If I were an Angel

This is a great way to start off a day
Maybe one day a light can be used 
To show I'm more than just a simple human
Have you seen a heart so pure of hatred? 
Removed the toxins inflicted by others 
Remember the way she said or he said
A certain trigger that was reminded of 
Once upon a time, it felt somewhere hurtful
But now she's grown so bright
A dim light showed at the very end 
Grieving she hid her wings 
Now she understands what maturity meant
It's to realise we have our flaws 
Some things never change but could we say?
That it's more than that
Like a river that started when she cried 
Could you meet her at the very end of the tunnel
She's drowning currently
If she had wings, she could climb out.
Can we say something?
If I were an angel,I'd be less traumatized.

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Date: 11/28/2024 3:35:00 PM
I adore this - bravo!
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Date: 10/28/2024 7:05:00 AM
Thanks for sharing this... exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Welcome to Poetry Soup. I welcome you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.
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Date: 10/26/2024 12:17:00 PM
Hey Daniya, a great big welcome to PS. Awesome first post. Keep 'em comin'
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Date: 10/26/2024 9:33:00 AM
Hey Daniya... Your poem reads like a journey through struggle toward understanding, using a blend of dark and hopeful imagery to convey the complexity of personal growth. The speaker's reflections on maturity and trauma ultimately suggest that resilience and self-acceptance are born out of facing both darkness and light within.
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Date: 10/26/2024 9:57:00 AM
You've got it right on the mark! Yes I was trying to portray a personal growth.Its not an easy journey for anyone to grow out of pain. I'm glad you took note on maturity and the trauma. They were certainly highlighting what you've mentioned. Self acceptance is not easy to achieve, through resilience we can see ourselves as more than what we are from pain.Thank you for your comment.
Date: 10/26/2024 8:56:00 AM
Dear Daniya xxx, your poignant verses are woven with an exquisite juxtaposition of beauty and angst. Your last line is especially impactful for a potent finale. A soul-baring, amazing piece. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 10/26/2024 9:59:00 AM
Thank you so much for your deep appreciation on my piece. It was a struggle weaving it together, so it's truly beautiful to see you pointing the impact out of the lines. I'm so glad the depth was shown so beautifully. Best of wishes to you too!
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