In the Throes of Dying Love

In the Throes of Dying Love

In the throes of dying love, you’re a 
fallen angel, with no celestial saving grace.
Rose-tinted glasses shattered, you’re no longer 
my hero, just a stark-naked zero. 

You besmirch every passing season
that we shared…hacking them down, 
one by one, like ugly unwanted weeds
in your garden. And my hope for a new you 
faded with the waning silver of the moon.

You’ve lost your lissome, school-boy charms;
and the power to pinion me with your cold,
mesmerizing eyes, those squinting black holes
that once sucked me in…trying to suffocate me.

Your love is just as phony as your 
painted-on smile, and that old forged,
water-color painting of a loving couple, 
that I found buried under dust
and cobwebs in the attic.

But as that ancient, worn-out sun sinks to repose,
in the dense, oblivion of dark firmament,
so has our sojourn ended…and I’ve forgotten
why I loved you in the first place.

Sadly, like that cheap wedding ring you bought me,  
you’re irrelevant…in the throes of dying love.

05-22-2018

Contest:     Eight Word Challenge – 4 Poetry Contest
Sponsor:    John Hamilton
Placement: 3rd

8 Words: throes, celestial, besmirch, pinion, lissome, repose, firmament, sojourn
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Juman Avatar
July 11, 2018 at 10:15 PM
Pandita my sweets your pen have got a knack to write these scenes. Excellent
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July 11, 2018 at 10:40 PM
Hi Al, thank you, my friend for your superlative comments and compliments which I enjoy receiving! Hope you had a lovely day! Best regards. Pandita
Lindley Avatar
June 20, 2018 at 9:13 AM
Another great poem you have gifted us my friend. I see congrats are in order for a top win with this excellent creation! A fav...
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June 20, 2018 at 9:15 AM
Hello Robert, it is always a unique pleasure to hear from you! I so very much appreciate your kind supportive words! Thank you for stopping by my friend. Best regards and hugs. Pandita.
Gauthier Avatar
June 9, 2018 at 10:30 PM
Well done, Pandita. Congrats on your top win.
Sietesantos Avatar
June 10, 2018 at 9:38 PM
Thank you very much, my friend, for your kind congratulatory words and compliments! Hugs and best regards. Pandita
Dietrich Avatar
June 8, 2018 at 7:41 PM
Hey, I found a great poem here that I had somehow missed. Very good work, Pandita and congrats for your win.
Sietesantos Avatar
June 8, 2018 at 9:14 PM
Hello Andie, I so very much appreciate your kind supportive words! Thank you for stopping by my friend. Best regards and hugs. Pandita.
Allison Avatar
June 6, 2018 at 1:20 PM
can't believe I missed this powerfully penned poem, it sure packs a punch Pandita:-) many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Sietesantos Avatar
June 6, 2018 at 1:23 PM
Awwwww! Thank you my dear Jan, that means a lot to me! Hope you are enjoying a beautiful day! Love and hugs. Pandita
Lamoureux Avatar
June 6, 2018 at 9:11 AM
It appears the judge also appreciates your artistry. Congrats on a fine win.
Sietesantos Avatar
June 6, 2018 at 10:43 AM
Hi Richard, thank you so much, my friend for your sweet words and congratulations! Have a great day! Hugs. Pandita
Gentry Avatar
June 4, 2018 at 11:38 PM
Back to say congratulations on your win with this explosive/healing poem. A fave this time after reading again. Excellent expression and writing.
Sietesantos Avatar
June 6, 2018 at 10:38 AM
Dear Susan, thank you for returning with your kind congratulatory words and fave! Have a lovely day! Hugs. Pandita
Roper Avatar
June 4, 2018 at 7:47 PM
Great use of the 8 words and, Pandita, with great imagery ; congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
Sietesantos Avatar
June 4, 2018 at 8:12 PM
Hi Eve, thank you very much, my friend for your kind congratulatory words and compliments! Hugs and best regards. Pandita
May Avatar
June 4, 2018 at 2:52 PM
Dropping back with my Congrats
Sietesantos Avatar
June 4, 2018 at 8:10 PM
Thank you so much, Joseph! I always appreciate you! Hugs and best regards. Pandita
Hamilton Avatar
June 4, 2018 at 11:15 AM
This was an excellent write Pandita, congrats on a fine top placement!
Sietesantos Avatar
June 4, 2018 at 8:09 PM
Hi John, I am very happy to be on the winners' list! Thank you very much! Hugs and best regards. Pandita
May Avatar
