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If Only You Knew

If only you knew the feel of a zephyr,
With its current swooping around hillsides
Ruffling the spruce trees everywhere,
Or descend downwards towards verdant vales
Where flowers bloom all through the year.

If only you knew what the oceans utter
As wonderful waves smash into each other,
Or roll nonchalantly towards the bays,
Destroying sand castles or wiping up
The poor love letters which were written there.

If only you knew the various sounds of Earth,
The laughter of little children playing in our parks,
The parade of grown-ups commemorating feasts,
The sounds of aeroplanes fighting for supremacy,
Whilst on the ground tanks rumble on firing at will.

If only you knew the evil concocted by selfish persons,
Where kindness seems to be at a premium.
Yet I discern others who are compassionate
And help others less fortunate than themselves.
How grateful receivers of good works will be.

If only you knew how many angels fly above
Around the silver stars that orbit in perfect harmony.
Angels that care for this poor land which 
We have ruined successfully through our unwanted trash. 
While food is thrown away when others die in famine and pain.

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Hind Avatar
May 22, 2024 at 1:38 PM
Powerful questions, the truth hits hard- an enjoyable read
Williams Avatar
May 21, 2024 at 4:41 AM
Wonderful poetry dear Victor, a tapestry of finely woven words and imagery. I truly enjoyed it and so did the judge I see. Congratulations on your awesome win...Hugs
Ray Choudhury Avatar
May 20, 2024 at 2:39 PM
Congratulations on your top win, Dear Victor. Enjoyed your poem with vivid images in every line, and expressing kindness for the environment. Admire the emotional depth and concern for our Earth being destroyed by human actions. Best wishes ~
Buhagiar Avatar
May 20, 2024 at 10:23 PM
Thank you very much. Appreciate it.
Goldsmith Avatar
May 19, 2024 at 12:26 PM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your powerful/wonderful write. Great Ending & so true...  Enjoy your day, enjoy your win..................
Buhagiar Avatar
May 20, 2024 at 10:25 PM
Thank you, Paula. This poem was written in under two hours, with hardly a revision. Still I can't rhyme well enough.
Anaya Avatar
May 19, 2024 at 11:45 AM
Back with congratulations on your top win! xhugsx
Buhagiar Avatar
May 20, 2024 at 10:26 PM
Sweet Anaya, how can I thank you for your compliment? Hugs.
One Avatar
May 19, 2024 at 10:47 AM
This is one of your best poems dear Victor, I was touched by it... Your poem is a richly layered reflection on nature, human actions, and the moral choices that define our world. Its vivid imagery, thoughtful juxtapositions, and emotional depth invite readers to contemplate the beauty and complexity of the world around them. Congratulations on your first place in the contest..
Rose  Avatar
May 18, 2024 at 3:57 AM
If only we know we would surely cry Victor, how much wasted food we got, love this, winning wishes
DiMino Avatar
May 18, 2024 at 3:21 AM
For sure, Victor -- we waste and abuse. As a specie murder and defeat...ourselves really. No one gets to stay in heaven, till we all arrive together. A powerful write my friend. Well done.
Rolland Avatar
May 18, 2024 at 12:07 AM
wonderful poem, if onlythey knew, the world would be abetter place, i think, thans a lot Poet
Daniel Avatar
May 17, 2024 at 9:42 PM
A unique take on the theme, Victor:) well penned:)
Greenhough Avatar
May 17, 2024 at 9:42 PM
It is a wonderful poem. Good luck with the contest.
Bowring Avatar
May 17, 2024 at 9:17 AM
Dear Victor, such a wonderful, profound poem. ‘ If you only knew what the oceans utter’ ‘ the various sounds of earth’ ‘ how many angels fly above’ ‘ angels that care for this poor land’. A very well written, thoughtful and reflective read. The last two lines really stand out and are so true dear Victor. I like this unique take on the contest.Good luck in the contest. Have a lovely weekend with blessings.
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
May 17, 2024 at 2:47 AM
You've accomplished the English language respectfully, interspersed with immeasurable quality, Victor. Of the two similar phrased I've written--one of 'em is resigned to the Malta Int'l Airport lounge as reading material. Aloha, William
Roper Avatar
May 16, 2024 at 10:08 PM
So much imagery and feeling, especially the 4th stanza. Good luck... Hugs
Buehler Avatar
May 16, 2024 at 9:28 PM
Your amazing poem highlights the dire consequences of shortsightedness, selfishness and greed. A powerful, well wrought verse. Blessings.
Kendrick Avatar
May 16, 2024 at 3:18 PM
You brought out some good points that are on the front these days. Sometimes we get accustomed to our good life wherever it is or what is it composed of and forget about those less fortunate. Sad that we have so many wars going on at the present if only they could work out a peace treaty. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K
Empress Avatar
May 16, 2024 at 2:47 PM
Theres so much in this world that so many are too reluctant to see and seek beyond! What a powerful and profound take on the theme. Your poem is different and very deep and meaningful one that speaks volumes and is soul hitting! You definitely were inspired as always dear victor! A fave this is for me. Best wishes for the contest
Edmonds  Avatar
May 16, 2024 at 2:03 PM
Victor, apart from evil and selfish people, aeroplanes fighting for supremacy and ground tanks firing at will, I’m sorry for the angels too, I would love to know all the beautiful things you mention in this wonderful free verse poem… Beryl
Dietrich Avatar
May 16, 2024 at 1:17 PM
This could be a letter poem to aliens. I am sure they would be interested to know about the many aspects of earth. Well done, Victor.
Kavanagh  Avatar
May 16, 2024 at 11:03 AM
It’s all in here Victor, Nature, war, good, evil, love, greed, and spirituality, all happening at once on this incredible planet, feels like a huge science experiment sometimes, to leave them at it and see what happens, but hey that’s only my agnostic POV, great one for the contest all the best, cheers David
Anaya Avatar
May 16, 2024 at 10:51 AM
Victor this is the best poetry for the If You Only Knew, contest. I love the flow and feel of the zephyr breeze. There is a message behind each peaceful image we all share, then the truth of suffering endured by angels watching over us. Those who help people will be in perfect harmony as well. A winner in my mind xo
Pandit Avatar
May 16, 2024 at 10:46 AM
Delightfully exploring the world around us--your poem brings to fore superb imagery, Victor. A thoughtful journey-- weaving in emotions. I like your message throughout but especially in the last stanza.
Poet Avatar
May 16, 2024 at 9:58 AM
An awe-inspiring poetry that explores the juxtaposition of beauty and devastation in the earth, Victor, as well as the dichotomy between selfishness and charity. Your work delves into the natural aspects of Earth, human interactions, and moral challenges with vivid imagery and precise language.
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