If I Were An Elephant

If I were an elephant
I would marry my mahout man
Would fly very high
Up in the blue sky
Then fall down in a skeleton
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12/12/2016

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Date: 12/23/2016 6:16:00 AM
You may intended to convey a message too. I don't want spoil it. I simply laughed with my family. Thanks for sharing it with us. Poor animal, anyway.
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Date: 12/21/2016 2:22:00 PM
Stopped back to make this a Favorite. I think "Escape" though that does not have to be to make this poem. For a person to be an elephant would be an escape, and to marry the mahout would be too, because of course that's not what elephants can do, usually, and then to escape the earthly bonds and gravity, later to escape even life itself. Probir, I think this earth is indeed our paradise.
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/23/2016 7:54:00 PM
Perhaps the elephant wants a chance to turn the tables, so to speak.... :: laughing... ::
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/21/2016 11:18:00 PM
You have interpreted it your way which is indeed beautiful ... As far as I know an elephant vis a vis his Mahout , the elephant , if given a chance , would very much like to ... ... ... And if quenched, fall or float matters not much ... Thank you ...
Date: 12/13/2016 12:15:00 AM
7! Probir, I love this. There are many reasons, and I'm tempted to get very wordy about them, yet I could hammer away for a long time and still there would be hidden essences.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/14/2016 4:22:00 AM
The way you multi-interpret it, my poem is more rewarded than 'placement' ... thank you ...
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/13/2016 12:47:00 PM
"Then fall down in a skeleton" - I thought of this many times today. I can't explain it; it's like a painting or other visual art that entrances you without you being sure why.
Date: 12/12/2016 12:25:00 PM
wonderful take on the theme, probir..huggs
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/12/2016 11:47:00 PM
Thank you ...
Date: 12/12/2016 9:30:00 AM
Very nice lim'rik, Probir, plus I learned a word I didn't know — mahout. May your skeleton land in paradise! ~ john
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/12/2016 9:47:00 AM
Not mine ... But the poet's ... For me this gross earth is more than paradise ... Ha ha ... Thank you ...
Date: 12/12/2016 5:16:00 AM
Clever limerick Probir:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/12/2016 6:26:00 AM
Thank you, Jan ...
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