Darren White Poet Free verse

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Impaired

All the fingers wait
raised, spread
and the flexes start
the bends
the creeps and crawls

All the fruit laid before you
the knife cuts
uncovers concealed
scents and flesh

All the linen,
folded in crisp creases
your all-seeing eye
unwraps ruthlessly
one crumb grounded
in one corner
one drop of red

One snowflake carries
so many crystals
inifinitely perfect
They disappear
before you decide to dissect
they don't fear the sharp
but the time
it takes
to slice

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July 18, 2017 
Copyright © Darren White

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Darlene De Beaulieu July 27, 2017 at 12:34 PM All I can say is Wow! Have a nice day my friend.

Gregory Richard Barden July 20, 2017 at 7:14 AM Wonderful, witty, whimsical, and wry ... I adore ambiguity as you know, and this is wistfully wrought with it! (Oh, I'm just bathed in W's today - ambiguous consonance, ha!). LOVE it! Darren White July 20, 2017 at 7:15 AM Love that. I'll mail about synaesthesia.

White Wolf July 19, 2017 at 5:15 AM Crane bagging to contemplate later Darren White July 19, 2017 at 8:12 AM Thanks Budgie!

White Wolf July 19, 2017 at 5:13 AM Each stanza is amazing, Duir! The "snow" to me represents our purity that disappears, but, is at the same time infinite in a way still lasting! Very ambiguous to me! The last stanza I still must ponder! Darren White July 19, 2017 at 8:12 AM It is as ambiguous as I can possibly be, while still hoping the poem is good enough to make people think.

Maria Williams July 19, 2017 at 1:31 AM "It only takes one snowflake to start an avalanche", they say. I do believe that statement can swing both ways both good and bad. Ever the optimist I will always go for the good.Your analogy is perfect Darren. . Love your poetic flair in its brilliance...Maria xx Darren White July 19, 2017 at 8:11 AM Thanks Maria, the eternal optimist ;)

Janis Medders Tobechi July 18, 2017 at 1:56 PM That last line makes me think of the ax and someone's head. It is a smooth flowing, swift imagery, like a blade. Darren White July 18, 2017 at 2:00 PM That's quite a good understanding you show here Janice :)

Tim Smith July 18, 2017 at 1:41 PM Wonderful imagery...looking at the pic I could go for a frozen concoction Darren White July 18, 2017 at 1:42 PM Yeah, appealing on hot summer's days, no? ;)

Chris Green July 18, 2017 at 11:01 AM This is so deep my friend and has a dark underlayment that I can feel in your words. That closing stanza is fantastic. Wow, this is amazing. Darren White July 18, 2017 at 11:07 AM It is my friend, very dark, very deep. You sensed that well :)