In a Field of Daisies - a Contemporary Sonnet

In a field of daisies, bathed in a  perfume
of wild roses, clover and ocean brine,
you and me in the early afternoon
drinking Kool Aid, pretending its wine,
and sharing left over crumbs with a few tiny ants,
that scurry across a thread barren cloth
that has spent years in a trunk with a moth,
While we eat a meal fit for a King and Queen-
Periwinkles, Dulse and canned Sardines- 
treasures from the Great Atlantic Sea,
while the rolling waves break on the rocks below
in this field where so many daisies grow

He loves me, he loves me not, my daisy flies away,
And only Jimmy and the wind will ever know.


Written:  June 9th, 2014




Author's Note.

This was my first picnic with my first love - We were 6 or 7 years old at the time.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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James Avatar
March 31, 2016 at 7:00 AM
sweet!
George   Avatar
March 31, 2016 at 7:09 AM
Thank you for stopping by, James and for your kind comments. Elaine
George   Avatar
December 1, 2014 at 1:07 AM
Hi Vera, I too love sonnets. This was the first contemporary one I wrote; all my others are of the old form. It was over 6o years ago when Jimmy and I had that picnic, so that makes you and I nearly the same age. Where has the time gone? Elaine
Duggan Avatar
November 28, 2014 at 6:28 PM
Hi Elaine, what a beautiful sonnet, I just love rhyme and sonnets, Ah! picnic with your first love, if I remember I had the same experience when I was about 10 or 11 years old, it was a long time ago, I would say about 60 odd years ago, thank you for this little reminder and take care..........Vera............
George   Avatar
December 1, 2014 at 1:13 AM
Hi Vera, I too love sonnets. This was the first contemporary one I wrote; all my others are of the old form. It was over 6o years ago when Jimmy and I had that picnic, so that makes you and I nearly the same age. Where has the time gone? Elaine
Robson Avatar
July 20, 2014 at 9:34 AM
A quite lovely sonnet on those first memory's Elaine, I loved it...Keith.
George   Avatar
August 27, 2014 at 1:58 AM
Thank you, Keith. Lainie
Lindley Avatar
July 17, 2014 at 9:35 AM
The innocence of youth so well remembered and written!! Congrats on your win!!!!!
George   Avatar
August 27, 2014 at 1:58 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Robert. Much appreciated. Lainie
Hamilton Avatar
July 16, 2014 at 7:40 PM
a lovely trip back to innocent love Elaine congrats on win hugs
George   Avatar
August 27, 2014 at 1:57 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Shadow. Lainie
Nance Avatar
July 16, 2014 at 6:50 PM
So young and innocent! loved this, grats on your win!
George   Avatar
August 27, 2014 at 1:56 AM
Thank you Casarah, for your kind comments. Lainie
Dietrich Avatar
July 16, 2014 at 5:59 PM
I sure remember this one and it remains one of my very favorites on the list. Congrats for your win.
George   Avatar
August 27, 2014 at 1:55 AM
Thank you for always supporting my writing, Andrea. It means a lot to me. Lainie
Guzzi Avatar
July 16, 2014 at 4:26 PM
Pure bright, clean, innocence is what you always seem to portray so well. Congrad's Light & Love
George   Avatar
August 27, 2014 at 1:54 AM
Thank you Deb. Lainie
Gibson Avatar
July 16, 2014 at 3:38 PM
This is so sweet but rich with emotion. I remember feeling very intensely at that age. Great garden party poem. Congratulations.
George   Avatar
August 27, 2014 at 1:52 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Faye. Lainie
A. Sharma Avatar
July 16, 2014 at 8:00 AM
Oh loving sweet memories Elaine ! Very beautiful write,, relates well to me,, congrats on huge win!
George   Avatar
August 27, 2014 at 1:50 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Dr. Upma. Your friend in poetry, Lainie
Callus Avatar
July 16, 2014 at 5:39 AM
