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In the Late August Sun Premiere Contest Winner

Watching leaves cartwheel down
we meet at the bench
tucked under the trees, in the park

Unable to speak
I am feeling a squeeze in my breast
My emotions are clenched
with years of unrest
since that day that I left, empty armed

Still weak in the knees
I must sit while I watch 
this child, once mine,
sit cross-legged, in light
of the late August sun

His fingers unpeel
the paper, and twine
from the gift I have brought
from a little gift shop 
that I passed when I walked in the night

With the package undone,
he smiles up at me
and I see in his eyes
the wholeness of him
	
And I am strangled to say
the words that I could….
Would  I tell him the things
that would empty those eyes
of a soft place to land ?

Now he grabs for the hand
of the mother he knows
and I thank her with eyes
before I must go

I must leave him to her
and not say the words
that would follow him home for all time

I have broken away
any hold that I had
except for the one
that chokes out the sun
on a hot August day
in the late afternoon

A leaf tumbles down, then is swept by the breeze
Only here for a moment, then gone

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A Fictional Poem Based On Contest: "Long Lost Family"

8/15/16
Resubmitted for the 'PIECE DE RESISTANCE ' contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 10/20/2016 9:39:00 AM
This tears at the heart, Carrie. You stir so much emotional pain with your words. Congratulations on your well-deserved placement in this Premiere Contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 10/20/2016 8:44:00 AM
Congratulations Mrs Carrie for your placement in the contest. A very moving poem and worthy of all the honors it has received.
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Date: 10/20/2016 8:09:00 AM
This is so touching and sad. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 10/20/2016 7:49:00 AM
Carrie, I'm back to say a big CONGRATULATIONS! I love this poem. Janice
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Date: 9/24/2016 7:25:00 PM
Congrats on your win.
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Date: 9/24/2016 2:23:00 PM
beautiful Carrie...congratulations on your placement :)-luloo
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Date: 9/24/2016 10:31:00 AM
Back again, moved to tears again, to say congrats, Carrie. Janice
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Date: 9/24/2016 12:28:00 AM
Carrie, I'm very pleased with your entry. I'm also glad you took the time to enter my contest. ;) for a second, I was thinking about leaving first and second place blank. Then I read your entry, I super love it, Congratulations on your nice win, stop by my blog "Where do poets go." Celebrate with me if you'd like. Take care *SKAT*
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Date: 9/7/2016 8:07:00 AM
Congrats Carrie, for your well, deserved first placement in the contest!! ;-)
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Date: 9/6/2016 11:23:00 AM
Beautiful poem carrie;)
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Date: 9/5/2016 8:46:00 AM
This one made me cry! Congratulations on your well-deserved TOP win. Janice
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Date: 9/3/2016 1:31:00 PM
A masterpiece surely!Congrats Carrie
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Date: 9/3/2016 12:28:00 PM
I like this. Congratulations on your win. Many wishes, Kai
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Date: 9/2/2016 11:16:00 PM
Great writing. Congrats on your 1st place! Sunita
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Date: 9/2/2016 10:53:00 PM
So emotional and touching and masterfully written, Carrie! Congrats on your top win :)
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Date: 9/2/2016 9:15:00 PM
Carrie, a beautiful and heartwarming poem which certainly deserves the first place within the contest. I realize it is a work of fiction. Your visualization seems so real and stirs up empathy for the mother who gave up her child. Congratulations, Sonia.
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Date: 9/2/2016 8:27:00 PM
Carrie, congratulations on your win. This is touching and beautiful. Agnes
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Date: 9/2/2016 8:00:00 PM
Carrie, so beautiful lady...congrats on your placement :)-luloo
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Date: 9/2/2016 6:54:00 PM
Excellent, Carrie! Poignant and heart wrenching!
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Date: 8/16/2016 1:56:00 PM
Carrie,Carrie,Carrie,...look at you getting right into the emotions, love the non-flow of this piece, how it trips and trips, but unravels a sad story, ...for a fictional, you certainly made it work,...well done...Ian x
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Date: 8/16/2016 7:38:00 AM
This is a scenario that is deeply felt because I know of such heartache, not personally but from a best friend. You captured those feelings beautifully Carrie. I will bet this is a winner! 7 ; )
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Date: 8/15/2016 6:01:00 PM
That would be extremely hard to do. Very sad, Carrie but well written. Good luck!
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