In the Dark

The sunset clouds are pinks and greys
in tattered strips, in rips and frays,
in feathered flight at end of days,
in summer skies that fill my gaze.

And in the pines beside the sea
a hundred birds talk endlessly
and shooshing waves lap hungrily
as we eat fish and chips for tea.

Before the day turned into night
the pinks were burned by dying light.
The birds were still, the moon was slight
when day had gone and it was night.

And then my eyes could hardly see
the scenery in front of me.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 3/27/2024 11:18:00 AM
A wonderful write, Jeanette. Love this! Congratulations on your top win in my contest. Sorry so late. Hugs Charlie
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Jeanette Swan
Date: 3/27/2024 1:43:00 PM
Glad you enjoyed this evening on the beach with the kids. J :)
Date: 2/10/2024 7:05:00 AM
Wow! This is fantastic! Beautiful imagery of nature. Ending is brilliant too as it brings closure to your poem like the end of the daylight. :-D
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Jeanette Swan
Date: 2/10/2024 11:58:00 AM
Thanks Natasha. I hope it reminds you of a happy time too. J :)
Date: 1/30/2024 7:34:00 PM
Love this Jeanette! Fave!
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Jeanette Swan
Date: 1/30/2024 9:18:00 PM
So glad you enjoyed it. J:)
Date: 1/28/2024 5:13:00 PM
This is wonderful Jeanette: It brought back memories of Australia. It flows beautifully. Into my favs. SuZ
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Jeanette Swan
Date: 1/28/2024 7:27:00 PM
Thanks SuZ :) happy memories, smell of the sea and pine together
Date: 1/24/2024 1:38:00 AM
Great emotions, imagery and diction in this poem. Well done.
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Jeanette Swan
Date: 1/24/2024 1:46:00 AM
Thanks Victor for your kind comments :)
Date: 1/23/2024 9:33:00 AM
Such a lovely write describing what enfolds around us, capturing our sights until we couldn't see anymore with the darkness.
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Jeanette Swan
Date: 1/23/2024 7:31:00 PM
Thanks Marilene. I smiled when reading your ITQ because 'Before the day turned into night' took us to the same setting:)
Date: 1/23/2024 3:19:00 AM
I like the rhythm, rhyme and flow of this one. You have described such a beautiful scene. I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing. Sara K
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Jeanette Swan
Date: 1/23/2024 3:21:00 AM
Thanks Sara, memories of picnics at Collaroy beach when kids were young (stumbling back to the car).
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