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In Tenebrific Night I Stirred

"Darkness is but a door, scary not because it opens, but out of fear that it will never close." by: Johnathan Jena In darkness, I sleepily stirred, petrified with fright at the sound of raucous roaring beasts in the night Creepy things crawled on me. I shivered at the sight A bell tolled as demons tried to tear apart my heart I floated on a stygian river, troubled by my thought watching a specter aiming at me with a deadly dart Phantoms danced on my bed until my pulse grew weak My wretched end was near. My death they'd soon seek In gloom of this macabre scene, voices began to speak Ghouls wailed and pounded upon the bedroom walls I cowered when werewolves howled within the halls In this tenebrific nightmare, I heard thunderous footfalls My teeth were chattering as the house began to shake more violently than a volcanic eruption or an earthquake Before my burial song would be sung, I prayed to wake There was a deafening crash from just outside my door I was near the point of fainting, then woke upon the floor Beside me lay the crumpled page of Poe's sweet 'Lenore." September 25, 2022 One From the Dark Side Contest Sponsor: John Lawless November 8, 2021 "T" Contest - Sponsored by Constance La France *With a nod to Edgar Allen Poe for borrowing a few of his expressions from 'Lenore.'

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Date: 11/17/2021 11:43:00 AM
Jenna, I was just 4 lines in, thinking 'this reminds me so much of Poe'... then saw your note at the end... you really nailed his style but made it your very own, well done. You really captured that phobic feeling of one's imagination going wild in the darkness. I loved your title (and learned 2 new words, 'tenebrific' and 'stygian') and the way you sustained the fear vibe right to the end. I liked all the 'w' sounds in lines 4-5 of stanza 2. Congrats and thank you, I really enjoyed this ~ John
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/17/2021 1:01:00 PM
Goodness, John! You should be a professional critique considering the fantastic details you offer. It's wonderful to read such encouraging comments from a fellow poet, especially one I admire. Constance is to thank for tenebrific, and I've always loved 'stygian.' Sounds so much better than 'dark,' Thank you SO much!
Date: 11/11/2021 9:37:00 AM
Jenna, terrific writing and congratulations on your First Place win in my "T" Contest, I like the quote too ~ love and serenity _Constance
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/11/2021 1:17:00 PM
Thanks so much for awarding these lines, Constance.
Date: 11/10/2021 6:30:00 AM
Beautiful work. Congratulations!
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/11/2021 1:17:00 PM
Thank you.
Date: 11/9/2021 9:43:00 PM
Wow! You have truly nailed this horror poem, Jenna! Congratulations!
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/11/2021 1:17:00 PM
Thanks a lot, Jo.
Date: 11/9/2021 4:47:00 PM
Blimey.. I’m only ever gonna read Poe on the po… just to be safe. Well creepy that, Jenna. Good luck in the contest. Terry…………….. PS: I don’t know if it was ever used in the States or even if anyone still uses it in the UK, but ‘the po’ basically means ‘the lav’:-)
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/11/2021 1:16:00 PM
Thanks so much, Terry.
Date: 11/9/2021 1:54:00 AM
That's enough to make my bones rattle. I'll never read a scary book before I sleep.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/9/2021 4:49:00 AM
I certainly don't blame you, Victor. That's the kind of stuff nightmares are made of. Thanks!
Date: 11/8/2021 12:00:00 PM
That was some nightmare Jenna written in true Poe like style. Poe should only be read in daylight lol. Good luck in the contest. Tom
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Date: 11/9/2021 4:48:00 AM
Oh Tom, I agree. I envision that beating heart when I think of Tell Tale Heart. Thanks for your well wishes.

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