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Immortal Rolling River

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A ribbon of blue snakes through the hills Carving its path as it meanders along Rushing and gushing down to the sea Burbling and gurgling, hear it singing a song Watch it dancing around with a will of its own Freely flowing until the end of time Shimmying over pebbles and rocks Its unconfined movement is simply divine It will live on as long as rain falls from the skies The end of the world will be the river’s demise I Form Contest Sponsored by Broken Wings 02~23~17

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Kim Merryman

Date: 3/24/2021 2:14:00 PM

A lovely, descriptive write, Jan! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M

Jan Allison
Date: 3/25/2021 8:24:00 AM

Thanks so much Kim, the contests fill so fast i dont have time to congratulate the winners!:-) hugs Jan xx

Anisha Dutta

Date: 3/22/2017 10:17:00 AM

Magnificent. Congrats JAN to win top. Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 3/23/2017 5:34:00 AM

Thanks so much Anisha:-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Thompson

Date: 3/21/2017 8:18:00 PM

Beautiful idyll. Well written. Congrats.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/23/2017 5:34:00 AM

Thanks so much Janis this is my first attmept at the form:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/21/2017 7:46:00 AM

So lovely, Jan! You paint the picture nicely! Congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/23/2017 5:35:00 AM

Thanks so much Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 3/21/2017 6:49:00 AM

Wonderful piece Jan, congratulations...

Jan Allison
Date: 3/23/2017 5:35:00 AM

cheers Charlie:-):-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 3/20/2017 10:15:00 AM

Jan congratulations on your win in my contest ~

Jan Allison
Date: 3/23/2017 5:35:00 AM

Thanks so much Constance I really enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Roy Pett

Date: 3/20/2017 9:45:00 AM

Congratulations Jan, top spot and well deserved for this exceptional poem, so pleased, Roy. :))

Jan Allison
Date: 3/23/2017 5:36:00 AM

Thanks so much Roy:-) hugs Jan xx

Anisha Dutta

Date: 3/20/2017 6:07:00 AM

Congrats Jan to win top place on your wonderful poem

Jan Allison
Date: 3/23/2017 5:36:00 AM

Thanks so much Anisha:-) hugs Jan xx

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 2/28/2017 9:32:00 AM

Lovely, Jan, I'm contemplating an idyll but like you, I'm at a loss for experience. You have presented a peaceful image in your river with a thought for the immortal in its demise.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/1/2017 1:11:00 PM

Give it a try Reason:-) this is my first attempt and I hope Constance likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Roy Pett

Date: 2/27/2017 7:39:00 AM

Absolutely brilliant Jan, you have painted a beautiful picture with your words, your interpretation of the theme is spot on, good luck in the contest, Roy.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/27/2017 7:43:00 AM

Thanks Roy I have never attempted this form before:-) I hope Constance likes my interpretation of the theme:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 2/26/2017 10:07:00 PM

Wow beautiful, Jan,, a winner already Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 2/27/2017 4:45:00 AM

Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert Pettit

Date: 2/26/2017 1:37:00 PM

Nice descriptiveness here. Good luck to you in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/26/2017 1:38:00 PM

Thanks Robert I've never written this form before I hope Constance likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie

Date: 2/25/2017 11:50:00 AM

This is incredible writing Jan, your words flow seamlessly, the last two lines are especially moving. The 'idyll' form suits you very well,this is really beautiful, I love it, a 7+, a fave :-) blessings, lynn

Jan Allison
Date: 2/25/2017 12:16:00 PM

I've never tried this form before so I hope I got it right. I struggled with the immortality theme but thought of a river and then this came to me:-) hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 2/24/2017 2:10:00 PM

This is one of your best! Absolutely stunning! A huge fav.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/24/2017 2:25:00 PM

aww Armand you are too kind it is my first attempt at this form just written for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 2/24/2017 9:56:00 AM

Melodic song of nature marvelously sang, dear Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 2/24/2017 10:09:00 AM

Thanks Demetrios:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 2/23/2017 3:49:00 PM

great poem to perfectly match the pictures! nice one, jan...

Jan Allison
Date: 2/23/2017 3:58:00 PM

Thanks Ilene it is not a form I have written before I hope Constance likes my poem:-) hugs jan xx

Ralph Sergi

Date: 2/23/2017 1:38:00 PM

Beautiful.Jan! I love the log on 2 rocks.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/23/2017 2:41:00 PM

Your comment made me smile ... I wondered the reason why the log was there in the first place ... why would it only go part of the way across the river and I love the fact you noticed it too:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner

Date: 2/23/2017 1:11:00 PM

Makes me wish I was on a creek bank somewhere, Jan. Lovely imagery:) Good luck!

Jan Allison
Date: 2/23/2017 2:45:00 PM

Thanks Daniel I found the immortal theme quite challenging and this was the best I could come up with, I hope Constance likes it as I've never written an idyll before:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 2/23/2017 12:31:00 PM

A beautiful scene Jan...imagining floating down the river

Jan Allison
Date: 2/23/2017 2:46:00 PM

Thanks Tim I hope this is ok for the contest I've never written one before:-) hugs Jan x

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 2/23/2017 12:18:00 PM

Wonderful! A7 & hugs :)

Jan Allison
Date: 2/23/2017 2:48:00 PM

Thanks so much Abdullah:-) hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet

Date: 2/23/2017 12:15:00 PM

Wonderful work with great thought given to the subject mater as it gently unfolds for the readers delight. The allure of this river has captured your imagination and allowed you to be one with nature in this poem. Well done, Emile.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/23/2017 2:49:00 PM

Thanks for the lovely comment Emile:-) hugs Jan xx