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Original Poem Just Desserts I was at my favourite restaurant and had a lovely meal If I finished all my food then a pudding was the deal I’d relished every morsel and was pleased as a Cheshire cat The dessert menu was on its way, Oh I couldn’t wait for that The waitress bought the menus and I rubbed my hands with glee Oh sticky toffee pudding, now that’s the one for me She came to take the order – we had waited as you do She finally turned to me and said ‘oh Madam what can I get you’ Oh stiffy cockie pudding please was my swift reply I didn’t realise what I’d said till I saw the tears form in her eye I went as red as a beetroot and the others began to laugh At my spoonerism which turned into a complete gaffe The pudding it came quickly but I couldn’t wait to leave I choked on every mouthful and my stomach it did heave So please take notice of my error on this horrendous day If you order sticky toffee pudding be careful what you say! 2nd February 2014 This was my first poem posted here and was is my first poem to be published in a book by United Press Response Poem to Just Desserts When I read my ‘Just Desserts’ poem, oh I made such a gaffe I am petrified it will happen again and everyone will laugh At home I have been practicing the correct words I have to say To order sticky toffee pudding again will really make my day We still go to this local restaurant for a tasty treat I love the food they serve, it’s a lovely place to eat But when its time to choose my dessert then I begin to shake After my terrible Spoonerism I can’t make the same mistake I smile sweetly at the waitress who comes to take my choice Then clear my throat gently so I have a steady voice I want to order sticky toffee pudding, the dessert of my dream But I chicken out at the last minute and order an ice cream! Contest - A response to My First Poem Sponsored by Silent One 09~27~15

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Marian Millerstutzman

Date: 10/6/2015 9:54:00 PM

Hillarious :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2015 10:02:00 PM

Still makes me embarrassed at the thought lol there is a further poem I have written - I have come up with a solution and can hopefully get my favourite pudding:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/2/2015 11:56:00 AM

Great first poem and response, Jan. I enjoyed reading this! Congrats on your win. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 10/2/2015 12:19:00 PM

It's so lovely to get our original poems read i really loved this clever contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Bill Lindsay

Date: 10/2/2015 5:05:00 AM

Oh, Jan ... that's a classic. Perhaps this is why there are pictures on more menus these days - so the likes of you can just point ;)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/2/2015 12:18:00 PM

Oh now that would also be an ideal solution lol but I have come up with one of my own and posted the poem yesterday lol:-) hugs jan xx

Skat A

Date: 10/2/2015 12:57:00 AM

Jan, Congratulations on the response to your first poem ***SKAT

Jan Allison
Date: 10/2/2015 12:17:00 PM

Thanks Skat:-) hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/1/2015 4:11:00 PM

Interesting lines penned..Enjoyed reading today..Congrats on your win..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 10/2/2015 12:17:00 PM

Thanks Sara:-) hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/1/2015 8:04:00 AM

This is perfect Jan, this is so much sweet fun! Congrats, I'm happy to share third place with such a talented poet.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/2/2015 12:16:00 PM

You are too kind with your praise Richard i still see myself as a fledgling poet but I am spreading my wings and flying high with the support of lovely people on the site:-0 hugs jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 10/1/2015 1:18:00 AM

Wonderful poem Jan n so is the win! Big congrats! Yummy poetry n glad to know abt it's publication !

Jan Allison
Date: 10/2/2015 12:15:00 PM

The published poem was reduced to 160 words and they wanted to call it'restaurant' but I insisted the original title was kept:-) hugs jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/1/2015 12:21:00 AM

Nice win. LINDA

Jan Allison
Date: 10/2/2015 12:14:00 PM

Thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 9/30/2015 10:34:00 PM

This is hilarious Jan... Congrats on your win...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/2/2015 12:09:00 PM

Thanks so much Jospeh:-) I have now penned a solution to my problem which I posted yesterday:-) Hugs Jan xx

Balveen Cheema

Date: 9/30/2015 10:25:00 PM

Congrats Jan! A warning bell for all- take care of using correct words.Love, Balveen

Jan Allison
Date: 10/2/2015 12:09:00 PM

Thanks so much Balveen:-) I have now penned a solution to my problem which I posted yesterday:-) Hugs Jan xx

Robert Lindley

Date: 9/30/2015 9:45:00 PM

GREAT RESPONSE TO YOUR FIRST POEM MY FRIEND.. Congrats on you fine win...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/2/2015 12:08:00 PM

Thanks so much Robert I have now penned a solution to my problem which I posted yesterday:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 9/30/2015 8:59:00 PM

I love how your responded to your first poem, Jan. Congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 10/2/2015 12:07:00 PM

I've now done a third poem as inspired by Cecilia's comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Michael Tor

Date: 9/30/2015 8:34:00 PM

Excellent win Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/2/2015 12:07:00 PM

Thanks so much Michael :-) Hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/30/2015 6:55:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your win:-)Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 10/2/2015 12:06:00 PM

Thanks so much Alexis :-) Hugs Jan xx

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 9/30/2015 5:03:00 PM

I knew this would win! I'm tickled that I inspired you to write a third poem on your favorite dessert : ) ....Hugs my friend

Jan Allison
Date: 9/30/2015 5:07:00 PM

Oh I can't resist a challenge lol:-) hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 9/30/2015 4:53:00 PM

Told you so...Congrats, Jan! hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/30/2015 4:58:00 PM

Thanks Kim:-) I have now written a third poem in response to Cecilia's remark I will probably post it tomorrow:-) hugs Jan xx

Duke Beaufort

Date: 9/29/2015 5:00:00 PM

You are such a talent, Jan. You are just a gem on this planet of ours. And also a gem in the whole universe.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/29/2015 5:02:00 PM

Aww you guys are too kind to me - I am amazed at how far I have come since I started writing and posted this in February 2014:-) hugs jan xx

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 9/29/2015 4:04:00 PM

This is so cute and hilarious Jan....poor you never eating sticky toffee pudding since then, you need to face that fear and order that dessert and write us a poem telling us how delicious it is. Excellent poems! Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 9/29/2015 4:09:00 PM

I wish I could Cecilia - our friends always tease me when it comes to ordering dessert lol:-( Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/29/2015 3:34:00 PM

You are so funny, too afraid to order what you really want. I know you are exaggerating and it is great humor!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/29/2015 3:52:00 PM

NOOOOOOO its completely true Andrea I have never ordered it to this day!:-) hugs jan xx

James Inman

Date: 9/28/2015 9:02:00 PM

Love both poems Jan. Sweet and clever.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/29/2015 1:38:00 AM

Thanks James and both are true lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 9/28/2015 11:48:00 AM

Jan, both poems are delightfully fun and best of luck in the contest and thanks for visiting my poem, who do you think ...

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2015 12:37:00 PM

Both poems are true too lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 9/28/2015 5:13:00 AM

Hilarious and charming let not forget appetizing! Enjoyed! Good luck, a7 dear Jean. Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2015 5:45:00 AM

Thanks Demetrios - i've recently found the first part of Just desserts plagerised and they used 'rhubarb crumble' as the dessert... but it misses the whole point of the poem lol :-) hugs Jan xx

Michael Tor

Date: 9/27/2015 10:26:00 PM

Very funny Jan nice response. Done extremely well.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2015 5:37:00 AM

Thanks Michael:-) hugs Jan xx