is one of the best pieces I have read on this theme and I like how you end it with a wee bit of hope :-) Excellent writing, sending sunshine your way :-) blessings, lynn Login to Reply Tim Smith Date: 2/22/2017 11:11:00 AM Thank you very much Lynn... Blessings

Sara Ella Date: 2/21/2017 7:28:00 PM Tim I hope your knee gets better every day and that your dreams come true. ?? I love the beautiful pictures your words create ?? Sandcastles and swans ?? Login to Reply Tim Smith Date: 2/22/2017 11:10:00 AM If I could figure out how to pay for those dreams : )) Sara Ella Date: 2/21/2017 10:17:00 PM ???? I don't know what you mean Darren ???? :D <3 Darren White Date: 2/21/2017 10:12:00 PM ????? Sara is very good at question marks ????? Sara Ella Date: 2/21/2017 7:31:00 PM Hearts!!! ??=wonderful, lovely hearts <3

Daniel Turner Date: 2/21/2017 5:30:00 PM Trying to live tomorrow, today? You are so damned cryptic:) Login to Reply Tim Smith Date: 2/22/2017 11:10:00 AM Glad you know me and my ways

Heidi Sands Date: 2/21/2017 4:06:00 PM I like the ending Tim. I hope things will turn out full of happiness for you. :) Login to Reply Tim Smith Date: 2/22/2017 11:09:00 AM Thanks so much Heidi

Jan Allison Date: 2/21/2017 3:45:00 PM love the romantic imagery of the beach and sea and also sense that feeling of longing Tim:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Tim Smith Date: 2/22/2017 11:08:00 AM Thanks Jan

Chris Green Date: 2/21/2017 2:45:00 PM There seems to be a touch of sadness or loneliness in this one Tim, though it is quite beautifully written and feels nice to read. Login to Reply Tim Smith Date: 2/21/2017 2:50:00 PM Thanks Chris, always look for a silver lining.