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met at life's first dawn no preconditions at stake spare or save at will it can only be retrieved when a soul reaches sunset 04/08/2016

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James Inman

Date: 8/30/2017 8:15:00 AM

Deep thought Charlie.

Charlie Smith
Date: 8/30/2017 9:04:00 PM

Thanks for the visit James...

Lynn Marie

Date: 8/25/2017 4:15:00 PM

A hug for the heart, contemplative piece. I feel your words as I have a close friend whose 'sunset' is near with each breath a cherished gift. I will share your divine words with him this weekend. thank you:) Bless you Charlie, this is beautiful xo a special fave

Charlie Smith
Date: 8/25/2017 7:54:00 PM

Thank you so very much Lynn...

Funom Makama

Date: 7/4/2017 8:51:00 AM

Oh my goodness! This is why I always miss your work when I stay away from this site for a while. Your choice of words and perfect blend of a cute message is beyond description. This is definitely good..

Charlie Smith
Date: 7/4/2017 12:40:00 PM

Thank you Funom...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/17/2017 6:23:00 PM

I like this one, Charlie. YOu were in a reflective mood with the two I just read.

Charlie Smith
Date: 4/18/2017 12:36:00 AM

Thank you Andrea, true story...

Kurt Philip Behm

Date: 4/14/2017 2:26:00 PM

Such beauty in five lines!

Charlie Smith
Date: 4/18/2017 12:37:00 AM

Thank you Kurt...

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/12/2017 8:59:00 AM

Gives one pause for thought, Charlie. Good tanka on an important message. Blessings.

Charlie Smith
Date: 4/12/2017 9:07:00 AM

Thank you Eileen...

Maria Williams

Date: 4/12/2017 1:30:00 AM

What a wonderful Tanka, I do admire this form and you have excelled in it. Well done Charlie.

Charlie Smith
Date: 4/12/2017 8:03:00 AM

Thank you Maria...

Brian Duffield

Date: 4/11/2017 8:42:00 AM

Reads like a moving epitaph-love its direct parred back style

Charlie Smith
Date: 4/11/2017 11:25:00 AM

Thank you Brian...

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/11/2017 8:26:00 AM

I felt my heart pause for a moment and contemplated my last breath.

Charlie Smith
Date: 4/11/2017 11:28:00 AM

Think about how for granted it really is taken. Thanks for the visit Richard...

Judy Ball

Date: 4/11/2017 12:29:00 AM

Nicely done Charlie and love the pic. A 7 from me. God Bless, JB

Charlie Smith
Date: 4/11/2017 6:49:00 AM

Thank you Judy...

Arthur Vaso

Date: 4/10/2017 9:10:00 PM

Now that made me contemplate, great Tanka.

Charlie Smith
Date: 4/10/2017 11:28:00 PM

The breath of life is a gift of birth never lost until death, so taken for granted until taken from us with that last gasp...

Lisa Ricci

Date: 4/10/2017 11:42:00 AM

Good Afternnon Charlie. This entry is stunningly beautiful. The Tanka is in true format form. Your theme is more than fine. Well done entirely. Honestly

Charlie Smith
Date: 4/10/2017 12:28:00 PM

Thank you Lisa...

Joanna Daniel

Date: 4/10/2017 9:53:00 AM

Deep imagery, Charlie, way to go:)

Charlie Smith
Date: 4/10/2017 12:26:00 PM

Thank you Jo...

Joseph May

Date: 4/9/2017 3:47:00 PM

Inhaling the dawn exhaling the sunset...Nice Tanka Charlie

Charlie Smith
Date: 4/10/2017 12:28:00 PM

Thank you Joseph...