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All the fingers wait raised, spread and the flexes start the bends the creeps and crawls All the fruit laid before you the knife cuts uncovers concealed scents and flesh All the linen, folded in crisp creases your all-seeing eye unwraps ruthlessly one crumb grounded in one corner one drop of red One snowflake carries so many crystals inifinitely perfect They disappear before you decide to dissect they don't fear the sharp but the time it takes to slice *** July 18, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 7/27/2017 12:34:00 PM

All I can say is Wow! Have a nice day my friend.

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 7/20/2017 7:14:00 AM

Wonderful, witty, whimsical, and wry ... I adore ambiguity as you know, and this is wistfully wrought with it! (Oh, I'm just bathed in W's today - ambiguous consonance, ha!). LOVE it!

Darren White
Date: 7/20/2017 7:15:00 AM

Love that. I'll mail about synaesthesia.

White Wolf

Date: 7/19/2017 5:15:00 AM

Crane bagging to contemplate later

Darren White
Date: 7/19/2017 8:12:00 AM

Thanks Budgie!

White Wolf

Date: 7/19/2017 5:13:00 AM

Each stanza is amazing, Duir! The "snow" to me represents our purity that disappears, but, is at the same time infinite in a way still lasting! Very ambiguous to me! The last stanza I still must ponder!

Darren White
Date: 7/19/2017 8:12:00 AM

It is as ambiguous as I can possibly be, while still hoping the poem is good enough to make people think.

Maria Williams

Date: 7/19/2017 1:31:00 AM

"It only takes one snowflake to start an avalanche", they say. I do believe that statement can swing both ways both good and bad. Ever the optimist I will always go for the good.Your analogy is perfect Darren. . Love your poetic flair in its brilliance...Maria xx

Darren White
Date: 7/19/2017 8:11:00 AM

Thanks Maria, the eternal optimist ;)