Jan Allison Poet Idyll (Idyl)

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Immortal Rolling River

A ribbon of blue snakes through the hills
Carving its path as it meanders along
Rushing and gushing down to the sea
Burbling and gurgling, hear it singing a song

Watch it dancing around with a will of its own
Freely flowing until the end of time
Shimmying over pebbles and rocks 
Its unconfined movement is simply divine

It will live on as long as rain falls from the skies
The end of the world will be the river’s demise


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Kim Merryman March 24, 2021 at 2:14 PM A lovely, descriptive write, Jan! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M Jan Allison March 25, 2021 at 8:24 AM Thanks so much Kim, the contests fill so fast i dont have time to congratulate the winners!:-) hugs Jan xx

Anisha Dutta March 22, 2017 at 10:17 AM Magnificent. Congrats JAN to win top. Hugs Jan Allison March 23, 2017 at 5:34 AM Thanks so much Anisha:-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Medders Tobechi March 21, 2017 at 8:18 PM Beautiful idyll. Well written. Congrats. Jan Allison March 23, 2017 at 5:34 AM Thanks so much Janis this is my first attmept at the form:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues March 21, 2017 at 7:46 AM So lovely, Jan! You paint the picture nicely! Congrats! Jan Allison March 23, 2017 at 5:35 AM Thanks so much Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith March 21, 2017 at 6:49 AM Wonderful piece Jan, congratulations... Jan Allison March 23, 2017 at 5:35 AM cheers Charlie:-):-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France March 20, 2017 at 10:15 AM Jan congratulations on your win in my contest ~ Jan Allison March 23, 2017 at 5:35 AM Thanks so much Constance I really enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Roy Pett March 20, 2017 at 9:45 AM Congratulations Jan, top spot and well deserved for this exceptional poem, so pleased, Roy. :)) Jan Allison March 23, 2017 at 5:36 AM Thanks so much Roy:-) hugs Jan xx

Anisha Dutta March 20, 2017 at 6:07 AM Congrats Jan to win top place on your wonderful poem Jan Allison March 23, 2017 at 5:36 AM Thanks so much Anisha:-) hugs Jan xx

Reason A. Poteet February 28, 2017 at 9:32 AM Lovely, Jan, I'm contemplating an idyll but like you, I'm at a loss for experience. You have presented a peaceful image in your river with a thought for the immortal in its demise. Jan Allison March 1, 2017 at 1:11 PM Give it a try Reason:-) this is my first attempt and I hope Constance likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Roy Pett February 27, 2017 at 7:39 AM Absolutely brilliant Jan, you have painted a beautiful picture with your words, your interpretation of the theme is spot on, good luck in the contest, Roy. Jan Allison February 27, 2017 at 7:43 AM Thanks Roy I have never attempted this form before:-) I hope Constance likes my interpretation of the theme:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper February 26, 2017 at 10:07 PM Wow beautiful, Jan,, a winner already Hugs Eve Jan Allison February 27, 2017 at 4:45 AM Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert Pettit February 26, 2017 at 1:37 PM Nice descriptiveness here. Good luck to you in the contest. Jan Allison February 26, 2017 at 1:38 PM Thanks Robert I've never written this form before I hope Constance likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie February 25, 2017 at 11:50 AM This is incredible writing Jan, your words flow seamlessly, the last two lines are especially moving. The 'idyll' form suits you very well,this is really beautiful, I love it, a 7+, a fave :-) blessings, lynn Jan Allison February 25, 2017 at 12:16 PM I've never tried this form before so I hope I got it right. I struggled with the immortality theme but thought of a river and then this came to me:-) hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne February 24, 2017 at 2:10 PM This is one of your best! Absolutely stunning! A huge fav. Jan Allison February 24, 2017 at 2:25 PM aww Armand you are too kind it is my first attempt at this form just written for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis February 24, 2017 at 9:56 AM Melodic song of nature marvelously sang, dear Jan! Jan Allison February 24, 2017 at 10:09 AM Thanks Demetrios:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer February 23, 2017 at 3:49 PM great poem to perfectly match the pictures! nice one, jan... Jan Allison February 23, 2017 at 3:58 PM Thanks Ilene it is not a form I have written before I hope Constance likes my poem:-) hugs jan xx

Ralph Sergi February 23, 2017 at 1:38 PM Beautiful.Jan! I love the log on 2 rocks. Jan Allison February 23, 2017 at 2:41 PM Your comment made me smile ... I wondered the reason why the log was there in the first place ... why would it only go part of the way across the river and I love the fact you noticed it too:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner February 23, 2017 at 1:11 PM Makes me wish I was on a creek bank somewhere, Jan. Lovely imagery:) Good luck! Jan Allison February 23, 2017 at 2:45 PM Thanks Daniel I found the immortal theme quite challenging and this was the best I could come up with, I hope Constance likes it as I've never written an idyll before:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith February 23, 2017 at 12:31 PM A beautiful scene Jan...imagining floating down the river Jan Allison February 23, 2017 at 2:46 PM Thanks Tim I hope this is ok for the contest I've never written one before:-) hugs Jan x

Abdullah Alhemaidy February 23, 2017 at 12:18 PM Wonderful! A7 & hugs :) Jan Allison February 23, 2017 at 2:48 PM Thanks so much Abdullah:-) hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet February 23, 2017 at 12:15 PM Wonderful work with great thought given to the subject mater as it gently unfolds for the readers delight. The allure of this river has captured your imagination and allowed you to be one with nature in this poem. Well done, Emile. Jan Allison February 23, 2017 at 2:49 PM Thanks for the lovely comment Emile:-) hugs Jan xx