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In the Gloaming

The hunter set off just before the gloaming
adjusting the straps of his high powered rifle
it was a long way to where the stag usually fed
a majestic stag sprouting twelve point antlers

Climbing high up the rugged mountain side
he trekked fast covering the many miles
at last he was where the stag usually fed
casting  around for signs of his tracks

Finding them he started stalking his prey
up hill and down dale he carefully followed
until at last he could see him way up ahead
taking care to keep down wind he got close

Now about one hundred yards apart, he settled
nestling into the thick bracken patiently waiting
The stag climbed onto his favourite outlook
and stood there poised as the gloaming lit the sky

Truly  a wondrous sight he was in full prime
the hunter sighed as he took steady aim
then with a click it was finally time to shoot
the stag hearing the sound took to his heels

The hunted checked his camera, yes he had him
a perfect picture well satisfied he packed up
this one picture had taken days of trailing him
now he was forever captured in magnificent splendour

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 5/15/2014 7:52:00 PM
I am so happy with this ending Shadow. I had hoped that was where you were headed.
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Date: 5/15/2014 8:04:00 AM
I could feel the suspense of the cameraman as he stalked his subject..I was hoping that he would get a great shot..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 5/14/2014 3:58:00 PM
Dear Shadow, How glad I was that this hunter was only seeking a photograph. Yes, I enjoy eating venison, but I love even more seeing deer in the wild. Captivating poem with a clever and welcome twist at the end! Carolyn
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Date: 5/14/2014 12:59:00 AM
Nicely done, Shadow. I enjoyed this write, and for the record, I've never been hunting. I can't harm an animal...that's who I am. Kudos...xxx...mel
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Date: 5/13/2014 8:18:00 PM
oh I just LOVE this surprise ending. Wonderful job with this one, and the title is so cool. I did a contest once and In the gloaming was one of the titles poets could choose to use!!!
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