If You Only Knew

From your invalid's bed
You pined for the beach
Too far out of reach
For weakened feet to tread

He gathered devotion for the quest
And packed obligation
Atop expectation
For your smile's beauty to express

He strained beneath the boulder's stack
As frost bitten wind sliced his skin
And fingertips split where blood ran thin
When that frigid mountain fought back

Then he rode on deserts of fire
Under the sunburned moon
He bridled the dunes
For your hopeful eyes he aspired

At last, salty sea allowed his descent
To glitter of exotic shores
Lustrous shells from wave filled floors
Captured in jars, mighty ocean's scent

Here is a man who follows through
But all you saw in your hand
A dirty case of sand
If you only knew, you fickle fool.

10/25/20
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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Brul Avatar
November 24, 2020 at 6:14 PM
Congratulations dear Michelle..A truly magnificent piece..
De Beaulieu Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 11:11 AM
Hello Michelle Faukner, yes if he only knew. Enjoy your day my friend.
Andresen Avatar
October 27, 2020 at 8:50 AM
Congratulations on your win, Michelle :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Seeker Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 8:52 PM
Wow! Congrats!
Roper Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 8:40 PM
Congratulations, Michelle , on your win! Hugs Eve
Koplin Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 5:24 PM
Congratulations on your win Michelle!
Faulkner Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 7:38 PM
Thank you, Mark.
Wolf Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 2:07 PM
Occasionally one meets up with a work of art or literature that is clearly quite profound. One then seeks to understand it, but somehow doesn't know quite what to make of it -- other than that it is superb... This is one of those occasions, Michelle. ~ Still seeking, Gershon
Faulkner Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 7:37 PM
This is actually based on an old fable I heard a long time ago, and the moral is 'The journey is part of the gift' - meaning the effort that is put into the gift is what does - or doesn't - make it special - and the gifts of your kindness and appreciation are something I value greatly, my friend~
Leffanta Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 12:06 PM
Well expressed difference between frigid and fried deserved more than a placement! Aloha! Rico
Faulkner Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 7:30 PM
This did swing from one extreme to the other, I guess!
Watt Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 11:39 AM
I'm thinking this has something to do with the thwarted anniversary seashore date? Your enclosed rhymes depicted so well the inherent risks of the outdoors along with the thrill of conquest. I loved the lines "To glitter of exotic shores / Lustrous shells from wave filled floors". Congrats on your win, Michelle, this is a new fave.
Watt Avatar
October 27, 2020 at 10:46 AM
There is an endurance race called 'Cactus To Clouds' that goes roughly 100 miles, starting at the lowest point on earth (Death Valley) to the highest point in the continental US (Mt. Whitney) that your poem kind of reminds of. I like the fable you referenced 'the journey is part of the gift'. I agree!
Faulkner Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 7:27 PM
Actually I wrote this about a year and a half ago, but never got around to posting it, so when this contest was posted I remembered it, had to fish through my old notebooks but I found it - I made a couple of small changes for the contest but otherwise it is the same, I'm glad you liked those lines (it was one I changed, to be honest)!
Y. Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 11:29 AM
Hi Michelle, Congratulations on your placement in the contest. Have a wonderful day:-) Alexis
Faulkner Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 7:23 PM
Thanks so much, Alexis.
Crabtree Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 10:04 AM
I agree with Silent One. She lost out on this one. A great poem expressed well! :)
Faulkner Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 7:17 PM
I appreciate your kind words, thank you!
One Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 9:20 AM
Damn.. looks like she missed out.. Congratulations on your placement..
Faulkner Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 7:15 PM
Thank you for the placement in your contest!
Theraven Avatar
October 25, 2020 at 9:33 PM
Michelle, Wonderful desert, mountain and sea in Enclosed Rhyme, this poem 'If you only knew'. A Fave with a smile. -Richard
Faulkner Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 7:14 PM
I am so touched by your generous comment, thank you so much~
Andresen Avatar
October 25, 2020 at 1:24 PM
- Great metaphorically written, Michelle :) - Best wishes for a win in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Faulkner Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 7:14 PM
Thanks, Anne-Lise, hugs back!
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