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Silent One's Ten Lines from Ten Poems Contest - 12/22/24

My shadow grew longer as the sun bid me 'farewell.' Beneath my rowan tree in dour thoughts, I shall dwell. I curse life for her heartless schemes for now shattered and frayed, are my dreams. I become eager to touch the breast of twilight as fog encroaches to shield me in the shadows of night. Do not pity the gasp of my last breath for then we'll both feel the agonizing misery of my death. Pity is not an emotion in which I choose to wallow, though I choke on the edge of anguish, a scream I swallow. Poems in order of their appearance: Radiance of Sunset Soft Murmurings A Vision in My Dreams Unraveled Seams of Frayed Dreams To Touch the Breast of Twilight A Death Never Mourned I've Not Yet Said Farewell A Heart Torn in Half When the Sun Drowns in the Sea On the Edge of Anguish

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Duke Beaufort

Date: 1/15/2025 4:15:00 PM

Lin, this is the most consistent and best one of these I’ve seen. It makes quite an exit!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/31/2024 10:02:00 AM

Big congrats, Lin. You and I both did Twilight themes I tried to rhyme alternate rhymes but couldn't get it at the very end. It's so cool you could do rhyming couplets all the way through

Silent One

Date: 12/31/2024 8:47:00 AM

I must say, I am immensely impressed with how you got your poem to rhyme and you know I love to write about death and melancholic poetry.. You have done that perfectly here.. This was a really difficult contest for me to judge, probably the most difficult.. So many great poems and there was a lot of rearranging to be done... Pity is never a good emotion of state of mind to wallow and I am glad you do not do that... we only drown if we stay in the water.. Congrats on your placement.

Michael Tor

Date: 12/26/2024 10:22:00 AM

Lin this is so difficult and lengthy to do I would imagine. You must have put forth quite an effort. This Poem is one of the darkest ones I have read from you. A chilling write that when the reader reads it really has an impact on them. So real your chosen words. A favor for its shocking affects on the reader. Hugs and a favorite...

Gary Radice

Date: 12/24/2024 5:11:00 AM

This is the sort of task that would have me pulling my hair out - perhaps a tad easier if it was free verse but..heck..cutting, pasting AND rhyming takes the biscuit. Great work Lin. PS..even the list of the poems the lines are taken from read like a poem in themselves. :) Cheers - Gary

Lin Lane
Date: 12/24/2024 7:08:00 AM

Hi, Gary. Rhyming isn't a stipulation for the contest, but I'm a rhymer at heart, so I challenged myself to write for S1's last contest my way. It helped that I've a treasure trove of pages from which to pick and choose my lines. Thank you ever so much for your supportive thoughts and happy holidays to you and your family.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/22/2024 10:25:00 PM

Wow, creating a new poem using a sentence from your poems, very creative Lin. Good luck in the contest.. Tom

Lin Lane
Date: 12/23/2024 4:50:00 AM

Challenging but fun. Thank you, Tom.

Jan Allison

Date: 12/22/2024 2:31:00 PM

Oh gosh what a challenge to write for this contest Lin and you've nailed it, I better not attempt knowing the line of pooetry i often write lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 12/22/2024 3:52:00 PM

Thank you, Jan. It took longer than I'd first intended because I wanted the lines to rhyme. It's S1's last contest so I wanted to enter.