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In the Darkness of the Eclipse

Who said: "You don't realise what you've got, till it's gone."
In your absence I despise silence, when you're gone loneliness visits, but his friendship, I do not desire. An empty scent circulates in the room. Air is cold and crisp, all is black and white with sad songs on repeat. I find no peace listening to the rain since you left me in the darkness of the eclipse. Phone keeps ringing, but its not your name flashing on display - I prefer a blank screen. Not one voice seems to appease, nor give me peace from this disease - when you disappear like Houdini. Yet your ghost lingers in the backdrop. A candle quivers, dripping in tears of wax. I don't blame your heart for its change, but why so stubborn in bitter muteness. Without you my soul resides in an empty trunk, defaced with green moss, crawling with beetles. Sanity is dripping like a leaking bottle of crimson water. I remember when you were a wounded bird, bleeding on a path to no where, unable to fly, crying endlessly, yearning for your nest - but now you have flown so far away. Sometimes there is no patience in time, especially when one closes their mind. Without a chance to clarify confusion, all is lost in ignorant translation. Once, I had a million pieces of affection, wedged between my soul, heart and mind, but in your eyes they were rejected as unworthy. Once what you loved, is now your enemy. Today, I am the twin of sorrow, tomorrow your twin will be regret and you'll be crying when you're forgotten.
Simple Musing (fictional poem) Silent One 20 November 2020 The quote is a line from the song "Big Yellow Taxi" by Joni Mitchell from the album Ladies of the Canyon (1970).
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Thomas Avatar
November 30, 2020 at 1:01 PM
Is that not always the outcome? Beautiful in its uniqueness as always S1
Proxenos Avatar
November 24, 2020 at 4:48 AM
But what you write I believe is totally true - hold on to what you have got, the love, the sharing. the time together, the secrets, the happiness - somehow they think can be replaced - its a costly doing to ones soul to leave someone that loves you, they should wake up and smell the roses, otherwise it will be too late. Just as a matter of interest you mention at the end that one would be the twin of sorrow and the one that's left the twin of regret - could be GEMINIS! Hugs blessings, Jenn.
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November 25, 2020 at 8:43 AM
Thank you..Well I am a Gemini lol...
Rodrigues Avatar
November 22, 2020 at 5:05 PM
Great imagery! You dig deep into your sorrows.
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November 23, 2020 at 9:45 AM
Thank you..
Rose  Avatar
November 22, 2020 at 9:58 AM
You have a way of expressing emotion like nobody's business. lol, I always am amazed on just how far you've come, its like whenever I think you got to the highest wrung, you surprise me with one more step to the pyre . Loved it. just loved it.
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November 23, 2020 at 9:45 AM
Thank you.. Like nobodys business lol
Fenn Avatar
November 22, 2020 at 9:48 AM
Wow Silent One! This is written with such feeling I would swear it’s true instead of fiction!
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November 23, 2020 at 9:46 AM
Thank you..
Canerdy Avatar
November 21, 2020 at 8:38 PM
Vivid blend of literal and figurative language to describe the pain and frustration of a broken romance, SO. Janice
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November 23, 2020 at 9:46 AM
Thank you..
Ligon Avatar
November 21, 2020 at 9:10 AM
Your poem engages the senses as well as the heart.
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November 23, 2020 at 9:46 AM
Thank you..
Adams Avatar
November 21, 2020 at 8:35 AM
your poems are always full of such emotion that pull the reader in and make them feel the words... glad i stopped by soup today and read your excellent write! hugs
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November 23, 2020 at 9:46 AM
Thank you..
George   Avatar
November 21, 2020 at 5:06 AM
The deeps of emotion you have conveyed with such magnificent metaphors in this brilliant free verse is simply AWE DROPPING. I have experienced much of what you write here at different stages of my life and have come to terms and learned much from these experience . You...my poetic friend...are a very gifted writer. Sincerely, ~ Elaine
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November 23, 2020 at 9:47 AM
Thank you.. That is very sweet of your to say and its always nice when someone relates to your words..
