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Immortality

You kissed me, my love Your breath just once, I inhaled Immortal became! © Demetrios Trifiatis 26 SEPTEMBER 2014

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/21/2014 10:07:00 AM

The image of my beloved's breath entering my body and strengthening me.

Demetrios Trifiatis
Date: 10/21/2014 10:09:00 AM

That was also my inspiration! Thank you!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/21/2014 9:04:00 AM

I like the imagery this created in my mind.

Demetrios Trifiatis
Date: 10/21/2014 9:47:00 AM

Thank you , Richard, for your visit! Very kind of you! Now what imagery you liked, I do not know but happy I am you liked it!, my friend.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/28/2014 11:42:00 AM

oh YES. that is something!!!

Demetrios Trifiatis
Date: 9/28/2014 12:48:00 PM

Yes, it is, dear Andrea, for it shows how powerful a lady's love is! Thank you so much for, after so long, I see you again!

Vera Duggan

Date: 9/27/2014 8:27:00 PM

That is a lovely Haiku, romance said in three lines, great Demetrios, take care my friend...........Vera...............

Demetrios Trifiatis
Date: 9/28/2014 3:37:00 AM

Thank you Vera for your friendly visit and your gracious comment.

Gary Bateman

Date: 9/27/2014 12:30:00 PM

Demetrios . . . Dein Haiku hier ist in ein Wort . . . ausgezeichnet!! Most excellent write. Your words all carry much weight and impact. (I have to start writing some of these myself.) Take Care my friend, Gary

Demetrios Trifiatis
Date: 9/27/2014 4:00:00 PM

Danke, Gary, you are most gracious, mein freund! You should try it, I am certain you will do great!

Bl Devnath

Date: 9/27/2014 8:33:00 AM

Words are few and very simple but weight of the whole poem is very sensitive. By closing the eyes if kiss and breath both of loved one is felt keeping the mind neutral,mortal will become immortal and immortal becomes more alive. Genius poem of genius poet. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl

Demetrios Trifiatis
Date: 9/27/2014 3:57:00 PM

Thank you my friend, Devnath, for your analytic and generous comment!

Paul Callus

Date: 9/26/2014 3:15:00 PM

Only true love has the power to make you immortal, Demi. Enjoyed your exchange of ideas with Dr Ram! When 2 professors meet, it's us mortals who benefit:) // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis
Date: 9/26/2014 3:32:00 PM

Yes, Paul, this is the way: True love: With true love we become immortal because love is of God and God is immortal! Thank you so much or I should say: Merci, mon ami, pour ta visite?

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/26/2014 12:39:00 PM

my, this is beyond amazing, D.. a lovely, personal write!.. hugggs

Demetrios Trifiatis
Date: 9/26/2014 3:30:00 PM

There you are my, dearest nette, with your amazing comment that I hardly deserve! Thank you for the hugggs though!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/26/2014 11:14:00 AM

Oh that's so true of a romantic way of achieving immortality! Wonderful haiku must place high! Winning wishes Demetrios !

Demetrios Trifiatis
Date: 9/26/2014 3:28:00 PM

Dr. Upma, thank you very much for your visit and comment! I also thank you for your wishes for winning! You ought to know that myself, knowing my limited ability in writing good poems, avoid participating in contests, although I encourage everyone to participate! Thank you!

Robert Lindley

Date: 9/26/2014 9:36:00 AM

You, prince now have her the eternal ember, resting in the soul of a true love... Great Haiku. We must enter immortality with pure hearts for that door opens for none other..

Demetrios Trifiatis
Date: 9/26/2014 3:19:00 PM

Robert my friend, you, being a happy man with your happiness in your arms, are an expert on love, thus I bow to your comment! So nice for you to visit and comment! Thank you!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/26/2014 6:41:00 AM

Nice result becoming immortal. I remembered Marlowe Chistopher, "Make Me Immortal with a kiss, Helen."

Demetrios Trifiatis
Date: 9/26/2014 7:15:00 AM

Dr. Ram, I am certain as a professor of Literature you have read thousands upon thousands of poems which I ignore! I am just a poor professor of philosophy thus my knowledge is limited. However, I think, here one may say that I indicate Christopher Marlowe how to become immortal. The trick is not the kiss BUT to inhale the breath of the kisser! Thank you Dr. Ram, for bringing to my attention such valuable lessons! I truly appreciate it! One more time, you proved to me that I might be on the right truck!

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/26/2014 3:03:00 AM

smiling old pal this thumbs up excellent

Liam Mcdaid
Date: 9/26/2014 3:12:00 AM

oh i am with you on that pal

Demetrios Trifiatis
Date: 9/26/2014 3:09:00 AM

The body may get older but not love' my young good friend' Liam! Thank you for your visit and kind comment!