In a Distant Field Premiere Contest Winner

where children used to play and lovers lay - 
near a dried up river bed
stands a weeping willow.


For the ONE KIMO 10,7,6, Syllable Count ONE ONLY Contest of Rick Parise
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 10/18/2016 5:05:00 PM
A very well done win! :) :)
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Date: 10/18/2016 4:48:00 AM
Congrats on composing a lovely piece!
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Date: 10/17/2016 9:00:00 PM
This is so lovely to read. Congratulations!
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Date: 10/16/2016 11:52:00 PM
I have so much to learn from such experience - thank you for this beautiful write - congratulations on your well deserved win Andrea. Mark
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Date: 10/16/2016 9:27:00 PM
UMM...The multitude of metaphor in this is ...well....it just ..is. Beautifully composed Andrea.
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Date: 10/16/2016 6:20:00 PM
Peaceful, lovely kimo, Andrea. Congratulations on your trophy win.
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Date: 10/16/2016 2:30:00 PM
Very nice poem Andrea. Congratulations, you deserve it!
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Date: 10/16/2016 2:11:00 PM
awesome lovely Andrea! Congrats on your placement! :)-luloo
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Date: 10/16/2016 1:47:00 PM
Such a lovely poignant kimo, Andrea. Suggestive imagery at its best! Congratulations on placing first!! // paul
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Date: 10/16/2016 1:39:00 PM
Hearty congrats on your 1st place win dear Andrea, lovely imagery,lovely kimo, enjoyed it!//love, Anu:)
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Date: 3/15/2012 9:46:00 AM
So sorry I am so late with congrats..super busy..Anyway..this is lovely...BG
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Date: 3/13/2012 6:16:00 PM
Congrats on your win.Knew it was a winner..Sara
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Date: 3/13/2012 3:12:00 PM
I am not a fan of the form but you wrote a beautiful poem here. Mike
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Date: 3/13/2012 2:15:00 PM
congrats on your 1st place win andrea, I love weeping willows...you got the 'absence of movement' down to a T (something I completely disregarded haha) :-)
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Date: 3/13/2012 11:34:00 AM
Congrats Andrea on your 1st place win.A very well penned sketch of that lonely tree.
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Date: 3/13/2012 7:25:00 AM
Terrific! You get the feeling the willow is weeping because the children, lovers and river are all gone now. Another well deserved 1st. Good going, Andrea! Joe
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Date: 3/13/2012 6:35:00 AM
I love that you mastered the "absence of movement"..I just can't seem to wrap my poetry pen around this concept yet! ughhh ....ha ha. A wonderful moment as I become enthralled with this tree! Congrats, Andrea. Gwendolen
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Date: 3/13/2012 6:13:00 AM
Congratulations!
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Date: 3/13/2012 5:21:00 AM
Congratulations for your placement in this contest Andrea. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/12/2012 11:39:00 PM
Congratulations on the win Andrea; liked the scene and emotions you show here..
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Date: 3/12/2012 5:37:00 PM
great image Andie!! Congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 3/12/2012 5:18:00 PM
Beautiful write,Andrea...Congratulations on your 1st place win in this contest....
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Date: 3/12/2012 4:49:00 PM
i'm honoured to share number one with you, Andrea, especially with a entry as good as this, congrats. harry
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Date: 3/12/2012 4:34:00 PM
lovely thoughts in this romantic Kimo, Andrea~ Congrats!!
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Date: 3/9/2012 3:32:00 PM
the sense of solitude and seeming angst stand on its own, andie... lovely!..how are you?.. been having tech problems on soup, hence the delay in sending you best of luck over at rick's... :) huggs!
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