Buhagiar Avatar
November 21, 2020 at 1:37 AM
Lost love is always a favorite of mine. You did well with this poem, full of emotions. ~~
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November 23, 2020 at 9:47 AM
Thank you..
Nicole Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 9:20 PM
"You'll be crying when you're forgotten" We all want to be remember in some way. As far as this quote. It holds soooo much truth. Many moments and emotions tangle around your words. This is deep and tender, all at the same time. ~ Brandy
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November 23, 2020 at 9:47 AM
Thank you..
Buehler Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 8:11 PM
This is a wonderful poem, Silent One. The regret over lost love is poignantly described and deeply stirring.
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November 23, 2020 at 9:47 AM
Thank you..
Crabtree Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 7:59 PM
Silent One, sometimes I think we are on the same wave length. I just wrote a poem and uploaded it on here. I was comparing my husband to Houdini and I see here that you also have compared your friend to Houdini. A wonderful write, as always. Wishing you a wonderful weekend :)
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November 23, 2020 at 9:48 AM
Thank you.. What a coincidence!
Murray Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 7:54 PM
I relate to this. Wonderfully wounded in heart and soul Well done
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November 23, 2020 at 9:48 AM
Thank you..
Krutsinger Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 6:04 PM
All of your poems are creative beauties, however you may have surpassed your other writes with this one, Silent One. You are a maestro of gorgeous writes.
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November 23, 2020 at 9:48 AM
Thank you..
Alao Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 4:25 PM
This poem touches my soul
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November 23, 2020 at 9:48 AM
Thank you..
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 11:29 AM
Wow to pen such an imaginative poem with such awesome creative metaphoric imagery woww, you write masterpieces. Kudos for this soulful fab poem muse.
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November 23, 2020 at 9:48 AM
Thank you..
Gilmour Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 10:16 AM
Wow SO, such powerful words with so much hurt and pain ~ a sadness that never really comes to an end. This is too much for one human being to endure my friend. Love and life can be so complicated. I was truly lucky to find my true love and my soulmate, though sadly he was taken too soon. With kindest thoughts Ann xx
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November 23, 2020 at 9:48 AM
Thank you.. You are very lucky..
Mcintosh Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 9:08 AM
Another amazing write that haunts hearts and brings emotions to light. God bless you with many many more. You are a true inspiration
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November 23, 2020 at 9:49 AM
Thank you..
Cunningham Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 7:50 AM
We go through our lives always searching and sometimes we think we have found it only to realise it wasnt what we hoped it was. But we never give up. Tom
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November 20, 2020 at 7:54 AM
Indeed Tom, you are right.. Thank you
Kendrick Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 7:38 AM
Creative emotive work. Way to go for the contest. Thanks for the visit to my page. I agree those wet, soggy leaves are hard to rake but my husband just mulches them all now so I don't have to do the raking anymore. Sara
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November 20, 2020 at 7:53 AM
Thank you Sara, this is not for a contest though..
Robinson Jr. Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 7:08 AM
Another poetic gem, SO! You muse w/such elevated brilliance. The depth of thought/simplicity of expression is breathtaking. You always stand on the emotional precipice of limitless clarity. This poem is golden! Love and more love always.
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November 20, 2020 at 7:10 AM
Thank you Freddie, I do like to write emotions in different ways and poems that people will be able to relate to..
Pandit Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 6:31 AM
Your simple musings choreograph beautifully saddened echoes of broken hearts, SO. Complexity of human emotions change people over time--as you say in your quote...forever searching...
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November 20, 2020 at 7:09 AM
Thank you Vijay, human emotions are so fragile.. We keep searching until we find that which completes our soul..
Dome Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 6:22 AM
Your talent is amazing my friend. som many great lines. I felt this one deeply. Although fiction, it will resonate with so many people. Been there my friend. sell done. Take care.
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November 20, 2020 at 7:09 AM
Thank you Peter, I think this is one many will be able to relate with..
Balasubramanian Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 5:53 AM
"when one closes their mind. Without a chance to clarify confusion, all is lost in ignorant translation" And last 3 lines so very true. many can relate. Another great write. Regards Rama
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November 20, 2020 at 7:08 AM
Happens so much in this world, not just in any form of relationships, but also with politics and so much more.. Thank you Rama..
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