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I was driving home late one cold Winters night It was minus ten and the moon shone bright Then in my car headlights a young girl I did see I swerved hard to avoid her and hit a large tree. Next thing I was standing in a cobbled street I was wearing white robes and sandals on my feet Rings on my fingers and all made of pure gold Everyone young and smiling, nobody was old. What was this place and how on earth did I get here? And yet I felt quite calm and without any fear Then the girl I nearly hit walked smiling towards me Saying " you're in the land of Cockaigne, everything is free". "You don't need any money just walk into a store Get as much as you want and go back if you need more" We went into a jewellers and it was a free for all People were grabbing everything, they were having a ball. She then took me to a wine bar on the other side of town People were drinking from bottles and guzzling it down Every type of wine that you could think of was on display And the best of it all was, that you didnt have to pay. Then I saw a strange building in the middle of town It stood very tall and the colour a dark brown Made of milk chocolate and for the people a treat Like others I broke off pieces and started to eat. Some other buildings too were made of fine food And in a glass fountain, people swam in the nude. But the water wasn't water it was fizzy champagne I was struggling to take it in, was I going insane ?. The girl said "you must be tired and should take a rest" And took me to a swanky hotel of quality the best Inside there were old masters adorning the walls And gold and silver doors that led to great halls. There were people sat down enjoying a banquet With classical music provided by a four string quartet She then took me to a room that was draped in luxury Then rang down for two masseurs to come and relax me. I started to doze off lying on a four poster bed And thought the only explanation was that I must be dead I must be in a dream state before going to the next life Then I thought of home, my two kids and my wife. And that girl I nearly knocked over before I got here Was she an angel or evil and something I should fear? I was so worn out and tired but first needed to sleep Then started to come to hearing an intermittent beep. My eyes then opened and a nurse was stood over me Told me I was lucky to be alive after hitting that tree She said " I was hallucinating, saying something about Cockaigne And that I'd had three operations, to relieve swelling on my brain". I was in hospital for another two weeks and then given the all clear The doctor said "I'd been lucky as I'd been in a coma for a year" Those words he spoke to me were whirring around in my head He added I'd died twice, but they'd brought me back from the dead. Written on 19th November 2020. For Pick -A-Title, Vol 25-Rhyme 2 Poetry Contest. Sponsored by Edward Ibeh. Title Chosen 2) In land of Cockaigne

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Date: 1/6/2021 5:42:00 AM
Congrats Tom! I missed this one. Cockaigne is where people go when the have cerebral oedema! I must remember that! glad you are back in England!:)
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Date: 1/6/2021 5:50:00 AM
Thank you very much Krish, I must admit I'd never heard of it until I saw the contest. Are you still on to retire in march? Tom
Date: 12/13/2020 9:42:00 AM
Congratulations Tom. I enjoyed this, very creative write.
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Date: 1/6/2021 5:48:00 AM
Thank you very much Nancy, Im happy that you enjoyed it. Happy New year. Tom
Date: 12/2/2020 4:45:00 PM
Great narrative, Tom. Congratulations!Rasitha
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Date: 12/3/2020 12:12:00 AM
Thank you very much Rashita, im pleased you liked it. Tom
Date: 12/2/2020 2:16:00 PM
so glad to see this one on the list and with a great placement. Way to go, Tom.
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Date: 12/3/2020 12:12:00 AM
Thank you very much Andrea, im happy that you enjoyed it. Tom
Date: 12/2/2020 4:15:00 AM
This is an absolutely gripping and stunning write, Tom. One of the very best poem of yours I've ever read, in fact! Heartiest congratulations on your top win!
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Date: 12/2/2020 12:07:00 PM
Incidentally, I'm doing much better now. Thank you! I greatly appreciate your concern, Tom:-)
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Date: 12/2/2020 4:23:00 AM
Thank you very much Edward and for my placement, also too for hosting the contest. I hope that you are on the mend. Tom
Date: 12/1/2020 9:36:00 AM
wow Tom, this had me hooked from start to finish, great story telling and imagination (you could write books). Congratulations on your win (sorry on catch up again) another fav for me, Emilia : )
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Date: 12/1/2020 12:08:00 PM
Thank you, No worries Emilia, im glad you enjoyed it. Tom
Date: 12/1/2020 5:52:00 AM
What a great poetic tale Tom. Congratulations on the win! Linda
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Date: 12/1/2020 8:12:00 AM
Thank you very much Linda, im happy that you enjoyed it. Tom
Date: 12/1/2020 2:40:00 AM
Hi Tom, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved. Have a nice day;-) Alexis
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Date: 12/1/2020 3:13:00 AM
Thank you very much Alexis, I hope you too have a wonderful day. Tom
Date: 11/27/2020 2:26:00 PM
Tom, this was quite a flight of imagination your muse took you on! I cherish your story telling skills and all the details you toss in to make your tale so engaging. I wish you all the best in the contest, and remember to wear your seat belt! ~ John
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Date: 11/27/2020 2:28:00 PM
Thank you very much John, lol, yes I've certainly learnt my lesson. Hope you have a nice weekend. Tom
Date: 11/22/2020 11:28:00 AM
Such a terrrific imagination you have Tom, I applaud you dear friend, your are the best of the best story tellers. Hope this story is only half fiction and the accident part is not true? Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 11/22/2020 12:06:00 PM
Thank you very much Jennifer, it was the contest title that caught my eye and people in medieval times believed such a place existed, its all fiction though. Tom
Date: 11/21/2020 1:24:00 PM
Great story, I was totally hooked! Love your writing skills, you brought Cockaigne to life.
