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For PD's 'A Poet's Crush Collaboration Preferred ' Poetry Contest

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If only you knew . . . that day and night I think of you. But you are oblivious to how I feel. Is this love I’m feeling even real? If only you knew . . . that I try to have you always in my view. Whenever I’m at school, I watch you from the side. Sometimes I daydream you’re my groom and I’m your bride. If only you knew . . . when school gets out, I wonder what you do. I wonder about the places you might go, and the things that you enjoy. How I’d love to know! If only you knew . . . how I yearn to touch you; you don’t have a clue. Those warm brown eyes; your handsome face. Every inch of it, with my fingers I would trace. If only you knew . . . when I’m in your neighborhood, I pass through, hoping you might be outside your house, for me to see. If not, I wonder where it is that you might be. If only you knew . . . the many nights I play my records, feeling blue. knowing that for you, I probably do not exist, and only in my dreams, have we ever kissed.

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Date: 5/22/2024 5:03:00 PM
Andrea, indeed you captured how we can form a crush and fantasize over someone. I remember thinking in a similar fashion (silly me). Do you think this is just limited to young people and teens? I suppose it depends on brain wiring. Hopefully, we grow and become more reality based, but who knows.
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Date: 5/19/2024 12:52:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write. Guess teens will be teen. It is part of life...  Enjoy your day, enjoy your win..................
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Date: 5/19/2024 11:10:00 AM
I can see your feelings still remain.. Lovely poem.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 5/19/2024 7:42:00 AM
This is a great poem my friend. Written as would a true teenager, love it. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 5/17/2024 9:48:00 PM
Aww, teenage love at its height, beautifully written Andrea:)
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Date: 5/17/2024 12:06:00 PM
Andrea, you have really captured the ambivalent angst of a teenager's unrequited love, the daydreams and fantasies. This poem is so real. So many teens would relate to it as do adults who went through the same experiences as teens. Love the repetition of the theme at the beginning of each verse and your very creative rhyme scheme. Hope you are well! Blessings.
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Date: 5/17/2024 10:11:00 AM
Dear Andrea, I’m reading so many wonderful poems from this theme and enjoying them especially yours. I love this one on teenage love. We can all relate to this in some way. Like dear Sara, I too, love the structure of your poem as it gives the reader time to reflect on each stanza and the agony of young, unrequited love. Watching from afar, dreaming, hoping, hanging around, emotions of playing records, ( bringing back memories) You have poetically captured the angst of it all.
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Christina Bowring
Date: 5/17/2024 10:12:00 AM
Many of us reading will be nodding as we reminisce on youthful days. Really enjoyed it as always from you. Good luck in the contest. Hugs and blessings to you for a wonderful weekend. Xx
Date: 5/16/2024 5:22:00 PM
a delightful read, Andrea, and a perfect response to the contest. I like the way you structured your poem...it added a sort of frame around your words of unrequited love. Your poem reminds me of a couple of crushes I had many, many years ago. Best wishes with the contest, hugs, Sara
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/16/2024 6:36:00 PM
Thanks. And yes, I bet many women here had crushed like this one I described. Actually I saw this guy at 50th HS reunion. I told him I had a crush on him back in jr. High and I was bold enough to tell him I knew where he had lived and he said. Oh so you were stalking me? Hahahs
Date: 5/16/2024 3:09:00 PM
A love that fills your dreams with delight, Very nicely penned
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/16/2024 6:36:00 PM
Thanks
Date: 5/16/2024 2:47:00 PM
Andrea, Love, grace, and poetry have the power to change the world, and your moving words show how this is possible. Your lyrical poetry is like sunshine: it dispels all shadows and spreads delight.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/16/2024 6:36:00 PM
Thanks, Sotto
Date: 5/16/2024 10:26:00 AM
The longing and the unrequited love that flows throughout this heartfelt poem truly is soul touching! I felt the depth of emotions youve conveyed here in a very descriptive manner dear andrea. Especially that opening line really stood out for me! Pleasure reading your take. Best wishes for the contest! Youv written a very heartfelt poem
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/16/2024 1:19:00 PM
Thanks, I think all girls have these feelings in their teenage years.
Date: 5/16/2024 10:19:00 AM
The two poems on this subject which I've read are personal. Mine goes outside its shell. Which is best? Yours is the result of your great talent, full of emotion, and love. You still have memories of your childhood love. Time to stop feeling blue. Best for a win, you deserve it. Hugs.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/16/2024 1:21:00 PM
don't worry. I am not feeling blue. if I am thinking of the right poem, that other one is just made up. This one here is how I felt for many of the crushes I had throughout my high school and junior high school years. It's hard to love someone that does not even say a word to you! Let's see one of yours that is personal, Victor. I am sure you have written some already!
Date: 5/16/2024 9:51:00 AM
nICE ROMANTIC POEMS. rEMINDS ME OF MY YOUNGER DAYS.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/16/2024 1:21:00 PM
Yes, and it should for many of us!
Date: 5/16/2024 8:28:00 AM
andrea - you have portrayed teenage love perfectly! i so remember having those feelings. wonderfully written!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/16/2024 1:21:00 PM
thanks, I bet you recall those days. They are magical days but also filled with heartbreak.

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