In a Perfect World-Celebrating My Faves

In A Perfect World-Celebrating my Faves Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich If life was perfect there would be no more cancer... There would be no more painful treatments, but more cleansing of your bones. If only I could drain out your marrow and fill it with my tender kisses. Every time I see that IV I want to rip it out and burn it, sending it to the oblivion of hell. You would be living a healthy, happy and joyous life. Free from the daily struggle to stay alive. If life was perfect you would be sleeping next to me... I would wake up and gaze at your perfect skin as you slowly breathe in and out..in and out..in and out... Now there is no more breath to feel gently on my neck. Nights would bring intimacy instead of sorrow, and mornings would bring me hungry for breakfast, instead of starving for your touch. If life was perfect I would hear your soft voice... Vocalizing with you would be enough to carry me through another dreadful day. My phone would ring and I would memorize every word you said and play the tape over and over again. The tone you would portray would be full of excitement instead of tearful goodbyes. "Oh, please keep talking, don't let me go...." If life was perfect we would dance under the constellations. Hand in hand...body next to body...two becoming one... with a whisper of tunes we danced to at our wedding. No more bed ridden days and praying for you to take one more breath. I had a fear of your last breath, and when it happened my heart stopped beating and my lungs choked up as I drowned in memories of us under the sad moon. I have named a star after you, it's called “My Love Sirius”. It shines all night allowing me to see you protect the earth, like you protected me. If life was perfect.... our journey of love would be shouted for every year we are on earth together... "In A Perfect World" Contest ~1st Place~ Date Written: February 15, 2016
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Kroll Avatar
January 28, 2017 at 11:15 PM
Dear Laura, You write with so much emotion. Your poems are truly a way of healing and reaching out to those in pain. Congrats Kathy
Chansarkar Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 3:44 PM
Pain , beautifully expressed! Lovely Laura!
Scars Avatar
April 29, 2016 at 4:50 PM
many thanks Sara :)-luloo
Cheema Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 9:55 AM
So touching & loving Luloo! Congrats on being Andrea's fave!
Scars Avatar
April 29, 2016 at 4:50 PM
thank you Balveen! :)-luloo
Carmack Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 5:42 PM
This poem touched me and reminded of the people I have met over the years who passed from CA.
Scars Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 8:49 PM
I'm grateful you enjoyed it Rob...be blessed :)-luloo
Haight Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 1:10 PM
I do remember this beautiful, romantic poem from the previous contest, Luloo. Congratulations on your nice placement once again in the 'Faves' contest. Hugs, Sandra
Scars Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 2:37 PM
thank you Sandra very much :)-luloo
Allison Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 11:55 AM
Dropping back again Luloo I can see why Andrea loved this:-) :-) many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Scars Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 1:02 PM
many thanks lovely lady, be blessed today :)-luloo
Inman Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 11:27 AM
I see why Andrea liked this so much. You have written so much emotion into it. It is a beautiful poem Laura.
Scars Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 11:51 AM
thank you James :)-luloo
Milliner Avatar
February 20, 2016 at 11:09 PM
Beautifully written, congratulations on your win!!
Scars Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 2:35 PM
Thank you Sarita Have a blessed day :)-luloo
Callus Avatar
February 20, 2016 at 5:23 PM
Excellent, Laura!! Emotionally powerful. I am touched...well done! I see that you placed first with this gem, so big congratulations:) ~ Regards // paul
Scars Avatar
February 20, 2016 at 5:58 PM
Thank you very much Paul... :)-Luloo
Rycroft Avatar
February 20, 2016 at 11:34 AM
This is a wonderful perfect world wish you could have it x Wendy
Scars Avatar
February 20, 2016 at 5:56 PM
Thank you very much Wendy...:)-luloo
Johnson Avatar
February 20, 2016 at 11:16 AM
Hi Laura. Congrats and more on your well deserved first place win. My eyes are watery as I now write. Laura, this is so well written, and the flow is great. Gook work my friend. Bless U. Curtis.
Scars Avatar
February 20, 2016 at 5:55 PM
Oh my, thank you very much Curtis, you just made my day, so thank you. I'm grateful you enjoyed it...:)-luloo
Godwin Avatar
February 19, 2016 at 7:30 PM
Beautifully moving ... CayCay
Scars Avatar
February 20, 2016 at 5:54 PM
Thank you CayCay -luloo:)
Gupta Avatar
February 19, 2016 at 9:24 AM
Well deserved win. Congratulations.
Scars Avatar
February 19, 2016 at 10:23 AM
Thank you Probir :)-luloo
Poteet Avatar
February 19, 2016 at 7:01 AM
Congratulations, LL, on your top win here - such deep, transparent, healing thoughts on how life could be more perfect. Cancer is double threat, to those who suffer together - it causes pain for its victims, but pain too for the loved ones who see how it ravages another's body.
Scars Avatar
February 19, 2016 at 10:23 AM
Thank you very much Reason A. Poteet for your kind words...:)-luloo
Mukherjee Avatar
February 19, 2016 at 3:05 AM
Really very well written...you really are a winner...mind blowing poem..it touched my heart!! :-)
Scars Avatar
February 19, 2016 at 10:22 AM
Thank you Deepannit for your kind words...:)-luloo
Pennell  Avatar
February 19, 2016 at 1:44 AM
lovely poem well done on your win
Scars Avatar
February 19, 2016 at 10:21 AM
Many thanks Stephen :)-luloo
A. Sharma Avatar
February 19, 2016 at 1:04 AM
A perfect emotive gem dear Laura.. congrats on much deserved first place win.
Scars Avatar
February 19, 2016 at 10:20 AM
Thank you Dr. Upma :)-luloo
Ebbs Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 9:11 PM
Sigh, an emotional write Laura, congrats on your well deserved win...
Scars Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 9:20 PM
Thank you Edward, I appreciate your kind words, have a blessed night :) -luloo *smiles*
Grammatico Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 9:10 PM
A well-deserved first place, Laura. if i had to pick one thing about a perfect world, it would revolve around your first line.
Scars Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 9:19 PM
Thank you very much Steve, you are very sweet :)-luloo *Smiles*
Hicks Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 7:33 PM
I can see why this won first place. It's emotionally heart-wrenching and impactful writing. It makes one realize, that if you have the one that's right for you, then it's all you need ... it's perfect. You show what perfection is with this write ... well done!
Scars Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 9:19 PM
Thank you Timothy, that is very sweet of you, hope you have a great night, I appreciate your sincerity. -luloo *smiles*
Dietrich Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 7:02 PM
wow, how did I miss this one. I see CAtie likes the romantic. Wish I had chosen this path for mine. BIG congrats on a very well deserved win.
Scars Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 9:17 PM
Thank you Andrea:)-luloo
Lane Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 5:46 PM
A very nice win, Laura ~ Congratulations on your first place!
Scars Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 6:01 PM
Thank you very much Lin! I apologize my commenting lay out is messed up on this contest for some reason? Thank you -luloo
Scars Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 5:51 PM
Thank you Susan :)-luloo
Gentry Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 5:41 PM
Congratulations on your win! So heartfelt, heartbreaking, sad... Hugs :)
Scars Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 6:02 PM
Thank you very much Susan -luloo *smiles*
Allison Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 5:33 PM
many congrats LuLoo:-) hugs jan xx
Scars Avatar
February 18, 2016 at 5:40 PM
Thanks Jan -luloo
B. Avatar
February 15, 2016 at 6:16 PM
I have a lump in my throat. This is really good!
Scars Avatar
February 16, 2016 at 9:59 AM
Many thanks Carol :)-luloo
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