Oh! sweet memories that must be kept alive! Enjoyed your picnic in your own special wild-flowered garden. Deserves a 7top rating. Congratulations on your merited win, Elaine! // paul
George   Avatar
August 27, 2014 at 1:49 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Paul. Your friend in poetry, Lainie
Deschler Avatar
July 8, 2014 at 7:56 PM
Beautifully written, Lainie! This is so sweet and so nostalgic. It really brings back some nice memories for me, of spring and summer days gone by.
George   Avatar
August 27, 2014 at 1:48 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Kelly. bfn Lainie
Richards Avatar
July 7, 2014 at 9:25 AM
Oh my, dear Elaine, this tender memory seems to whisper with such delicate emotion, ...it carries the reader to a childhood day, in a soft summer breeze. So lovely !!
George   Avatar
August 27, 2014 at 1:47 AM
Thank you for your lovely comments, Carrie. Lainie
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 24, 2014 at 1:06 PM
wow! such sweet sweet memory of a long lost love.. :) like best the last two lines you made.
George   Avatar
August 27, 2014 at 1:46 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Olive. bfn Your friend in poetry, Lainie
Wesley Avatar
June 21, 2014 at 4:02 PM
Delightful Elaine, a memory forever locked away and a treasure it is. So nice to visit after such a long time. Love, Elizabeth
George   Avatar
August 27, 2014 at 1:45 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Elizabeth. bfn Your friend in poetry, Lainie
Roger  Avatar
June 19, 2014 at 12:41 PM
He loves me, he loves me not, my daisy flies away...when i reached this part i read the poem all over again and clicked +FAV
George   Avatar
August 27, 2014 at 1:44 AM
Thank you for your kind comments Rodger and for faving.It means so much to me. bfn Your friend in poetry. Lainie
Dietrich Avatar
June 16, 2014 at 3:03 PM
Just reading this one again and admiring how you did it. Did you ever see your first love again?
George   Avatar
June 17, 2014 at 7:59 AM
. Our paths literally crossed again while walking down the road to the Bay I write about. Our lives had taken such different paths...but I must confess, the sparks were still there. bfn. Elaine
George   Avatar
June 17, 2014 at 7:57 AM
Hi, Andrea. The poem I wrote entitled 'First Love', is also about Jimmy. My dad joined the army shortly after that and we moved from New Brunswick to Ontario and I never saw Jimmy again until I was in my fifties while on a nosolgic trip to the place I was born.
Lindley Avatar
June 15, 2014 at 9:08 PM
A lovely and well written sonnet. Such memories are treasures that deserve to be shared with the world. BBBRAVOOOO!!!!
Horne Avatar
June 15, 2014 at 7:46 AM
lovely nostalgic write : )
Sathasivam Avatar
June 15, 2014 at 3:18 AM
Excellent. Adore it. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs
Devonshire Avatar
June 11, 2014 at 4:17 PM
The wild roses, clover and daisies must have been beautiful, dear. I bet you still smile when thinking of your first picnic with Jimmy. Such a delightful poem! Love, Carolyn
Dietrich Avatar
June 10, 2014 at 6:22 PM
I absolutely adore t his one. A FAVE! the final couplet is perfection.
Ryerson Avatar
June 10, 2014 at 4:44 AM
Good morning my friend! This gem reminds me SO much of my childhood days...I had my first crush when I was in the 2nd grade. Her name was Carol and she totally ignored me...I was heartbroken. I am SO glad to see you posting poems again! I can't BELIEVE I have not yet put you on my fav poet list but am gonna do so now. I deserve a good spanking for that (Ouch!)
George   Avatar
June 11, 2014 at 9:48 AM
Thank you Tim. it is nice to be back and writing poetryb again..which I have concluded... is the breath the great crator breathed in me. Wishing you a wonderful day. bfn your friend, Elaine
Roberts Avatar
June 9, 2014 at 9:45 PM
Loved it Laine ...Seren
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