If I Were An Elephant

If I were an elephant
I would marry my mahout man
Would fly very high
Up in the blue sky
Then fall down in a skeleton
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12/12/2016
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Ranaweera  Avatar
December 23, 2016 at 6:16 AM
You may intended to convey a message too. I don't want spoil it. I simply laughed with my family. Thanks for sharing it with us. Poor animal, anyway.
Vinson Avatar
December 21, 2016 at 2:22 PM
Stopped back to make this a Favorite. I think "Escape" though that does not have to be to make this poem. For a person to be an elephant would be an escape, and to marry the mahout would be too, because of course that's not what elephants can do, usually, and then to escape the earthly bonds and gravity, later to escape even life itself. Probir, I think this earth is indeed our paradise.
Vinson Avatar
December 23, 2016 at 7:54 PM
Perhaps the elephant wants a chance to turn the tables, so to speak.... :: laughing... ::
Gupta Avatar
December 21, 2016 at 11:18 PM
You have interpreted it your way which is indeed beautiful ... As far as I know an elephant vis a vis his Mahout , the elephant , if given a chance , would very much like to ... ... ... And if quenched, fall or float matters not much ... Thank you ...
Vinson Avatar
December 13, 2016 at 12:15 AM
7! Probir, I love this. There are many reasons, and I'm tempted to get very wordy about them, yet I could hammer away for a long time and still there would be hidden essences.
Gupta Avatar
December 14, 2016 at 4:22 AM
The way you multi-interpret it, my poem is more rewarded than 'placement' ... thank you ...
Vinson Avatar
December 13, 2016 at 12:47 PM
"Then fall down in a skeleton" - I thought of this many times today. I can't explain it; it's like a painting or other visual art that entrances you without you being sure why.
Onclaud Avatar
December 12, 2016 at 12:25 PM
wonderful take on the theme, probir..huggs
Gupta Avatar
December 12, 2016 at 11:47 PM
Thank you ...
Flats Avatar
December 12, 2016 at 9:30 AM
Very nice lim'rik, Probir, plus I learned a word I didn't know — mahout. May your skeleton land in paradise! ~ john
Gupta Avatar
December 12, 2016 at 9:47 AM
Not mine ... But the poet's ... For me this gross earth is more than paradise ... Ha ha ... Thank you ...
Allison Avatar
December 12, 2016 at 5:16 AM
Clever limerick Probir:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
Gupta Avatar
December 12, 2016 at 6:26 AM
Thank you, Jan ...
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