Richard Lamoureux Poet Diminished Hexaverse

If Only I Loved Myself

She looked at my face
Searching for a smile
There's no hint of joy
Lonely in my eyes
Filled with my heartache

My dreams broken
My lover left
Walking away
Leaving me here

Who could love
Broken me
When I loathed

Myself
My sad

Self

Diminished Hexaverse Contest

First time writing this form, hopefully got it right.

No worries this is an empathic excercise not something I am going through.

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Eileen Manassian January 21, 2015 at 10:57 PM I'm glad it is fictitious because you are so worthy of love....You are loved by so many here.... :) Me included....never forget that. Hugs

Red Fiery August 13, 2013 at 9:13 PM Gosh ! i can't get tired reading your poems...Who could love Broken me When I loathed ...i have experienced this..:( Beautiful again ! Richard Lamoureux August 14, 2013 at 7:00 AM I wrote a poem for my book called Gods Mirror. If we see ourselves through Gods Mirror we will see ourselves as truly Lovable.

Shaz Cheesman July 19, 2013 at 9:32 PM Hey Rick - i admire your commitment to poetry and the many different styles.....I really like this poem......Maybe i should try this style....Shaz Richard Lamoureux August 14, 2013 at 6:58 AM Thanks Shaz

Richard D Seal July 18, 2013 at 2:43 PM Don't know about the form Rick, I'm hopeless at all that but others seem happy with it so well done. Thanks for the nighty night, the time difference does play havoc with those though lol. Take care, Richard Richard Lamoureux July 19, 2013 at 7:03 AM Thanks Richard, always appreciate your visits.

Jack Jordan July 18, 2013 at 1:18 PM I'm relieved to know this isn't happening in your life. It should do well in the contest... Jack Richard Lamoureux July 19, 2013 at 7:04 AM Thanks Jack, you are kind, I am glad as well.

Colleen Bono July 17, 2013 at 5:39 PM I am ready to come home. I wouldnt be if I wasnt so sick. Pretty sure I have pnemonia again. Love Colleen Richard Lamoureux July 17, 2013 at 5:46 PM So sorryto hear that Colleen.

Yanny Widjanarko July 17, 2013 at 8:44 AM Riiicckkk so somber :( but still stunning as usual :D have a cheer up mood to my page, I just made a new post today :D hehehe Wishing you a pleasant day today :D hug, hug, hug, Yanny :D Richard Lamoureux July 17, 2013 at 8:48 AM Thanks Yanny, I will go and read.

Barbara Gorelick July 16, 2013 at 9:37 PM whew, glad to read the notation. I think you got the form just right. BG Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2013 at 9:43 PM Thanks Barbara. I am glad as well *lol*

Andrea Dietrich July 16, 2013 at 4:57 PM way to do it. It seems to be done right. Oops, I just saw a mistake, friend. She couldn't love, needs to be three syllables. You better check them over! Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2013 at 9:14 PM Thanks Andrea I missed that one.

Sara Kendrick July 16, 2013 at 4:15 PM I hope just a write about a topic..Enjoyed reading your work using the Dimished Hexaverse Form..Thanks for stopping by with congrats..Sara Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2013 at 9:14 PM Yes, not autobiographical.

Donna Jones July 16, 2013 at 10:23 AM Aahhh. Very familiar....nice writing Richard ..have a great day! Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2013 at 9:16 PM Thanks so much Donna

Poet Tacito July 16, 2013 at 8:57 AM I"m not too familiar with this form, but I still believe it was a tremendous read. I loved the mood you set here. Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2013 at 9:17 PM New to me as well Drake.

Eileen Manassian July 16, 2013 at 8:52 AM Lots of chages from the original....the title....the focus...what inspired the change???? I'm trying ti figure out which I like more.....Great write....We are all cracked..... Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2013 at 9:18 PM Us guys just never learn do we? Eileen Manassian July 16, 2013 at 9:06 AM :-D I did that once.....learned my lesson the hard way... Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2013 at 8:56 AM I read the rules for the contest so I had to change it to match the category. Lol I can't tell you how may times I have had to do that. Like most men I never read the instructions.