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In Deep Chasm

Breaking the seal, MELANCHOLY pushed through. She fell into a wide chasm, Too wide that none could reach across. The more she tried to get out, The deeper she got plunged into the abyss. Felt she was fated to perish, Struck on its jagged edges! Her WISTFUL longings, gone awry. She sees her fate GRIM. In the SHROUD of DEPRESSION, As she wraps herself, What she sees before is a GLOOMY future, And she stays so WITHDRAWN from the physical world. In the pit of agony, as she lies, Bewildered and blinking, Wondering when her end would be, FEELINGS of dread, haunt her. Now a fervent prayer rises upwards, From her smouldering heart. ‘Pass over me a breath of wind, To cool off the steam building inside’! May. 27.2023 Eight Word Challenge Poetry Contest Sponsor- Emile Pinet

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Date: 6/4/2023 3:44:00 PM
Very emotional, very deep... You invoke the reader to make the journey with you!
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Date: 5/30/2023 12:19:00 AM
this is so beautiful, and emotional thanks
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Date: 5/29/2023 6:34:00 PM
You have certainly met the challenge, Valsa. If you had not italicized the words, I never would have guessed you were responding to a contest cue! Melancholy, yes. But not sad, somehow!
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Date: 5/29/2023 1:17:00 PM
Excellent writing Valsa with great imagery and real insightfulness making it a joy to read. Blessings, Gordon
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Date: 5/29/2023 9:26:00 AM
Whoa!! Emotive and expressive lines for the contest which read like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara
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Date: 5/29/2023 6:54:00 AM
Your poem hits the mark with the attributes you assigned to melancholy. Words enhance the meaning fitting in seamlessly. Best to you, Valsa.
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Date: 5/29/2023 6:36:00 AM
Very nice! I love the hopeful end, Valsa! Hugs ~ Kim
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Date: 5/29/2023 6:06:00 AM
This was exceptional work, Valsa. Your poetry is truly delightful, with stunning imagery and a well-chosen lexicon that showcases your skill and talent. Your juxtaposition of views and ideas adds depth and complexity to your writing. I am impressed by your shrewdness in using carefully selected words to convey your message. I wish you all the best in the contest.
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Date: 5/29/2023 1:32:00 AM
Dear Valsa, your poetry excels. You used those selected words with dexterity. Best for a win.
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