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Why crying over a terminal patient made me a better doctor - Chicago Tribune

If Only

the red ran ...
trickled slowly from mouth's
corner down to where it
disappeared beneath the collar of
the little boy's SpongeBob
t-shirt -
bleached white turning crimson ...
the streak wound
its bloody path across cooling
cappuccino skin, a tender
surface that only
moments earlier was aglow with
the salty sweat of play -
tingling with the soft breath
of afternoon ...
the doctor watched
another rill of blood run south
on the child's neck as he
cradled the wee, limp body in his arms
and thought, (in irony), how its
weaving traces reminded
him of the soft, gentle sweep of a
cob swan's wake ...
the early-morn pattern left
in the glassy surface of the lake
where he once lived
as a lad ...
where this beautiful, broken
child might have been -
should have been, certainly - were it
not for the chances of birth
and the horrid, senseless
accursed hand ...
of war.
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Goldsmith Avatar
January 30, 2021 at 12:13 PM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! A sad yet wonderful write. Enjoy your win/day with blessings....................
Radice Avatar
January 29, 2021 at 3:22 AM
A write that is as poignant as it is brilliant Gregory. "All war is a symptom of man's failure.." (Steinbeck)
Lindley Avatar
January 24, 2021 at 12:05 PM
You my friend have nailed it! Such a heart wrenching imagery presented on the senseless tragedy that is-WAR! Even more so the sorrow of its costs upon the innocent, the children. A truly great poem. And a fav..
Barden Avatar
January 25, 2021 at 2:23 AM
Many kind thanks to you, Robert, for this wonderfully heart-felt comment - it means a great deal to me - so pleased you enjoyed this one. Blessings!
Theraven Avatar
January 23, 2021 at 10:40 AM
Gregory, A poem called 'if only'; a fitting name. Dragged me out of my comfort zone for a moment. Though images have desensitized us, your poem put me right there in the moment. -Richard
Barden Avatar
January 25, 2021 at 2:22 AM
This is a very kind and honest comment, my friend, and I so greatly appreciate it. Blessings to you for a wonderful 2021! :o)
Ibeh Avatar
January 19, 2021 at 10:52 AM
Ah, amazing stuff! Your presence here is refreshing, Greg:-) I'm so glad you drop by here with stellar poetry every now and then, my friend!
Barden Avatar
January 25, 2021 at 2:21 AM
Thanks, Buddy - I DO miss this place all-in-all, and a few people like yourself who don't require comments for friendship. Blessings to you, my friend! I'm finally getting over my Covid! :o)
Mcintosh Avatar
January 19, 2021 at 5:51 AM
Wow. so sad and startling, a gasp of putrid smoky air filled with dread and grief and staggering gulps of pain. Wow. such a poem - God bless you my friend
Barden Avatar
January 25, 2021 at 2:18 AM
Thank you so very much, Gina - blessings. <3
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