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In a Breath

met at life's first dawn
     no preconditions at stake
     spare or save at will
     it can only be retrieved
     when a soul reaches sunset

     04/08/2016

deathlifeperspectivetanka

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James Inman

August 30, 2017 at 8:15 AM

Deep thought Charlie.

Charlie Smith

August 30, 2017 at 9:04 PM

Thanks for the visit James...

Lynn Marie

August 25, 2017 at 4:15 PM

A hug for the heart, contemplative piece. I feel your words as I have a close friend whose 'sunset' is near with each breath a cherished gift. I will share your divine words with him this weekend. thank you:) Bless you Charlie, this is beautiful xo a special fave

Charlie Smith

August 25, 2017 at 7:54 PM

Thank you so very much Lynn...

Funom Makama

July 4, 2017 at 8:51 AM

Oh my goodness! This is why I always miss your work when I stay away from this site for a while. Your choice of words and perfect blend of a cute message is beyond description. This is definitely good..

Charlie Smith

July 4, 2017 at 12:40 PM

Thank you Funom...

Andrea Dietrich

April 17, 2017 at 6:23 PM

I like this one, Charlie. YOu were in a reflective mood with the two I just read.

Charlie Smith

April 18, 2017 at 12:36 AM

Thank you Andrea, true story...

Kurt Philip Behm

April 14, 2017 at 2:26 PM

Such beauty in five lines!

Charlie Smith

April 18, 2017 at 12:37 AM

Thank you Kurt...

Eileen Manassian

April 12, 2017 at 8:59 AM

Gives one pause for thought, Charlie. Good tanka on an important message. Blessings.

Charlie Smith

April 12, 2017 at 9:07 AM

Thank you Eileen...

Maria Williams

April 12, 2017 at 1:30 AM

What a wonderful Tanka, I do admire this form and you have excelled in it. Well done Charlie.

Charlie Smith

April 12, 2017 at 8:03 AM

Thank you Maria...

Brian Duffield

April 11, 2017 at 8:42 AM

Reads like a moving epitaph-love its direct parred back style

Charlie Smith

April 11, 2017 at 11:25 AM

Thank you Brian...

Richard Lamoureux

April 11, 2017 at 8:26 AM

I felt my heart pause for a moment and contemplated my last breath.

Charlie Smith

April 11, 2017 at 11:28 AM

Think about how for granted it really is taken. Thanks for the visit Richard...

Judy Ball

April 11, 2017 at 12:29 AM

Nicely done Charlie and love the pic. A 7 from me. God Bless, JB

Charlie Smith

April 11, 2017 at 6:49 AM

Thank you Judy...

Arthur Vaso

April 10, 2017 at 9:10 PM

Now that made me contemplate, great Tanka.

Charlie Smith

April 10, 2017 at 11:28 PM

The breath of life is a gift of birth never lost until death, so taken for granted until taken from us with that last gasp...

Lisa Ricci

April 10, 2017 at 11:42 AM

Good Afternnon Charlie. This entry is stunningly beautiful. The Tanka is in true format form. Your theme is more than fine. Well done entirely. Honestly

Charlie Smith

April 10, 2017 at 12:28 PM

Thank you Lisa...