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Date: 11/21/2020 1:30:00 PM
Thank you very much Annette, im happy that you enjoyed it. Hope your weekend is going well. Tom
Date: 11/21/2020 8:43:00 AM
you lured me in and kept me locked in this wonderful story... you do have a way with words, great delivery, wonderful write, best wishes in the contest! hugs
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Date: 11/21/2020 9:03:00 AM
Thank you very much Sandra, lovely to see you, I hope you are keeping well. You've been missed on here. Tom
Date: 11/20/2020 12:28:00 PM
What a fantastic story you’ve told through poetry. Glad hear your alive after hitting that tree, but what a place you got to see. A most enjoyable, entertaining read... Belle
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Date: 11/20/2020 12:37:00 PM
Thank you very much Belle, im happy that you enjoyed it. Hope you have a lovely weekend. Tom
Date: 11/20/2020 6:56:00 AM
Great storytelling my friend.. Shows what an active imagination your have..
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Date: 11/20/2020 7:22:00 AM
Thank you , SO, it was ablaze writing this one. People believed that such a place existed in medieval times. Can you imagine it. Enjoy your weekend. Tom
Date: 11/20/2020 4:40:00 AM
Oh my gosh, Tom, such a fantastical poem. ~
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Date: 11/20/2020 4:46:00 AM
Thank you very much Regina, im happy you enjoyed it. My muse was on fire with this one. Tom
Date: 11/20/2020 4:33:00 AM
Tom, this is a masterpiece--great story with vivid descriptions and some lessons included. Janice
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Date: 11/20/2020 4:39:00 AM
Thank you very much Janice, im pleased that you liked it. Enjoy your weekend. Tom
Date: 11/20/2020 1:53:00 AM
Great story with lots of fantasy in it. Well done, Tom. Best for a win. ~~
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Date: 11/20/2020 2:29:00 AM
Thank you very much Victor, my muse ran riot with this one. Glad you enjoyed it. Tom
Date: 11/19/2020 7:28:00 PM
G’day Tom … a great tale indeed Tom. Must have been a shock to system to be asked for payment on return - I did enjoy - Lindsay
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Date: 11/20/2020 12:51:00 AM
Lol, it certainly was, nearly got arrested walking out of a shop without paying. Tom
Date: 11/19/2020 6:07:00 PM
oh wow, you spun quite the tale there. i was thinking maybe it was something like hotel California!! great job with this, Tom.
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Date: 11/20/2020 12:50:00 AM
Thank you very much Andrea,, i. Was a place id never heard of until I saw the contest titles. Tom
Date: 11/19/2020 5:09:00 PM
Wow Tom: For a moment I thought you had misspelled cocaine. Nevertheless, you found an amazing escape for a while. Maybe it’s time you went on a real trip. Ha ha This lockdown is causing us to miss the real pleasures in life. Greatly enjoyed. SuZ
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Date: 11/20/2020 12:49:00 AM
Lol, thanks Suz, we were lucky to get away this year to Turkey but many weren't so lucky. Tom
Date: 11/19/2020 3:59:00 PM
Masterfully written, Tom. A FAVE for me, and congrats on your richly-deserved win in the contest. You have outdone yourself with this treat of a write! Thanks, Gershon
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Date: 11/19/2020 4:01:00 PM
Thank you very much Gershon, its still open. Glad you enjoyed it, hope you are well. Thanks too for the fave. Tom
Date: 11/19/2020 3:28:00 PM
I am also attracted to the dreamland you visited Tom. Your story telling skills shine brilliantly in this poem. What a wonderful place you created. No doubt a TOP winner.
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Date: 11/19/2020 3:42:00 PM
Thank you very much Vijay, folj in medieval times believed such a place existed, it does sound a fun place for sure. Tom
Date: 11/19/2020 3:02:00 PM
Wow Tom, what an extraordinary tale - and what's even more weird is that in that land of Cockaigne, I really do think I would rapidly tire of it - people grabbing and guzzling everything wouldn't hold any appeal. Makes me think, maybe planet Earth isn't too bad after all. An amazing write Tom. Regards - Bill
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Date: 11/19/2020 3:16:00 PM
Thank you Bill, yet many think the world owes them something and they give nothing in return, like they're in the land of Cockaigne already lol. Like you what I own ive worked damn hard for. Tom
Date: 11/19/2020 1:44:00 PM
Excellent, my friend. You know this is headed for a POTW or POTD. Exceptional and imaginative you are. I really love this, what a story in a poem. Submit it to other bigger names for publication. Beyond the walls of the Soup. Congratulations.Poet! ***PANGIE ***
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Date: 11/19/2020 1:56:00 PM
Thank you very much Panagiota, im happy you enjoyed it. My muse had been smoking something im sure lol. Tom
Date: 11/19/2020 1:05:00 PM
Wow! Tom, You are such a great storyteller. My eyes were glued to the computer screen. You made the reader feel like such a place exists. I was not expecting the end at all. Excellent job! Best wishes in the contest. Enjoy the rest of your day:-) Alexis
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Date: 11/19/2020 1:08:00 PM
Thank you very much Alexis, I hadnt heard of it until I saw Edwards contest so googled it. What a place lol. Hope your day going well too Tom
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