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Silent One's Ten Lines from Ten Poems Contest - 12/22/24

In Twilight's Shadows

My shadow grew longer as the sun bid me 'farewell.'  
Beneath my rowan tree in dour thoughts, I shall dwell. 
I curse life for her heartless schemes  
for now shattered and frayed, are my dreams.
I become eager to touch the breast of twilight  
as fog encroaches to shield me in the shadows of night.                                   
Do not pity the gasp of my last breath 
for then we'll both feel the agonizing misery of my death.
Pity is not an emotion in which I choose to wallow,
though I choke on the edge of anguish, a scream I swallow.     


Poems in order of their appearance:

Radiance of Sunset
Soft Murmurings
A Vision in My Dreams
Unraveled Seams of Frayed Dreams
To Touch the Breast of Twilight
A Death Never Mourned
I've Not Yet Said Farewell
A Heart Torn in Half
When the Sun Drowns in the Sea
On the Edge of Anguish

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Duke Beaufort January 15, 2025 at 4:15 PM Lin, this is the most consistent and best one of these I’ve seen. It makes quite an exit!

Andrea Dietrich December 31, 2024 at 10:02 AM Big congrats, Lin. You and I both did Twilight themes I tried to rhyme alternate rhymes but couldn't get it at the very end. It's so cool you could do rhyming couplets all the way through

Silent One December 31, 2024 at 8:47 AM I must say, I am immensely impressed with how you got your poem to rhyme and you know I love to write about death and melancholic poetry.. You have done that perfectly here.. This was a really difficult contest for me to judge, probably the most difficult.. So many great poems and there was a lot of rearranging to be done... Pity is never a good emotion of state of mind to wallow and I am glad you do not do that... we only drown if we stay in the water.. Congrats on your placement.

Michael Tor December 26, 2024 at 10:22 AM Lin this is so difficult and lengthy to do I would imagine. You must have put forth quite an effort. This Poem is one of the darkest ones I have read from you. A chilling write that when the reader reads it really has an impact on them. So real your chosen words. A favor for its shocking affects on the reader. Hugs and a favorite...

Gary Radice December 24, 2024 at 5:11 AM This is the sort of task that would have me pulling my hair out - perhaps a tad easier if it was free verse but..heck..cutting, pasting AND rhyming takes the biscuit. Great work Lin. PS..even the list of the poems the lines are taken from read like a poem in themselves. :) Cheers - Gary Lin Lane December 24, 2024 at 7:08 AM Hi, Gary. Rhyming isn't a stipulation for the contest, but I'm a rhymer at heart, so I challenged myself to write for S1's last contest my way. It helped that I've a treasure trove of pages from which to pick and choose my lines. Thank you ever so much for your supportive thoughts and happy holidays to you and your family.

Tom Cunningham December 22, 2024 at 10:25 PM Wow, creating a new poem using a sentence from your poems, very creative Lin. Good luck in the contest.. Tom Lin Lane December 23, 2024 at 4:50 AM Challenging but fun. Thank you, Tom.

Jan Allison December 22, 2024 at 2:31 PM Oh gosh what a challenge to write for this contest Lin and you've nailed it, I better not attempt knowing the line of pooetry i often write lol:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane December 22, 2024 at 3:52 PM Thank you, Jan. It took longer than I'd first intended because I wanted the lines to rhyme. It's S1's last contest so I wanted to enter.