In My Deepest Fantasies

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Jan. 21. 2025

In Your Deepest Fantasies Poetry Contest

Sponsor- Anoucheka GangaBissoon

~ PLACED FIRST~

Sudden was the descent of poetry on me
I tottered under its weight
My body heated up like the sun
A frying egg yolk on the pan
My blood started burning…. burning

A strange madness crept across my senses
Intoxicated as by an excess dose of ale
Or drunk with the vintage wine
Or by some mystical disengagement
I started levitating

Wings sprouted up suddenly on my sides
I reeled round and round
Flew up and up
Meteors flashed past
Stars blinked
Larger celestial bodies stood still
Strange sounds fleeted past my ears
My heart palpitated,
Like the rumblings of thunder
My eyes glowed like fire balls

A shout I heard afar
Over the heavens’ mysterious rim
Muffled though, I could decipher it;
“Welcome to the clan of poets”!
Around me, I saw multitudes of poets
Young and old, their faces blazing
Like a thousand lanterns lit
In that blinding brilliance
My filmy wings burnt outright!

Like Icarus, from the heights
I flopped down to the chasm below
In the scattered heap of flesh and bones
A faint stir …..
…………………..
The feeble flutter of a poetic heart
Before it was finally stilled!!

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Regina Mcintosh

Date: 1/28/2025 11:22:00 AM

Amazing, fantastical, fanciful, a music in the soul, a poet's breath on the leaves who dance in the heat of the summer's warmth and collide with light as the autumn pours her wonder over the twilight thoughts. Beautiful and familiar, as the poetic winds, the still of snow, the rain who wrote gentle - I love it. Congratulations and God bless you, love, Gina

Sam Kauffman

Date: 1/27/2025 11:50:00 AM

Dearest Valsa, in your poem we are raised to celestial heights then dropped to earth to struggle once again from the depths to rise like a phoenix and fly again. I do believe you will always "sprout wings" to carry you to the celestial heights of poetry. This poem is so beautifully crafted with descriptive images. Fly on, dear friend, as you complete this journey of poetic renewal over and over! Blessings for your journey with hopes for soft landings for we are in need of your voice.

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/22/2025 1:43:00 PM

An outstanding poem, Valsa, explores the seductive and overpowering sense of inspiration in poetry, depicting it as both uplifting and devastating. You describe a sudden plummet of lyrical inspiration that propels you to celestial heights, only to end in a terrible fall reminiscent of the tale of Icarus. The poem also addresses issues of creation, the duality of creative inspiration, and the inherent hazards that come with the quest for beauty and truth via poetry.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/21/2025 8:34:00 PM

Not what I expected at all from the title --- and a VERY PLEASANT surprise, Valsa. Elegant and exquisite verse here. A winner, no doubt. ~ Gershon

Stephan McBride

Date: 1/21/2025 5:19:00 PM

This is beautiful as always, to witness this gift you have been given from God, that others might receive a new understanding and knowledge, much love and prayers for you and family

Zyrool Gifford

Date: 1/21/2025 3:19:00 PM

A beautiful write, Valsa. Enjoyed reading your work, my friend. Good luck with the contest. Have a wonderful rest of the week.

Jay Narain

Date: 1/21/2025 10:38:00 AM

Nice poem with free poetic mind.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/21/2025 4:42:00 AM

Easy to get drunk on poetry! Many don’t understand then you find your “peeps” Hugs and adulation to you, a fine poet!

Joe Dimino

Date: 1/20/2025 11:52:00 PM

Wow! Well done Valsa; I think poetry does that to all of us, once bitten. I've heard some suggest here, that one needs a life outside of poetry -- well, then one would not be a poet. Great write. Enjoyed.