In a Twirl

Small red casting on morn's horizon
Shadowery fog cast veil on hill and vale
Symphony's music fills airwaves at dawn
Not a jet exhaust in sight no sign of swallowtail

Would be quiet except for man's presence
Man making his stamp on the world_ noisy
Wonder what it was like when Natives diligence
Fished, hunted kept the peace lived cloistered

Now the fiery red touches tops of trees
Like a blazing fire of yesteryear
When the Cherokee could forest green see
Did their future look bleak to their seers?

Change from quiet, peaceful to noisy world
No wonder our lives today are in a twirl  

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 6/20/2012 9:43:00 PM
great topic, how the world is now twirling out of control!! I love the allusion to the Cherokee (my ancestors!) very nice poem
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Date: 6/20/2012 7:02:00 PM
A sonnet with a REAL message... I'd have to say the older I get, the quieter I like it! Well done, Sara!! Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 6/20/2012 11:13:00 AM
lovely reflections with melodic, mythical tones, sara... peace and huggs! :)
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Date: 6/20/2012 10:52:00 AM
Sounds like a sunset. Beautiful to watch..it just ends your day with happy thoughts.~always&forever Lynette
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Date: 6/20/2012 8:28:00 AM
twirling swirling toilet flush?
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Doris Culverhouse
Date: 6/20/2012 8:29:00 AM
great poem by the way!!
Date: 6/20/2012 6:31:00 AM
I like it Sara, very well written. Have a lovely day to you. - oxox love Anne-Lise
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Date: 6/19/2012 6:54:00 PM
What a excellent write my friend! I really enjoyed the twist from the here and now and what once was in the past! You described them so wonderfully! Your poem is phenomenal Sara! Thanks for sharing it with all of us! Great work!!
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Date: 6/19/2012 6:22:00 PM
i replied to your comment.
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Date: 6/19/2012 6:19:00 PM
if your on a computer; more than likely , your helping.
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