June 2, 2018 at 1:35 PM
A powerful write Pandita, a dying love exploding in the firmament...best wishes
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June 2, 2018 at 8:18 PM
Hello Joseph, I so very much appreciate your kind supportive words! Thank you for stopping by my friend. Best regards and hugs. Pandita.
Messina Avatar
June 1, 2018 at 3:34 PM
Awesome Pandita, when the sparkle in the eye of a loved one dims, it is a sign to move on...Love this one! If this relates to you my dearest friend, I hope only but the best for you...Have a lovely weekend...Hugs // Charlie :)
Sietesantos Avatar
June 2, 2018 at 9:52 AM
Hey Charlie, thank you, my friend for your superlative comments and compliments which I enjoy receiving! Hope your weekend isf bright with lots of sunshine! Hugs. Pandita
Smith Avatar
May 31, 2018 at 3:56 PM
Let me get this straight, I take it you don't like this guy anymore??? Well done Pandita, best wishes in the contest...
Sietesantos Avatar
June 2, 2018 at 9:44 AM
Hi Charlie, :-) - that's right - he's gone with the wind - hehehehe. Thank you, my friend for your always kind support! Hugs. Pandita
Rodrigues Avatar
May 31, 2018 at 2:05 PM
Great write with the required words! GL on contest!
Sietesantos Avatar
May 31, 2018 at 2:56 PM
Thank you very much, dear Kim! i appreciate your kind words! Hugs. Pandita
Lamoureux Avatar
May 31, 2018 at 8:51 AM
You made great use of your 8 words. I expect this will do very well.
Sietesantos Avatar
May 31, 2018 at 10:25 AM
Hello Richard, I so very much appreciate your kind supportive words! Thank you for stopping by my friend. Best wishes always. Pandita.
Horsman Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 4:50 PM
A pack a powerful punch, Pandita, awesome poetry, love this...
Sietesantos Avatar
May 31, 2018 at 10:22 AM
Thank you very much, Harry, for your visit and uplifting, supportive compliments/comments which I greatly appreciate! Hugs. Pandita.
Deo Avatar
May 24, 2018 at 2:18 PM
This "Dying Love" has quite a living KICK; lots of reactions to the past. What about NOW (don;t take me too seriously, but congrats Wonderful Princess Poet). shalom, shalom
Sietesantos Avatar
May 24, 2018 at 3:19 PM
:-) When love dies like that, at the time the beloved becomes "irrelevant" you know you are in a better place to move on! Thank you dear, Anil! Hugs. Pandita
One Avatar
May 23, 2018 at 10:39 AM
You did this challenge very well and used the words to great poetic detail.. Great poetry Pandita..
Sietesantos Avatar
May 23, 2018 at 3:58 PM
My dear friend, it is so wonderful to hear from you again! I hope you are doing well - relaxed and enjoying life! Thank you so much for visiting and for your sweet compliments! Hugs and love. Pandita
Gentile Avatar
May 23, 2018 at 9:32 AM
Pandita, I think you made such excellent use of the words to tell your story. Well done and Good Luck in the Contest, I am sure you will do well xxoo
Sietesantos Avatar
May 23, 2018 at 4:01 PM
Hi Mike, these words were indeed challenging - I had to dig deep to conceptualize and craft a cohesive piece:-)! Thank you very much for your lovely compliments! Hugs. Pandita
Pandit Avatar
May 23, 2018 at 6:27 AM
Excellent from start to finish, Pandita. All your poems are a pleasure to read. This will win BIG.
Sietesantos Avatar
May 23, 2018 at 8:21 AM
My friend Vijay, I thank you kindly for your sweet complimentary words which mean so much to me! Hope you are enjoying a beautiful day! Best regards. Pandita
Gentry Avatar
May 22, 2018 at 4:52 PM
Awesome how you did this!!! Smoothly used the 8 words in your poetry expressing real hurt that is displayed with anger and disgust. Excellent! Can't go by me, but I think it should be on the top of the winners list.
Sietesantos Avatar
May 23, 2018 at 8:19 AM
Susan, what beautiful words and sentiments! Susan, I am so appreciative of your wonderful compliments and delighted that you enjoyed this very special piece! Thank you kindly, my friend! Pandita
Cunningham Avatar
May 22, 2018 at 3:48 PM
Great verse using all eight words Pandita. A sad tale of a love turned sour. Good luck in the contest. Tom.
Sietesantos Avatar
May 22, 2018 at 3:52 PM
Hi Tom, thank you so much for visiting and leaving your insightful comment and lovely compliments as usual! Truly it's always sad when love turns sour! Best regards. Pandita
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