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Humorous Poems Contest~Sponsor: Jay Narain

July 5, 2023

Hickory Dickory. Can you imagine my shock, when I saw a mouse in my grandfather clock? The hands moved until the chimes struck one. I took aim with my double barreled shot gun. That mouse squeaked and in haste, off he flew. I planned a surprise, so when it chimed at two he'd take a bite of cheese and he'd be trapped. I saw him nibble, but he escaped; trap snapped! This went on throughout the day, hour after hour. I was very angry and searched for more fire power. In the basement I discovered a stick of dynamite, and lit the fuse when the clock struck at midnight. Hickory Dickory. Can you imagine my shock, when the mouse laughed and began to mock. "Hickory Dickory. You blew up your own house and still didn't get rid of me, a little ol' mouse!"

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Barbara Barry-Nishanian

Date: 7/21/2023 1:14:00 PM

Congrats on your sense of humor. So cute!

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/10/2023 10:54:00 PM

Fun poem, Lin, congratulations:)

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 7/9/2023 8:00:00 PM

Now this poem is where it belongs, at the top of the rankings! :)

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 7/9/2023 5:54:00 PM

Very amusing Lin, you tell a great tale. Congratulations on your win in Jay’s contest… Belle

Tania Kitchin

Date: 7/9/2023 1:55:00 PM

Lin, a cute and entertaining poem, congratulations on your win! Hugs

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2023 1:58:00 PM

Hi Tania and thank you very much.

Terry Flood

Date: 7/9/2023 12:09:00 PM

Congrats on your FIRST place win, Lin. I know the list says second but that particular anomaly defies explanation! A funny tale indeed. Terry

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2023 1:57:00 PM

lol Terry. I cannot lay claim to anything except 2nd place and I'm good with that! Thanks.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/9/2023 11:25:00 AM

dropping back with many congrats Lin:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2023 1:56:00 PM

Thanks , chick!

David Fisher

Date: 7/9/2023 10:29:00 AM

Haha, congrats on the contest! Not only funny but so true with mice, now where's that match...

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2023 1:56:00 PM

Lol Thanks, David. The damage is done!

David Kavanagh

Date: 7/5/2023 1:17:00 PM

Ha, just don’t tell the insurance people you blew up your own house Lin, this would be something Tom and Jerry might have gotten up to in the past, I enjoyed your madcap humour once again, excellent poem, cheers David

Lin Lane
Date: 7/5/2023 2:16:00 PM

I thought about Tom and Jerry. That little booger of a mouse looks like him. The homeowner was more of a Wile E. Coyote figure, who'd blow up his house and himself trying to get that Roadrunner! Thanks, David.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/5/2023 11:00:00 AM

Love your write/story/rhyme/picture. Way toooo funny. Guess you are building a new house without the mouse. Hahaha. Thanks for the laugh, I need it. Have a fun day.....................

Lin Lane
Date: 7/5/2023 11:16:00 AM

Thanks for finding it amusing, Paula. I have a new house but I’m not divulging the address! Lol

Jan Allison

Date: 7/5/2023 10:09:00 AM

hahaha this is fun Lin, maybe not for the house owner though - love that twist!:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 7/5/2023 11:15:00 AM

I didn’t know how it was going to end when I started writing, but with such determination I thought he should survive. Hope he found another homeowner to pester. Thanks, Jan.

Jay Narain

Date: 7/5/2023 9:38:00 AM

Fun poem from start to end. My favorite,

Lin Lane
Date: 7/5/2023 11:13:00 AM

Thank you very much, Jay.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/5/2023 7:54:00 AM

- The one who laughs last ... laughs best :))) - Funny poem, Lin - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Lin Lane
Date: 7/5/2023 11:13:00 AM

He sure got the best and last laugh. Thanks, Anne-Lise.