James Inman Poet Rhyme

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I wrote this in response to Timothy Hicks' wonderfully satirical and witty poem "The Eye is Such a Braggart."

I'M Sorry My Love-An Almost Sonnet of My Deepest Admiration

Lying in the meadow on a long afternoon
I press soft against you and start to spoon,
but the lump at the base of your spine has now grown
(vestigial tail , I guess) presses hard against my places unknown,
so rolling you over and with gentle caress,
your yellow scaled elbow, I adore, I confess,
I trace the large bump on the end of your nose.
I just love the coarse hair and, how subtly it glows.
You sniffle so sweetly, as never ending it runs,
as of lipstick, thick mucous coats your lips, and you have need for none.
So I lie next to you, of your beauty I want more,
admiring your features, almost all I adore                ...only one I abhor.

So, though shallow I feel, it saddens me greatly to know I must leave you
for the one thing I hate, I'm sorry my dear but your eyes are      just      too      blue!


03/22/16

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James Inman August 24, 2016 at 11:31 AM What a silly one you chose to read Lynn. Please keep in mind this was not meant to correctly follow form. I wish I could think of some witty response to your lovely comment, alas, it is not within me this morning.

Eileen Manassian April 28, 2016 at 11:21 AM OH Dear...I though this would be passion pleasure! Good chuckle, though. Thanks for your recent visit to my work and your encouraging words. James Inman April 28, 2016 at 2:07 PM "Lost In You" http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/lost_in_you_768184 if you are interested. James Inman April 28, 2016 at 2:05 PM A little satire Eileen, perhaps "Lost In You" would better suit your tastes, thanks for the visit.

Lenny Gazbowski April 2, 2016 at 9:00 PM Nicely penned James, thanks for the chuckles :-) James Inman April 3, 2016 at 12:07 AM Thanks Lenny, appreciate the visit.

Andrea Dietrich March 27, 2016 at 6:10 PM haha. GREAT parody. I thought you were making love to a troll or a hobbit or something. James Inman March 27, 2016 at 7:10 PM Glad you enjoyed it, I was in a silly mood. Happy Easter to you Andrea.

Timothy Hicks March 23, 2016 at 1:26 AM I don't care that it doesn't follow form (it adds to the humor) ... I'm still imagining a man genuinely complaining about "too blue eyes" ... I think that with you and I, maybe things will start changing in the poetry world. I can see it now ... Ode to My Lady's Cleft Chin ... Terzanelle For a Toenail. She Nose How to Draw Me Close. Longing For That Sweet Elbow. James Inman March 23, 2016 at 5:58 AM Thanks for the inspiration Timothy. Glad you enjoyed it. How about "No one can touch me like you, and your four thumbs."

Timothy Hicks March 23, 2016 at 1:17 AM OH my gosh! This was great, James. So happy to pass some zany inspiration your way. You had me laughing all the way through as you described the "all too realistic" Lady Love, of yours. "I just love the coarse hairs and, how subtly it glows. You sniffle so sweetly, as never ending it runs." Needless to say, I planted the seed, and you took to it extremes! An easy Fave (still laughing here) ...