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Immune

IMMUNE I saw a crack-head lying in a ditch, resting peacefully upon the soft mud, scratching at what he thought was an itch. It was a creeping and nasty bug! A group of church folks pass by, and looked upon him as an "it." They too were far from God’s love. It went through my mind to ask the question, why, how, can a man accept to be so low, to feel no guilt, or desire to cry, no purpose to live, or no proof to show? Immune! immune to these things you see, had became a repetitious part of time, they became a way, or a part to be -- they became his "state of mind." A cowboy who sees his father chewing; he, too, chews and grows to accept it . A black boy, who sees his father drinking, out of low self-esteem; he, too, begins to drink it. America has cheated, lied, and dealt a crooked hand; now, Americans have grown to love it. We became immune to what is constant in our lives. I smelled a rose, it was so soft to me , I picked it up and held it in my hand. I wasn’t immune to its' beauty, and so, I put it close to me, desiring it to become a part of me, but it slowly died - it wasn’t immune to me.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 9/19/2016 9:41:00 PM
mark T, Georgie, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT
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Date: 9/17/2016 11:47:00 PM
Mark T,Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 9/17/2016 5:26:00 PM
Your poem has a lot of heart. The ending turns.. I like that. I was, however, not comfortable with "a black boy who sees his father drinking," anymore than I would be to see, "an Irish boy who sees his father drinking." I know your are sending out an inspirational message. But alcoholism has no colour... I think your piece would work better without the word 'black.' My husband is from out east. Alcoholism runs rampant, there. Welcome to soup, a great place to share poetry. Cheers.
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